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October, and the
sky is on the ground again;
boats on a small sea.
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This is absolutely beautiful! I adore how simple this is, but yet still profound. Wonderful job!
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Thank you very much!
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I love that idea of the sky on the ground... very creative way of portraying the environment!
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Ahh, thank you so much! I'm glad you like it.
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This is a beautiful poem. The writing is very subtle and calm. The first thing that comes to my mind is the sea; from the title. I take it literally. 
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I'm sorry to reply so late, but I've just sort of been keeping this message here because it's so lovely to read. You always leave such wonderful comments, Mehreen – thank you!
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts with me.
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I like this piece! It's cool that you've stuck to the syllable count. I can relate with you in terms of the process. Most of the time, I come up with something, and then I finish it off months later.
I like the phrasing here, and how simplistic it feels, yet there is a sense of intensity with how you've described things.
Great piece!
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Thank you! I must admit, although I know the syllable count isn't necessary, I felt weirdly pleased to have stuck to it.
And yes, I'm aware your process is similar, haha. 
Thanks again!
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Oh yay, a new work! 
I see less of a static picture and more of a scene when reading this: A dramatic downward sweep of blue sky with some clouds towards the ground. Leaves floating downward on a breeze, and boats peacefully sitting on the water. I took this whole thing rather literally.
Though if I had to interpret it more abstractely I'd say something about October bringing us back to the groud of reality from the freedom of the summer months? I don't know, I'm bad at interpreting. 
What was that particular image you had in mind, if you don't mind sharing?
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment, Rie! I don't think there's anything wrong with taking it too literally, and nothing wrong with your interpretation either – I love reading other people's interpretations.
By 'small sea' I was thinking of puddles (with leaves as 'boats' on the 'ocean').
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You're very welcome, Steph!
Ooh, that's an awesome image!
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I love it
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For me, I get the image of a cloudless sky blending with pristine ocean waters, but I think I'm interpreting it too literally.
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Ah, but there's nothing wrong with that! Thank you for the comment.
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this is absolutely elegant, and for me, it is destruction, but with it, a hopeful escape, a way to run away from the wreckage. i just lovelovelove this.
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I just lovelovelove you. Thank you for always being lovely!
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I love this. It just gives me this wonderful sense that the world has turned topsy and finally matches the way I see things.
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That's such an interesting way to put it. Thank you for the comment! 
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Truly beautiful imagery I see steady rain and leaves floating on the ground.
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