btrsweet [2001-09-02 03:07:52 +0000 UTC]

hehe i like "real" poetry... and i love how the 1st letter of each line spells 'stronger'.. (wouldn't have caught it if you didn't mention it to me before )

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matrix7 [2001-08-30 11:25:43 +0000 UTC]

The reason this one is raw and loose is I was on the way home (doing 70 down the highway) when my writer's block went away and I got all three of those I submitted yesterday in the car. It was funny. I was like "AAAH" and reach in the back seat to get my poem book.

I have an hour drive to work so I had a few stop lights, but the rest was while driving. Also, I am surprised nobody has mentioned something about this poem (me points to the first letter of each line).

That is the whole reason I wrote this one. I dont like my poems this raw but I figured I would put up a couple of "real" ones so you all could see the real me before I get to refining and rhyming them. Just being transparent a little today I guess. And no, I hate Bristeny Spears so to use her lyrics would borderline blasphemous.

OOH! Good idea! Gotta go write! TTFN
::Matrix7::

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----josh---- [2001-08-30 05:25:09 +0000 UTC]

hmmm, waiting for you to say in an Arnie voice "I'll be back"...

Nice imagery here..

Psalm 139:13

For you created my inmost being. You knit me together in my mothers womb.

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sanguru [2001-08-30 04:47:13 +0000 UTC]

Are you stronger then life? or does that continue to crush you?

Well, very nice poem. Captures some of my thoughts well(though they are thoughts before defeat). I love this poem. keep up the great work.

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question silence.

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palee [2001-08-30 04:37:17 +0000 UTC]

Whew...thanks for not having BSpears lyrics...some nice imagery here. Might be better if it was more refined. Nightmare fearing you...I really liked that one...

Thx,
the pale E

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