btrsweet [2001-09-02 03:10:52 +0000 UTC]

not bad not bad, considering it's another 'real' poem... and i love the last three lines

i dunno if it's just me, or does the first line (Raw aggression, with no provocation) seem a bit odd? - rhythm wise, that is - compared w/ lines 2-4... hmm.. i guess i shouldn't be the one commenting on that though - i've always been one for freeverse...

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----josh---- [2001-08-30 05:21:48 +0000 UTC]

hehehe

"Growling, with no voice"

Are you married or in a long time relationship dude? Cause if so, you know that that is the scariest growl of all....

Psalm 139:13

For you created my inmost being. You knit me together in my mothers womb.

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sanguru [2001-08-30 04:53:12 +0000 UTC]

very nicely said. *pokes the rage* Shoo. Leave Wes alone.

Great emotion, me likes your experiments. Keep up the good work.

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