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Published: 2015-11-24 07:16:29 +0000 UTC; Views: 10156; Favourites: 298; Downloads: 11
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*Takes place after Beyond The Known Universe*He was in his room, at his desk as he pulled out his secret journal Diary which says "Keep away! Especially YOU MIKEY!!". He grabbed a pen, and sat there... thinking... until he finally knew what to write
"Dear Master Splinter,
I remembered the last time I saw you a few weeks ago... as a body with no soul...
I hope you are doing well now, at least... for the 6 months Earth has left
I just want to say... I'm sorry
I'm sorry... for not taking your advice seriously. Yeah I know, you told me to control my temper, not to be rude, not to harm others when it isn't necessary, not to seek revenge... I get it now... you didn't want me to end up like the Shredder...
I'm sorry... for all the times I had argued with you, I still remember a few years back, I threw my bowl of ramen and smashed it against the floor and screamed in front of you and my brothers during dinner because I didn't want to listen to what you had to say about my actions. Yeah,I know, I was acting stupid...
I'm sorry... for not being there when you needed us most, like the time you were defeated by Shredder as he threw you into the flushing pool... we could have saved you if we got there sooner...
*tears start forming in his eyes*
I'm sorry... for not being there during the time of your deathbed... I never did get to hold your hand and give you strength to face death... that was the most regretful day of my life... I never get to whisper... "Thank you, for everything " into your ear before you were gone... your death was similar to your wife's... Tang Shen...You never got to say the last important words to your loved one… and now I know how you feel… And I never knew it hurts really bad… I never knew…
*He allowed his hot tears to fell... sobbing quietly...*
Thank you... father
Thank you for raising me
Thank you for providing the care I needed
Thank you for all the lessons you had taught me
*he looked up, tearing, gazing at the stars.. his vision is now in blur... his face felt really warm, he sniffled...*
And now, I have this 1 out of 99% chance for me to reverse this incident... and by the time you see me, I will be the son that will make you proud...like you always wanted. We will start over again"
“I Love You…”
-Hamato Raphael-
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Thanks for reading this lil drabble of mine in Raphael POV . Haha, English isn't my first language , so I'm sorry for any stupid grammatical mistake
And I shall give you the moral: “You never know how much you love your family until you lost them… so treat them with the best manner when they are still here”
Also this is my first realistic drawing I had done... And man... it took me almost a week. So many tutorials I have to look up, as well as brushes to download... Even till the point when I started to wonder "why did I started this painting again?" Haha.
I also made a speedart for this (not full but some parts), I might consider to upload if you guys want. Also if you want to know the tutorials I used is here: myrza289.deviantart.com/favour…
I'm terrible at backgrounds ... and tears
A feedback would be nice
Here's part of my speed art: www.youtube.com/watch?v=_XxrGZ…
This is a redraw from the official episode: sta.sh/01656bxavdgq
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Comments: 76
myrza289 In reply to ??? [2015-11-25 00:29:56 +0000 UTC]
Thanks a lot yes, it was meant to be heartbreaking... I'm evil
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Dominique-Lefalle In reply to myrza289 [2015-11-25 01:38:40 +0000 UTC]
I'm evil as well, you should see what I do to my characters.
I have a feeling my readers are going to be upset with me
come the end of my story.
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SophiSparklePoppin [2015-11-24 15:34:22 +0000 UTC]
It Gonna make me to cry to the death..
But good artwork(s) By the way!
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myrza289 In reply to SophiSparklePoppin [2015-11-25 00:26:44 +0000 UTC]
Come here give me a hug and Thank you very much! "
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RavenshellRorschach In reply to ??? [2015-11-24 14:07:39 +0000 UTC]
Your art is incredible, and the accompanying story's not bad either! The grammar's not perfect, but you got your point across. (I've seen worse from some native English writers, to be honest...) You'll want to use 'advice' instead of 'advises' (the plural of 'advice' is 'advice', btw). One takes or seeks revenge, and I think you meant "Thank you for raising me," (rearing, caring for through childhood) instead of 'raising me up' (elevating). There's a few times where you use the wrong tense for things, but I'll only get into those if you want me to point them out... I know my grammar nitpicking isn't always welcome.
