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Published: 2004-10-01 04:05:23 +0000 UTC; Views: 5207; Favourites: 81; Downloads: 608
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ah!and
ha!
and just
!
!!
the pound and the thud and the gasp
captured in
! -
!!
and the italian gesture
the overwhelming
(! - !) verbose
physical - !
of clenched fists and swooping arms
oh!
-but this is
joy!
exuberance!
! -
love
!love!passion!life!
the sun !-gloriously! climaxes over the trees
the silent !-scream! of eyes
as they !-beam! and !-shine!
and - !
just - !
isn't it wonderful!
the fact
the exclamation
overriding any question
-a state of ecstasy confined to a mere dash and dot
it just is
a jump a dance a song
completely intangible
untouchable
-laughter
and surprise
and shock
-and laughter!
(the prelude to a smile)
it is the peak!
and the climax!
and !~vibrance!~ herself
!
but is also an acknowledgement
(in its silence)
of the silence
the
.
of afterwards
but that is tomorrow
and
! -
is now
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Comments: 197
-So wishes she had been able to disect poetry like that at college last year...- It would have made it so much more fun. You certainly have a talent and I'm not going to go on and on, everyone's said pretty much all that can be said. One thing I will say is... I may not be able to spout lots of fancy words and disect the poem like others... But I know what I like and I like it. Wonderful piece of work.
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thank you very much 
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You're more than welcome. As I was told in English, there are no rights and wrongs. And like you said yourself, as long as you can support what your saying, thats all that counts.
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makes more sense than i feel i do on my good days . . .
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It's so nice to see someone so new get so much recognition. As a newbie myself I just like to hope that maybe the lack of recognition for us is just due to the lack of knowledge and not to a lack of talent. Your sucess is hope that its not that were unskilled but just unoticed.
By the way, it is so nice to see a poem that does not average or written about love gone bad!
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oh yeah, i would definitely agree with that, i was just really fortunate to have someone take notice of me - by real chance it seems
(and thanks 
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Fun poem. One of my recent faves if I do say so myself.
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Whoa 
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oh gee whiz, thank you
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cool.. dunno what to say really.. this is very very new to me.. but i like it.
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thank you
and for future reference - with me you may say whatever you want/need/feel like like saying - just go for it!
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i liek the poem... but i cant understand it with all the !!!!!!!!!! in it... but i like the work....
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well thank you . . . but the ! are the real essence of my work
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Try reading aloud the piece. Really emphasize the punctuation, and I think you'll hear their uses quite clearly.
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wow i love it. as a poet it must have been a stretch to admit that words are not always enough... sometimes all you can say is -!-
my favorite lines:
oh!
-but this is
joy!
exuberance!
! -
...............and
a state of ecstasy confined to a mere dash and dot
it's not often that something in this virtual world makes me actually smile but this did... thanks for sharing.
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well i can't speak for anyone else besides myself . . . but one of the reasons that i am drawn to poetry is because linear words aren't always enough and i find that through poetry i have an easier time elucidating myself. my boyfriend will ask me questions and i frequently struggle to answer them because i don't feel words will always do what i want to say enough justice . . . *shrug* i love words, goodness, all languages - they're beautiful, i love even just the cncept of "communication," but there it is . . . communication extends beyond words and into the deeper intangibles of life . . .
but yes i agree, thanks
(sorry i have the tendancy to ramble sometimes . . . 
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I must be stupid, because while I see the words, I felt like that sorry frog in the arcade game that has to bounce all over the place just to get across the street.
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he's a sorry frog? 
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i'll give you allusions, allegories and alliterations.
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Hah! Excellent!
I especially loved the beginning of this, when you describe the thud, gasp, Italian gesture that is in a ! .. just marvellous. And this is extremely experimental and funny. Realy delightful that you got so much out of an exclamationpoint, and managed to convey your own feelings to so many others - making us see your point of view. Nice!
Good ending too by the way. May strike one as melancholic due to the highly contrastive nature to the rest of the poem, but it is just a little quiter, a little more contemplating. Still happy, still beautiful. Good job.
!
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thanks
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Oh man, that was great! I feel awake and alive after reading it. I'm so glad that they gave you a DD, cuz everyone needs to read this, it's better and more refreshing than coffee, and so full of joy! I wish I could send this to every english teacher that ever criticized my tendancy to overuse exclamation points
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i'm glad that you were able to derive such joy from it
(i was also a victim of english teachers who repressed exclamation points . . . 
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It's like revenge, heh
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haha . . . that's actually the the first real thought that crossed my mind, too . . .
the pressure is now on
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Lighten up, you gloomy sod!
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wow. this is the personification of breath, and shake. the "tremble" of things. Like love, excitement, joy, understanding, and even folding in at failure.
wonderland has apparently done you good.
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(and to borrow a word you used) wow . . . i am happy to have posted this just so that i had the opportunity to read your comment, here (not in relation to anything that i wrote) but in of itself - is beautiful
(thank you for any relation to this beautiful string of words you graced me with)
. . . and i haven't seen wonderland, but upon asking my friends about it they announced that when we all come home they would watch it with me
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It reminds me of Bloom's stream of conciensce (and truly an acceptation of life and punctuation)
Remar!able
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harold bloom? i am only familiar with his only literay criticisms . . . but i will definitely look into it - thanks
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I meant Leopold Bloom, from J.Joyce's Ulysses
surely a book to be read
You'll find a lot of punctuation games in that work
and whatnots alots
(=_
ahh yes . . . i suppose that that makes more sense
(i actually picked up ulysses -isn't it listed as number one in the cannon?- but with school i haven't had as much time to really read it as i would have liked . . . along with many others :/)
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Great!! I love how it jumps around and is so joyous. Perfect to get me motivated for the morning. I see nothing bad about it, and only great things.
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thank you very much
i had written this after pulling an all-nighter and it was just the jump-start-adrenaline-rsh that i needed to get my day going
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