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Published: 2012-10-05 02:46:43 +0000 UTC; Views: 200; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 1
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Description She sits alone,
on a hard floor in a cold room.
Her hair is matted and her clothes are torn,
she doesn't know what she should do.

He is watching her,
he is wanting her,
he will not stop pulling her down.

She wants to leave,
to be let free,
but he won't let her go.

She is his now,
she has no choice,
after being snatched years ago.

With nothing to wear,
but a bit of cloth,
she crawls towards the door,
tries the knob but it's locked.

Her skin pale and dirty,
for sun has not graced her flesh in years.
She is a skeleton,
there is little food to eat,
and she has no money of her own.

The man is her only hope,
her only friend,
her only hate,
her only love.

Her entire exsistence is to only please him,
to do his dirty work for no reason.
She is nothing,
but he is everything.

He watches her sleep,
doesn't care if she weeps,
rapes her mind,
follows her behind.

She is nothing to him but his slave,
he is everything but the grave.

He whispers in her ear,
a long and harsh "I love you."
She fights her way out of his arms.
She is nothing,
but he is everything.
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Comments: 21

darlinjamie [2012-10-14 04:27:35 +0000 UTC]

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there's the link to the pic i made. it's nothing special. I rp/dev on a game called IMVU. The people shown are me and my Husband/Master while we both still avidly played on there

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babynips99 In reply to darlinjamie [2012-10-14 04:34:29 +0000 UTC]

thanks! i like it

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darlinjamie In reply to babynips99 [2012-10-14 04:41:30 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you do.

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BlazingPT [2012-10-13 23:11:45 +0000 UTC]

I loved the flow of this one, it keeps building and building tension until the end

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babynips99 In reply to BlazingPT [2012-10-13 23:15:58 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much! and thanks for the favorite and the watch!

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darlinjamie [2012-10-05 19:10:08 +0000 UTC]

Random question.... how old are you?? This soo reminds me of something very few people know about O.o This poem, both submissive and dominate at the same time. A submissive wanting her freedom, wanting out of the life yet knows no way but the life so knows not how to not be submissive. The kind of person that even if she broke free of that one would end up with another similar for that's all she knows. I will work on a picture for this one next.... and man do I have an idea for this b/c of some rping I used to do.

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babynips99 In reply to darlinjamie [2012-10-12 02:53:27 +0000 UTC]

I'm excited to see what you come up with!

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darlinjamie In reply to babynips99 [2012-10-12 04:06:58 +0000 UTC]

It's still forming in my head, been dealing with other things since today was my oldest son's b-day, he just turned four ^^. Should have something by the end of next week

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babynips99 In reply to darlinjamie [2012-10-12 04:14:01 +0000 UTC]

oh well i hope he had a great birthday!

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ALBDreamweaver [2012-10-05 03:02:26 +0000 UTC]

Interesting take. I tend to think of "Haunted" as more of a defiance song then a submission one, but that's not to invalidate your view of it. I like the work of it's own merits. I can truly feel the helplessness, and it has a nice progression to it.

THe end especially is excellent.

There are a few typos, though. Go through and fix those :
"there is little food to eatm"
"Her hair is mated and her clothes are torn,"

Other then that, though, I loved it! Although that is one of my least favorite evanescence songs ;_;

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babynips99 In reply to ALBDreamweaver [2012-10-05 03:03:35 +0000 UTC]

oh i fixed the typos. i'm not sure if it has updated it yet......

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ALBDreamweaver In reply to babynips99 [2012-10-05 03:04:27 +0000 UTC]

Not since I looked at it, no.

I just pointed it out so other didn't notice. It doesn't blur the meaning, and I didn't particularly care. I'm an awful typist myself.

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babynips99 In reply to ALBDreamweaver [2012-10-05 03:05:24 +0000 UTC]

haha thanks for letting me know though. and thanks for giving me some feedback

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ALBDreamweaver In reply to babynips99 [2012-10-05 03:06:44 +0000 UTC]

Of course. I'll go through the rest of your stuff shortly, if you'd like.

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babynips99 In reply to ALBDreamweaver [2012-10-05 03:06:59 +0000 UTC]

that would be great!

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ALBDreamweaver In reply to babynips99 [2012-10-05 03:07:55 +0000 UTC]

You're way,way too fast at replying.

Well, than I'll do it

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babynips99 In reply to ALBDreamweaver [2012-10-05 03:11:33 +0000 UTC]

haha just a fast typer i guess

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ALBDreamweaver In reply to babynips99 [2012-10-05 03:12:33 +0000 UTC]

No, -I'm- a fast typer

Getting on that now. Standby.

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ALBDreamweaver [2012-10-05 02:56:29 +0000 UTC]

*listens to song*

Standby. Real comment incoming.

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babynips99 In reply to ALBDreamweaver [2012-10-05 03:02:44 +0000 UTC]

okay, let me know what you think you may get a completely different meaning from it

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ALBDreamweaver In reply to babynips99 [2012-10-05 03:03:54 +0000 UTC]

See above comment, eh?

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