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myrza289 In reply to RavenshellRorschach [2015-11-24 14:32:22 +0000 UTC]
Oh wow thank you very much! No, I don't mind getting my English corrected, go ahead " Helps me learn this difficult language...
"(I usually ask my english teacher to critic/correct my english essays for any homework/project haha )
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RavenshellRorschach In reply to myrza289 [2015-11-24 15:35:40 +0000 UTC]
No problem. I know how complex and ridiculous English can be.
Generally, you want your verbs to be in the same tense.
He grabbed a pen, and sat there... thinking... until he finally knows what to write. - knew
I threw my bowl of ramen and smash it against the floor - smashed
I never did get to hold your hand and gave you strength - give (this is an odd one since it's a helping verb + main verb + 2 infinitives... to hold and (to) get, but the infinitives have to agree.)
You never get to say the last important words - got
the lessons you had thought me - taught
I didn't want to listen to what you had to say about my actions, yeah I know, I was acting stupid... - ...my actions[.] Yeah[,] I know, I was acting stupid...
your death(,) was similar to your wife['s] - comma unnecessary, and the possessive works better here... otherwise, technically, you're comparing his death and his wife, rather than his death and her death.
Let me know if you have ay questions about these; I'll be happy to explain things.
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myrza289 In reply to RavenshellRorschach [2015-11-25 01:18:38 +0000 UTC]
Thank you Verry Muuucchhh!!! You truly are a good friend! Thanks a lot for helping me out I think my only question is this part: "verb + main verb + 2 infinitives".
Oh Goshhh I need to learn more english from you next time, you're really good " Also, You can check again, I have updated it, if I miss anything out on tell me
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RavenshellRorschach In reply to myrza289 [2015-11-25 12:57:10 +0000 UTC]
You missed the fourth one: get -> got.
Right... With that one you've got four verbs: a helping verb (did), a main verb (get) and two verbs in infinitive form (to hold and [to] give). Since you already have a main verb, the rest of the verbs in the sentence have to be infinitives as well (to ----).
Feel free to contact me if you'd like your things beta'd in the future... That's like my purpose in the fandom. Makes me feel like I'm getting some use out of my degrees. -_-;
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myrza289 In reply to RavenshellRorschach [2015-11-26 03:01:29 +0000 UTC]
Thanks again for helping me
Oh I see, you have a degree in English grammar/literature? Thats awesome, you can have lots of opportunities for jobs with that skill. Like teaching people or helping out others~ I dunno, not everyone is good in English (like me XP) Anyways, I will contact you if I need any help one day Carry on your amazing works
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RavenshellRorschach In reply to myrza289 [2015-11-26 23:20:13 +0000 UTC]
A degree in English and another in Elementary Education... not planning on going back into teaching, though.
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AkiCalaRaika [2015-11-24 12:07:55 +0000 UTC]
This is the EXACT picture from the episode!!! Well done!
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AkiCalaRaika In reply to myrza289 [2015-11-24 12:24:18 +0000 UTC]
So you kinda colored the pic? So awesome yet creative.
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myrza289 In reply to AkiCalaRaika [2015-11-24 12:56:33 +0000 UTC]
You could say that its a redraw, I trace the pic and coloured it. some other artist does that, so I wanna try too~ but doing it even more realistic "
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Zelgadis55 In reply to ??? [2015-11-24 07:31:36 +0000 UTC]
Wow, amazing job. So beautifully sad...
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myrza289 In reply to Zelgadis55 [2015-11-24 09:41:37 +0000 UTC]
Thanks a lot~ Yes it is pretty sad...
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