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Read Left -> Right.OKAY!
COMPASS is a Final Fantasy VII, Tseng-centric doujinshi set about fourteen years before the FFVII timeline, aka around seven or eight years before the events of Crisis Core.
It will aim to explore the relationship between Tseng and Aerith, while the latter was still under the care of Professor Hojo in Shinra.
Expect more gratuitous exploitation of the gradient, smudge, and polygon selection tools as I attempt to get better at this doujinshi business!
I'm no good at script writing, and I'm an amatuer manga-maker at best, so thank you in advance for giving this a glance, and I hope COMPASS will be entertaining for you! I'll probably keep submitting in slots of six-ten pages or whenever there's a convenient story break, but I'm thinking I'll more likely move the whole thing to Photobucket or something to keep from spamming watchers here.
COMPASS is dedicated to ~elixile22 , who inspired the title. Thanks for all your help, Eli! :3
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First effort or not, it's a wonderfuly drawn, sweetly written piece, thank you for putting this up as it was a pleasure to read from start to finish.
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i have no knowledge at all of FF...the turn-based mechanic kinda killed my brain after a while.
i don't know why you're ragging on your writing...i'm digging it, so far you're bringing a lot of past events and relationships into light really naturally.
i'd really look at spending an hour or two more on formatting though...panelborders, speech bubbles...some tricks you might want to try are:
draw the panels as soon as the page is drafted, make sure to make use of the guides function to get everything accurate- then use your panels as masks for your drawings.
'bleeding' panels lose their power if they happen every page, so conisder chucking some of those bleeds into a panel.
when making a speechbubble, type the text first, then drag an (opaque please!) oval to fit- then use a distortion tool like envelope or something similar to take that machine oval shape off of it. gives it a much more human feel while still remaining prescise- here's an example of a comic that does bubbles that way: [link]
sorry if i'm overcritting this, i just hate to see formatting get in the way of awesome art, thought i could share some tips i'd picked up.
off to read the rest!
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really good, no long comment now as i am racing to read the rest
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These are really good, hope you will continue when time allows!
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Reading this made me really want there to be more...
It sounds like it's definately going to be a good doujinshi (in my opinion).
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i love the way you drew young tseng he's so cute! more more! ^_^ lol i love the way you draw!
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Very nice. I'm looking forward to seeing how this develops. You write quite well.
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I'm not going to put too much detail in about how much I loved all of this, but know that I do and I, as well as a lot of people want more! D:< xD
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Workin' on it, and thanks! ^^
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As a big big big big fan of Tseng/Aerith I really can't wait for you to update. I've always been so curious as to how they interacted. Not to mention I just love torn/angsty Tseng so much it's ridiculous. <3
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Oh, and a bonus nitpick! The canonical variety!
Hojo makes reference to Vincent as "the last Turk you recommended to me." But Veld was not Vincent's boss. Veld and Vincent were peers. I can't find where I read that, though.
Have you read Case of Shinra yet? Lots of the Turks in there, and a bit on Tseng's relationship with Aeris at the beginning.
Oh, and:
They found a store and chose some more appropriate clothingβ Tseng wore a flashy t-shirt resembling those from Costa Del Sol and Elena wore a petite one piece dress. The two of them entered a bar where they presumed most people would gather at. Most of the tables were already taken. Finding empty seats, the two of them sat down and immediately began observing the crowd. Tsengβs eyes were trained on a man wearing a black shirt who took up an entire table that should have had room for four.
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*Salutes* to everything said.
You're right - Veld and Vince were partners. Hmm that'd be a glitch on my part, but oh well. xD; PLENTY MORE OF THOSE TO COME.
YES I LOVE CASE OF SHINRA. 8D Rufus kind of makes me want to laugh and cry at the same time, lol.
Thanks for reading!
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The art's great, etc., and I love the depiction of Ifalna.
My nitpicks for now are with the technicalities.
The text on page 1 seemed fine, but when we switched to page 2 I felt like the characters were screaming at me. I backed up to see if the text has been in caps before, and it was, but for some reason the bigger typeface on page 2 was reminiscent of communicating with someone who has not yet located the Caps Lock key. So don't go any bigger with the type than the size on page 1 IMO.
