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Published: 2017-11-17 04:49:23 +0000 UTC; Views: 1137; Favourites: 30; Downloads: 6
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SunBite rested upon a cloud on a starry night sky. It was colder, for Thanksgiving is almost 2 weeks away. When he exhaled, clouds of his breath were visible in the darkness of the night. The moon wasn't full, it wasn't even present. A new moon, a dark moon, a darker night. He should be out hunting. Hunting for... his meal. But he couldn't.Besides, he already ate. Apples.
"A Vleermuis NEVER eats the nectar of a fruit! Let alone an apple!" he remembers his father yelling. "Why can't you be more like your brother!"
His brother is a vegetarian... But Darkula doesn't know that.
SunBite lowered his head on the fluffy cloud, closing his eyes. This wasn't unusual. His father always compares SunBite to BloodMoon, the heir to the Vleermuis throne, and the once future bat pony king.
Of course, Ender had to arrive and screw everything up.
He smiles softly thinking of that beautiful baticorn. He sighs. That same beautiful baticorn happens to be his father's arch nemesis... He hates her... so much...
His father doesn't even allow her name to be spoken in their castle. She is referred as "The Bat Pony Princess" or the "Vampony Queen". Odd that they must call her a Princess or a Queen. She is technically the Queen, but she calls herself a Princess. Odd? Indeed.
Of course, Darkula may hate her, but he must respect her. She is his superior, after all. And that's another reason why he hates her. And despite how many times he told SunBite to avoid and hate the Princess, he can't. He just couldn't.
SunBite opened his eyes and sat up. He looked at the ground below him. He saw a familiar bat pony sneaking about. He wasn't for something, he was avoiding something.
BloodMoon.
What was he was avoiding? Being caught. By who? Many ponies. Their father (even though he rarely leaves the castle these centuries), Gears (for he may hug him to death), Ms. Mary Sue (That one mare from that one place at that one time), Twisty-Two-
He looked a little harder and he saw that Twisty was waiting under a tree. BloodMoon bowed a little to her and held her hoof. SunBite watched closer. Twisty was saying something, but he couldn't hear, for SunBite was too far away.
BloodMoon seemed to lead her somewhere. He sat down and told Twisty something.
Despite his echolocation and a strong sense of hearing, he couldn't make it out. Twisty wrapped her hooves around his brother's shoulders. She was holding on to him. SunBite's ears folded down as he looked in concern. BloodMoon looked back at Twisty quickly, and began to fly off from the ground. He watched as the light minty mare held on tighter to his older brother. They flew off to Celestia knows where, and all SunBite could feel was sorrow...
"Somepony doesn't look too happy..." a calm, soft voice called. The bat pony tensed up at hearing the angelic voice.
He turned and saw another bat pony flying a few yards away from him. Except this bat pony had a horn.
"Prinzezz Ender! I-Uh! V-Vhat are you doing here?!" SunBite asked nervous and sweating a little, despite the cold atmosphere. She was missing her crown, shoes, and necklace, so she looked almost like a normal Bat pony.
Ender smiled and lowered herself beside the brown bat pony.
"I was flying around, you know. Making sure no bats were harming any pony. It's that time of the month again!" Ender said, looking rather concern at SunBite. Bat ponies only need to eat once a month, but because of that, they need to eat a lot. Most bat ponies eat apples, very few eat... something else... Like his father.
"Are you alright, SunBite? You seem rather down."
SunBite avoided the mare's gaze. "I'm fine..."
Ender chuckled. "We both know that when someone says that, it's never true..."
SunBite turned his head slightly, so he could see the purple bat a little better. "I zaid I'm fine..."
Ender frowned. "Come now Sunny," she placed a hoof on his shoulder, smiling again, "You can tell me. I'm your friend."
The brown vampony stared at Ender, her smile was warm and welcoming. Of course, it was slightly terrifying due to the enormous, sharp-as-knives, fangs; but to a bat pony, the sharper the better.
SunBite didn't really like to talk about his feelings, especially in front of a Princess, so his only excuse was, "I'm fine..."
Ender shook her head slowly, smiling.
"You dork, I can see right through you!"
SunBite's wings went straight up as he began to blush.
"Not literately!" Ender reassured. "I mean that I can tell you aren't fine. Something is bothering you. So for your sake, tell me."
SunBite looked down.
"Is it your father?"
Silence.
"Is it your... mother...?"
SunBite's heart stung, but didn't show it.
"Is it me?"
"No..." he reassured.
"Well, that's good," Ender giggled, "Is it BloodMoon?"
SunBite's ears flinched, and the baticorn took notice right away. "What's wrong with BloodMoon?"
"Nozing."
"Are you sure?"
"Yez."
