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Published: 2014-01-13 18:23:59 +0000 UTC; Views: 20674; Favourites: 71; Downloads: 278
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The last page of a comic I'm submitting to "Heavy Metal".Β Thanks for reading!First Page:
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He never sees her again, it's true.
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Thank you for reading and commenting on my story.Β
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.....reading? but no words here
(and thas is one of yours better stories 
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Well, this is more than a little heartbreaking. Really well done.
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Very good , and i wish you much success with this, and any future efforts. Really wonderful little story.
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ohh...here I can understand why he was so surprise about that glases when she take them.
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such a sad ending! very emotional and heartfelt
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Did he shave his sideburns between the last two panels?!
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Whoops.Β Good catch.Β I'll see what I can do to change that.Β Thanks for letting me know.
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Oh man. I can't stop looking at this.
Now that it's finished, I just went back and re-"read" it again. Oh man! The clues you dropped on your way makes the whole thing that much more powerful.
I can't find the right adjective for this. Amazing, masterful, wonderful, Wow.
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Absolutely beautifully done, Zoe. I'm so proud of you - Heavy Metal is going to love it!
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Such as sombre ending.Β I hope I get to see it in the magazine soon.
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Very nice...................those last 6 panels have a smooth and engaging narrative. I like the last shot with the ol' man. Β Good luck with that!!!
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She was designed (perhaps subconsciously) after someone he knew (and most likely loved). Ain't that a kick in the lug nuts.
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That's absolutely correct.Β That's exactly what I was going for.
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You nailed the expression in the second panel. So much story told, without using words
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Sad, but satisfying. Very satisfying. It works really well. I hope Heavy Metal see sense and publish it.
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Reminds me ofΒ a web comic I read. It was called Fall out Toy Works. Very interesting comic that ran along similar lines. Man makes mechanical woman. Sells her to a rich man. Only his story goes on after that but I won't spoil it. It has an unsatisfying ending in my opinion but you can read it yourself if you want.
fallouttoyworks.keenspot.com/dβ¦
This is a link to the comic start.
As for this page. You can really see how much this hurt him but I don't think the old man has enough fight in him to do anything. The look of betrayal on her face says everything. Even without words this comic speaks volumes of emotions. I can see you really put a lot into this. I think this is now my favorite work of yours so far.Β (not counting your TG work, but I am pretty bias on that stuff.) Well done. all of it.
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Thank you for the compliments and the link.Β Your description is exactly what I was going for with regards to the old man.Β
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Terrific work. Emotionally dark, and kind of a downer, but definitely heartfelt. You really feel for the guy (and the girl, of course), in spite of the way he sold love for a wad of cold cash. It actually makes me wonder if he's done this before. Would a shot of a side table with a whole raft of photos be in any way appropriate? Or would that just be too humorous for a story like this? (That shows you where I'm coming from; for me, it's all about the humor.)
Amanda
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I like to create moving stories with some humor thrown in.Β Charlie Chaplin's films are a big influence on me in that regard.Β I don't wish to make my stories completely depressing but I thought the ending in question was just right.
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Humor with heart? Right there with ya, sister.
You're probably right about the ending. I haven't read the story straight through, so I can't really comment. The aforementioned idea just popped into my head as kind of a gag, or a punchline. It might work better in a skit.
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Heavy Metal would be fool to not run this. Beautiful as always.
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Thank you so much!Β I'm crossing my fingers here.
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Succinct. Β Not sure that a happier ending might sell better. Β Art is wonderful--art that makes you money is MORE wonderful.
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Thanks!Β It may be a harder sell but I thought the ending was fitting.Β I've been wanting to submit to "Heavy Metal" for a long time and, even if it fizzles, I'm tackling a goal I've wanted to do for a long time. Plus, I got to tell a story of my own making, which I haven't gotten to do much, lately.Β I've been struggling with myself ever since Christmas and I'm working to make this year different, despite myself.
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You are a skilled and talented artist with a great eye and imagination. Β Despite, nothing! Just find your niche, your market, and don't get derailed.
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So sad 
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