Secondly, make sure you include navigation to the next and previous pages in your artist comments. It's annoying to have to go searching for the next page if we didn't navigate to it from your gallery.
Thirdly, I can't express the magnitude of joy and relief and other happy feelings that welled within me when I realized you did this in left-to-right format. I cannot tell you how utterly sick I am of people making their ENGLISH manga/doujinshi right-to-left just because omfgthat'showitisinJapan. English is left-to-right, you dumb fucking twats. Thank you for respecting this.
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Eee! *flail flail, happy flail*
I love this...
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Wow. I...wow. Thank you for this. I know nothing about doujinshi-ing and probably can't leave intelligent comments, but I just wanna say...thanks. Thank you for sharing. In my little box I'm slowly, SLOWLY becoming aware that I am not in fact the only person who delves into the childhoods and backgrounds of the incredible characters Nomura-san has gifted with, and to see one of the characters I really focus on in a doujinshi of the same basic idea...incredible. Not to mention, though I don't have any intelligent comments about it, I'm TOTALLY captivated by your art, your style...it looks VERY professional here. Earned a watcher. Thank you, again, for sharing...
By the way, just so no one (including me) forgets, this gives me incredible inspiration to a.) start on that manga I keep telling myself I will and b.) actually, seriously examine Tseng's early years. Stupid roleplays and yaoi fangirls ruining my good ideas >< NO MORE!! *runs off to stop leaving long, meaningless comments >.>
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Oh my, thank you so much!
I consider myself lucky to have a circle of friends who are totally dedicated to characterisation and backstory. Our interest is planted in the parents and prodigies of Shinra, like Veld and Tseng and Hojo. If you'd like, I could suggest some fanfics you might enjoy, if you're into backstory?
And thanks again for the comment and watch! Good luck with your own endeavours, neh!
(Though, I will admit I am too much of a Tseng/Reeve and Tseng/Rufus shipper for my own good. 
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That's alright, if you ever get the time feel free to read the shameless tsengxrufus whoring I do as PART of their backstories... It's actually not that bad XD; Oh, well.
I would LOVE to have some of those fanfictions! I started reading yours the other day, so are there others you can recommend? I swear I went through your entire gallery (no, really, I did...), so if there are some that weren't mentioned that would be best. Thank you!! Good luck to you, too!
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I have fanfic here...? >_> xD;
Big list comin' your way!
1. If you like Tseng - Karanguni ([link] ) writes the best damn Tseng I have ever read. Absolutely amazing character exploration and development, and the dialogue is to die for.
2. Nyx ([link] ) writes primarily Vincent/Lu/Hojo backstory, and her Lucrecia is unique, terrifying, and yet still so deliciously in character.
3. Cendri ([link] ) is one of the reasons I now love Veld so much. Her Veld/Tifa stories are so touching, even for someone who isn't a Tifa fan (*cough*me*cough*)
4. Drakonlily ([link] ) is another reason I like Veld. ^^ She also writes Hojo incredibly well.
5. Eli ([link] ) writes a damn awesome Reeve among other things, and she's also the best drabbler I've ever read.
And if you get through that, here's my ff.net account, which I don't actually use... ([link] ) ...but I'll give that to you because everything under my 'favourite stories' tab is pure gold. ^_^
Happy ficking!
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It's great! It feels like playing ff7 for the first time again
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omg cliffies I hate you.
So awesome! Little Tsenglet is cute~ how old would he be then? And is Hojo-jo wearing sweatpants...?
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This is GREAT!
Don't put yourself down,your good at this.
I'v seen the work in your sraps about this.
VERY well done!
I can't wait to read some more.
YOU RE-LIT MY LOVE FOR TSENG AND THE TURKS!
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*has a fangirl attack and dies*
|D
LUV's from Khaos, who totally likes the spam. SPAAAAAM.
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Put your doujinshi on deviant art, so the whole thing is up here for all to see. Your watchers wouldn't watch you if they considered this kind of artwork to be spam, so by all means post on dA. What would be even better is a link to the next page in the Artist's Comments box.
