CartoonCrazy007 [2018-10-01 15:06:33 +0000 UTC]

Truly, wonderful piece. I admire your choice of words. They all symbolise some part of desire to let go from this painful world that continues to infinitely torture us to the day we rot in our graves. I can understand that tiredness; that need to let go from all responsibility... and just die. Needn't feel any more. Needn't care anymore. That is what is expressed here. To just... succumb to gravity.

Again, I love it.

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xLeah7x [2018-07-01 07:08:15 +0000 UTC]

Wow!  This piece is just...beautiful.  Despite the somber tone, the words seem to fit rather perfectly in tune with each other and I can deeply appreciate that.  My next comments on this literature is feedback that is based on my interpretation of your poetry and I recognize that it will possibly fall along some lines that you did not intend for it, emotionally.  However, the most beautiful part of art is that we can all perceive and interpret things so differently and effect people with our creations in different ways.

One of my favorite features within this particular poem is the shifting/added words with parentheses, brackets, etc., which shows a bit of chaos, suffocating emotion, and scatterbrained thoughts caused by those emotions. It also demonstrates that internal struggle to find just the right words to express one's feelings accurately to the rest of the world.

I absolutely adore the title, which shows that soft drifting of acceptance with the ellipses and makes the tone of the poem clear without even having to read it.  The image also prepares you for the poem's purpose, it is well chosen.  Overall, every small piece of this poem is placed together rather perfectly to make a wonderful puzzle and I don't think it could have been better implemented.  My favorite lines in this poem are:

"to no more skin that cares for nothing
stripped back with lies, ignorance, deception"

These two lines alone really accentuate how tired and done this person is with the world, demonstrating how worn down they have become and how they view the life around them.  It shows how dark things have fallen in their perception and also indicates a strong desire to let go, not only of that physical shell that seems to be holding them back, but also of the inner heart that has accepted death and wishes to give up and move on to a different way of existing or not existing.

It's wonderfully written, truly heart-wrenching, and definitely profound.  It says so much more with very few words and that demonstrates a true talent.  Thank you so very much for sharing this poem with us; I look forward to reading more of your work.

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EveryNextDream [2017-02-06 11:39:14 +0000 UTC]

It makes me so that you're submitting poetry here! Photographer-writer high five

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Postmorteum [2017-02-05 04:46:18 +0000 UTC]

I also use literature, especially poetry, as a therapeutic tool and it is indeed helpful, especially in tough times.

As for the piece itself, eloquently said. I like the way you discuss the subject. You don't criticize it, instead you translate it or try to understand it. 

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ARTificialphanTOM [2017-02-05 01:17:12 +0000 UTC]

Very powerful. But the first picture had me thinking of a pool diving because of the bare feet and tile. Most of the reason I make art is the therapeutic value. Nice work.

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