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I.we weren’t looking for Kevin Bacon,
weren’t trying to find a way--
it was just ten steps
to no one in particular.
II.
looking for damn connections,
screw chaos theory.
I’m gonna find me some sense.
III.
less than three percent of potential
muggers or
rapists are willing to commit murder
if you are in a situation where you feel that such a person
committing such a crime on you is possible
turn around
make eye contact
put them in the situation where they’d have to kill you
to get away with it
most will just walk away
and if they don’t, then you were fucked anyway
IV.
thanks,
Dad,
V.
Mom has empty nest syndrome
so she bought a bird.
A parakeet, to be more exact,
a small lime green parakeet that she chats with
over coffee
reading the newspaper
singing and dancing her disco times when no one else is home
she calls him Fibonacci
[Fibby or Fibster for short]
and she sings him the sequence
so he will know the way
but I call him Fibs
VI.
yeah, I gotcha
shaddup, don’ worry ‘bout it
naw, man, I’m sfine
yesh, I can walk ‘ome-myself
ssssssssssssstoppit, I’m sfine
naw, dude, naw
I’m caaaaaaaaaalllllllllling you on yer-lies
VII.
Hey, man, don’t be startin’ something you can’t finish, you know what I’m sayin’?
Naw, dude, I’m serious.
Back up offa me.
What, you think we’re playin’?
This ain’t no game show.
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Comments: 27
ZaraMoro [2008-03-12 04:30:12 +0000 UTC]
hey this is kinda random,
so while writing a small one page short the statistic from stanza three just came to mind as the most perfect thing for a character to think. so i wrote it in.
i was hoping to post the story here but i wanted permission because of the line. ill definitely credit it to you, i just wanted to know.
ok hope to here from you soon. if you dont answer ill probably post it and credit you anyway.
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foils [2007-11-29 07:07:43 +0000 UTC]
I adore it until the last two stanzas. They just rub me the wrong way for some reason. I can't seem to make them click in with the rest of the poem in my mind.
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aboundingmist [2007-11-29 05:46:25 +0000 UTC]
I felt like I was watching a montage through words. Magnificent!
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Krensada [2007-11-29 04:18:54 +0000 UTC]
I don't know exactly what to make of this...
Am I supposed to?
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lordlossxz [2007-11-29 03:42:56 +0000 UTC]
oooh
me like
a lot, like, its really good
i couldnt tell you which is my favorite section but i really liked it...
i prolly like V the best
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Squarix [2007-11-29 03:27:01 +0000 UTC]
"Mom has empty nest syndrome
so she bought a bird." That was my favourite line out of the whole thing, I think
And congratulations on the DD, by the way
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Shutterscoop [2007-11-29 03:09:04 +0000 UTC]
I love how creativity can be created or inspired by just another day...
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vivid-surreality [2007-11-29 02:17:28 +0000 UTC]
i felt like i was sitting in a coffee house when i was reading it... awesome job
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Pabbit-da-rabbit [2007-11-29 00:40:49 +0000 UTC]
This was really interesting to read. Reminded me of stream of consciousness. Nice job and congrats on the DD!
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LadyLazrus [2007-11-28 21:38:39 +0000 UTC]
I adore this unabashed, avant-garde style, a bizzare cocktail of potent images and colloquial speech pattern and have written some myself. Well done on this
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sackermanmo [2007-11-28 17:32:07 +0000 UTC]
And so oddly worth the DD designation! It's like the realistic version of that I learned everything I need to know in kindergarten. Cool!
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ZaraMoro [2007-11-28 16:47:35 +0000 UTC]
gorgeous.
love the plays with different spoken styles.
talk about taking slices of life and lining them up on a platter.
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mira-mcgrath [2007-11-28 15:24:35 +0000 UTC]
yay! catherine on i'm so proud of you. you know i love your work. and congrats on the DD
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PsychoactiveTV [2007-11-28 14:54:55 +0000 UTC]
Style is very neat, indeed.
I really liked number III.
Sounds kind of cynical but i like it :]
congrats on the dd!
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l-chan-sama [2007-11-28 12:37:17 +0000 UTC]
This was fun to read--I really enjoyed the different rhythms and tones in each.
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childoftheuniverse [2007-05-15 17:46:56 +0000 UTC]
yup, part III does it for me.
i think maybe some of my wires have been cut, i'm not sure I'm getting the whole story, and I'm left a bit in want for the rest of it
but I like this style. and the sad mystery of it
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diamondie [2007-01-18 18:29:07 +0000 UTC]
It seems very random at first but still sounds awesome from the beginning. I don't know how it could be critiqued because it's just brilliant. V has to be my favorite as well, with I and III close behind.
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creightonwrites [2006-12-22 04:29:22 +0000 UTC]
V? Nah, III. I think this is fucking incredible.
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Pinocchio-Liez [2006-11-13 21:47:47 +0000 UTC]
This very well writen indeed. Each new stanza adds a new layer to the richness of the poem. Also...the first four seem to be the perfect build up to the inevitable fight scene at the end. Very well done indeed {My Sexy Italian}!!
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somnomollior [2006-11-12 19:00:56 +0000 UTC]
V. is my favourite too!
I like the casual, chatty style of these.
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