Page 1:
Nice corridors, the space is actually really convincing. The shadow at the end of corridor helps with dimension. I don't know what you've been harping on about vanishing points, because you've got this one down pat. I wonder if level 66 actually looks like that in the game. I recently played through it, but I never bothered remembering what level 66 looked like. Angles of characters give a good profile, the body language also gives indication to what kind of person they are.
Page 2:
Very clean line work for the scaffolding above the ShinRa exit, complete with the 3D effect.
It's the helicopter! Cloud effect gives impression of height. You've really gotten the hang of using Photoshop to add in effects.
Page 3:
Perhaps the stairs in frame 2 could do with the same effect as frame 1 of Page 2? (to give it depth and actual steps, it's just a minor detail but it keeps things consistant)
The helicoptor blade pointing 2 o'clock should be a bit thinner than the one at 11 o' clock, the blades don't look quite right. =\
(I like the little soldiers near the helicoptor.)
Page 4:
Is Tseng left-handed? Tseng uses his right hand to shoot the projectile net to save Rufus in AC. Unless he's ambidextrous. But you would usually pledge loyalty with your right hand, no?
Page 5:
I wonder why Hojo took the rookie, he wouldn't need young Tseng if he was protected by Shinra to that extent he claims to have. (I'd be pretty scared if I kidnapped Ifalna who was guarding her child, and then on top of that, cut ties with an eminent biologist. It just seems like a great combination to screw yourself over.)
Page 6:
Good expression for Tseng. I like it.
I look forward to the next installment of COMPASS.
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This is super-gorgeous! Excellent job~!
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I think its wonderful so far, though I do not know the final fantasy storyline that this precedes.
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and PS, do I see a bit of angst in Veld's face?
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I intended to put a bit of angst in Veld's expression - angst which is only noticeable to people who know it's there. 
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I can't help shipping him with Vincent and/or Iffy anymore. I just CAN'T XD
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IJUHOISGUHS OEUR&#O(*%Y EGSSINEG IS OMG I LOVE YOU
I LOVE THIS. (though I can't help but be like OMG VELD AND OMG IFFY AND OMG HOJO) and TSENG IS SO CUTE AND OMG... fine, I'm fangirling, you deal. Lovely art as always.
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This is GREAT!!! I really hope that you go on with the story line!
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Veeeeld OMG YOUR POKER FACE.
I mean, ah.
I love that he's even IN a doujin and TALKING TO HOJO and not just molesting Tseng (plz don't do that I'll cry ;_
Oh Iffy you make me sort of want to cry though, IN THE GOOD WAY.
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I am utterly honoured by the dedication and so incredibly happy that you are such a wonderful friend - i'm lucky to be even the slightest bit of inspiration for this work.
The doujin is looking brilliant so far - the use of perspective and contrast particularly striking and lovely, with all the characters so gorgeously rendered as usual.
And the story / script is fantastic!! I know I've been privy to the genesis of the words but not fully realised and it reads sooo sooo good. Veld and Tseng interactions, Veld and Hojo interactions \o\ oh Hojo is such an arrogant...
Tseng's face on page 4 is priceless. I LOVE the mix up of viewpoints on page 1, which contrasts the directness of the talking. Page 2, the bottom panel is breathtaking, also Veld's question~~ Page 3 is just the right blend of art and writing - really pacey and pushes the story on perfectly (also Veld/Hojo ftw xD). Page 4 I've already mentioned I love Tseng's expression, but the Vincent reference and yet more Veld and Hojo interaction FTW! Page 5... oh Hojo... oh it's all really spot on 
I think all that is left to say is SPAM MOAR!!! LOTS MOAR!!!
Oh yes - AND HEARTS!
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I agree with everyone! MORE! MORE1 MORE! This is fantastic! You may think your an amateur, but I seriously question that statement. You have a strong understanding of all your characters, your art is (as always) amazing, and your story is strong. My heart stopped at the bottom of page 5, no joke, it was THAT good!
Awesome as always! And I also like Spam!
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But I enjoy spam D:
In other news, very much looking forward to more.
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nuuu!! spam!!! jeni wants spam!!! XDDD
that was good! hope you have time to do more soon 
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