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Published: 2003-09-06 22:17:42 +0000 UTC; Views: 60; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 14
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tears of sorrowtears of pain
tears of vengence
tears of gain.
tears that seem to ease my sorrow
and pull me through untill tomorrow.
holding back
not letting anyone in
pushing away friends
holding in the sin.
not being able to hold out much longer
the tears escape my eyes
and this will not make me stronger.
they would not understand because they are either beauitfull or smart
and sometimes seeing myself in a mirror breaks my heart.
the memories fade but pain still lingers here,
you will be able to see my sorrow,
when i shed a tear.
Comments: 2
OOOh,
Im taken by this, thats a very well written piece. I think the last two lines say it so well and really round the piece out very cleverly. Well done!
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I like the rhythem you started to develop in the beginning, and like that it had changed by the end, but so subtely that I did not realise it was different untill I went back to the beginnign to re-read it. Yay! *I like when that happens*. It drew me in, and expressed your sentiments quite well. I got a VERY clear picture of how you were feeling. Good Work *goes off to read other works of yours*
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