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Published: 2012-02-29 02:33:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 349; Favourites: 9; Downloads: 3
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- a tanka -[also]
- poem 1 - poem 2 -
puzzled perfection
observed in a cracked mirror
fractured psyche there
appeared kaleidoscopic
sorted psycho delicate
llp - feb2012 - dA
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like this one...allows the mind to paint its own interpretation...filling in the spaces
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thank you, Dove!
maybe it rates some work
to make it better, but that
it could be worse, i'll
probably leave it as is...
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You know best dear Pip, but I do love it as is. My pleasure
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i thought of him.
thanks for favin'
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clever - i like the way you play with words and structures. 
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thanks, and i'm still playin', Hanelle.
it might be finished now...
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"psyche delicate" worth the price of admission alone! Good stuff, here, all around!
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just me, playin' with my 'toys'...
thanks, Julie!
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wait, you might wanna take that back, Jack...
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nope, it is still as puzzling as it first was...
maybe even a bit more...
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it's still there, two lines up...
[i might switch them back]
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(yesyes, i meant i liked "psycho delicate" more; apologies.)
it works this way; no worries.
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you're right, Jack.
i swapped 'em back!
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thanks, Lisa - it even confuses me.
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On some level, I understand it totally. That scares me.
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Were the words poem 1 and 2 there before? I don't remember them.
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nope. i split the tanka into 2 poems,
to be read 3 different ways.
does it still seem to make sense to you?
it makes more sense to me now.
but, that may be delusion...
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I enjoyed it more when it didn't make obvious sense; it required a leap of faith (excuse the term) to understand it. But that's just me.
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you think it's 'obvious' now???
what comes to mind for me,
is, "too clever by half".
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