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Dravencleary — Outer shell
Published: 2013-04-19 20:34:43 +0000 UTC; Views: 379; Favourites: 11; Downloads: 2
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That’s it, that’s enoughI cant take anymore
This mask of me, this shell
Its cracking like hell
Some days it holds together
Some days it falls apart
Showing off a side of me
A side that’s rarely seen.
A side that’s not as happy as the mask
A side that’s not as ignorant
People think that I am Stupid
Or that because I kid and joke so often that I don’t understand
Im always watching, listening, learning.
What they see is just a show
And in between acts the mask comes off
And for a few glorious moments, im me
Before I have to put it back on for society
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Comments: 34
Society is lame, it expects us all to be stupid and brilliant, and we have to have masks or be torn apart. Your poem reflects this well.
Since its free verse you probably meant to do this, but there isn't an ' in 'Im always watching', and the 'im' in 'im me' should be capitalized and with a '.
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thank you for spotting my mistakes, im bad at seeing them
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This is really pretty visual attached to reading this drav, it has a nice smooth flow and it's fitting, but you know you and I both know the feeling of the mask except, mines is always fucking cracked |D but I love it, it's so pretty~
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;A; thank you so much milieeee
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Of course sugar cube vuv
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I love this so much, like, amg, it's really awesomely awesome
it's soooo true as well
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One, it is amazing. Two, it explains what I was feeling a while ago, so of course I'm gonna like it. Three, the fact that you were able to put feelings into words is amazing cuz I can't
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i have those days some times and today was one of those days OTL
and tank you for the kind words <3
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I feelya
Your welcome, but what's with the heart? I swear everyone is using them and it's kinda creepy
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>w< thanks, i didnt think it would be any good
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ya i thought it was really good have you written anything else like this?
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well, not really. I havent written to many poems..or what ever that is qualified as.
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haha well rhats a great start u should really do more towards the same kind of genre
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i dont even know what genre it qualifies as, or if i can replicate it
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well i guess it would be um idk maybe conceptual? or impressionism? maybe a dark feel to it idk but i like it would you mind if i copy it and print it out and hang it in my bedroom?lol
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not at all
ive certainly never had anyone ask me that before
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hahahah i just think its really great at describing the false image we as a people have to keep up so we are accepted by society
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thats what i was going for ;A; ty~
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