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his fingers beat his tears in the race to touch his cheek."don't you wish we'd have fallen in love?"
"every single day."
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sometimes it's easier understanding things when they're brutally exposed.
but i never knew this had the ability to affect someone that much!
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mmm...... yea. well, i didn't give out too much now did I?
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It is quite difficult to talk about such a short piece constructively, but that said, I loved it
There is a punch in those three short lines and yet still the meaning and the context is left to the reader to decide, allowing them to interpret as they will.
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thank you very muchhh! (:
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This has such a powerful impact. Such a powerful punch. I love how you don't elaborate on the story in the Artist's Comments, but leave it to the reader to figure out what is happening. And the length is perfect as well.
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thank you. i appreciate your comments and opinions! (:
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thank you.thank you.thank you. <3
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Really, really like this, for its size it pack an awesome punch! I had to read it twice and then the depth of it sunk in. The italics really added that something more to it, that will make me remember this for a long time.
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thank you! i'm glad it had that impact on you. (:
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wow. that little bit of writing is so powerful. wow.
wow. again.
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this is amazing. i really think you should continue it.
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this is great.
alfkdjfs.
who are these lovely lovers? :]
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thanksss. (:
and why, i have no clue!
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you're welcomeee.
damn. you should give them names.
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i prefer writing without names. it lets readers fit whoever they want into the story. (:
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ah, i see.
i prefer that as well but i still give them names in my head. [:
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well, then that proves my point!
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harhar. yes, yes it does!
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You should deffinatly carr on with it!, it will almost deffinatly turn into something beautiful ^_^
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Amazing for a drabble, and just in general.
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It's gorgeous... I want more of the character! you should seriously consider continuing this.. I love how it simply gives enough detail to interest you, but leaves out everything else. The seed has been planted(atleast in my head)! Continue! >:3
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thank you for your comment! i've continued it with a sequel, but i think that's all i will do with this. (:
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really simple and short but it really gets it's point across~ It has a lot of feeling for something so small~
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short and simple. Lovely!
Being an incredible pain though, did you just technically write
"don't you wish we had have fallen in love?"
I'm not grammatically brilliant, so it could actually be okay, but that seems a little off to me.
*is shot*
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"we would have".
but thank you. (:
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*headdesk!*
Carry on! XD
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wow. so simple yet so powerful.
love it. love it. love it!
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