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Published: 2001-08-30 17:00:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 168; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 19
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Description Huddled in a corner of
my mind I scribe my thoughts.
Poems full of truth and love,
feelings recent, yet forgot.
Trying not to feel the pain
words a jumble in my head.
Fighting thoughts of past mistakes
wishing sometimes I were dead.

I hear sound of pounding nails
as tears begin to freely flow.
Looking for the source and fail
as pain creates a crimson glow.
Searching, searching for the sound
rythmic, haunting, calling me.
The hammer strikes and shakes the ground
and from my hands begin to bleed.

Tears become a raging stream
sweeping hope and dreams away.
Is it real or just a dream?
The pain reminds me every day.
Hear the clashing, closer now
and I begin to understand.
As tears turn into rusty nails
I see the hammer in my hand.
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Comments: 7

btrsweet [2001-09-02 03:11:56 +0000 UTC]

very flowy.. like everyone mentioned.. i like it

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babysista [2001-08-30 21:01:24 +0000 UTC]

wow... wowwowwow.... great rhyming. very very nice imagery. wonderful use of metaphors and twists in the story. very nice flow.

::: Life is a privilige... not a curse... live it like it is.


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sanguru [2001-08-30 17:36:23 +0000 UTC]

rhyming. bleck. So damn good. Excellent poem. I just love the way you have written this. Such imagery, it really opens the poem up and shows the hidden emotions in it. Beautiful Wes, always a great poem by you. I love it.

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matrix7 [2001-08-30 17:25:14 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I have actually been trying to writer as of late where you pay more attention to the content than the rhyming or uses of phrases. I want people to get so involved in the poem that they really experience and feel it more than read it.

Thanks for the encouragement!

::Matrix7::
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angels-kiss [2001-08-30 17:21:07 +0000 UTC]

I lke the way this flows as well. It is well written and very emotional....well done

*MUAH*

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angels-kiss [2001-08-30 17:20:32 +0000 UTC]

I lke the way this flows as well. It is well written and very emotional....well done

*MUAH*

visit paper-dreams and share.
http://paper-dreams.digitalgothic.com/pd _enter.html

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----josh---- [2001-08-30 17:08:00 +0000 UTC]

I love the flow of this, it has a real rythmic quality to it. It flows so well, that you dont even notice that it rhymes. Does that make sense If not, just ignor eme, Im off to bed

Psalm 139:13

For you created my inmost being. You knit me together in my mothers womb.

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