SunBite didn't lie. BloodMoon was fine. He bets his brother is having a blast with Ms. Twisty, as he calls her. He didn't mind Twisty, in fact, he was happy that his brother found a sweet mare that possible liked him back. After 520 years or so, SunBite's brother found love.
Right? He did like Twisty, right? Maybe they were just friends? Like, how SunBite was Ender's friend. Because that's all they'll ever be. Friends.
What if they are more than friends? What if they like-like each other? What if those nights where BloodMoon spent the night at Twisty's house, they were... doing... Oh sweet Celestia...
If SunBite should be happy for his brother, why doesn't he feel it...? He loves his brother, and support is all he has given him. Of course, he had multiple marefriends in the past, and they never bothered SunBite. So why does Twisty worry him? Is he afraid he'll take away his brother for good?
"If my brozer findz zomevone...doez zat mean I von't matter to him anymore? Doez zat mean he can't protect me? Doez zat mean... he von't need me?"
"SunBite..."
He looked up at the purple mare who seemed worried.
"Is there something bothering you, that has to do with BloodMoon?" she asked calmly.
"Well..." he responded, "I don't feel comfortable talking about it Prinzezz... zorry."
"Perfectly understandable... Maybe another time." Ender began to rise.
"Are you leaving?" SunBite asked.
Ender nodded slowly. "It's clear that you wish to be left alone, I'm giving my friend that wish."
"I-I never zaid zat!" he responded.
"Perhaps," Ender began to spread her wings, preparing for take off, "But I know when I'm not required."
SunBite looked up at Ender and held his breath. "I wish you a good evening Count SunBite. Perhaps when you are ready, we can talk about whats bothering you."
SunBite watched as Ender began to fly into the darkness. Call him crazy, but he didn't want her to go. He felt alone as it is. "Pleaze don't leave me too!" he shouted towards her.
Ender stopped flying forward, and instead, flew in place in shock. She turned to him and looked at him for a few moments. He looked like he was about to cry. SunBite wasn't he type to cry often, but when he does, it worries Ender. She flew down to his side.
"Ready to talk about it?" she asked.
He shook his head.
She shrugged. "Then I'll stay as long as I must..." Ender was a patient mare, and SunBite liked that. She would rest on that cloud forever with him if she had too.
"Would you like to talk about something else?" Ender asked.
SunBite shrugged.
"How about I tell you the time where I saw Golden Rays and Gears bother NiteFall, and dressed him up as a ballerina."
SunBite almost burst out laughing thinking of that stallion in a tutu.
"I promised I would tell no one but... I'm sure telling a friend wouldn't hurt." Ender winked and stuck her tongue out playfully.
SunBite would love to hear that story, but he didn't think that it would make him feel any better. "No, zank you."
"Alright," Ender replied looking up at the stars. They gleamed in her eyes, making them sparkle. SunBite couldn't help but smile.
"You know... I always wanted to fly as high as the stars are."
SunBite rose an eyebrow. "Vell zat vaz random..."
"But it's true! I love the stars, thanks to Gears!"
"Gearz?"
Ender smiled. "Indeed. He wouldn't stop babbling about it. I wondered why, and spending a night with him made me see what he sees."
SunBite looked up. "Vhat doez he zee?"
"Stars looking down on us, as we look up at them. Planets that are out of our reach! Galaxies that not even Star Swirl the Bearded could research. Gears spends his nights looking up at the moon and beyond."
SunBite stared at the stars, and was reminded of when BloodMoon and he used to stare at them. His ears folded down again.
"You know, Gears said he'll build a rocket one day and blast us all up towards the shimmering stars. Wouldn't that be fu-" Ender stopped mid-sentence and saw her friend in emotional pain.
"SunBite... may you look at me for a moment."
He did so. Ender was smiling sweetly at him. He felt a small smile spread across his face. He always had this feeling of comfort whenever she's around him.
"Tell me what you're thinking."
"Buck!" he thought. Did he have too? Did he really have too tell HER what HE was thinking right NOW?
"Go on, I won't judge..."
"Vell..."
"And that's an order from your Princess!" she said as she winked.
"Uh... vell I.... uh.... I am zinking about ze ztarz... I am alvayz zinking about my brozer and my fazer," he began.
"Go on my friend..." Ender reassured."
"I am... vorried. I am afraid and I feel alone..." Ender frowned at hearing this.
"I juzt... I am zinking about my feelingz, if zat makez zenze... I am zinking about my future. My brozer's future. My family. I am zinking and vondering vhy everyvone iz leaving... Not me exactly but... I feel like zey are getting farzer (farther) and farzer avay..."
SunBite rested his head on the cloud. "I am zinking about a zertain unicorn and a zertain bat pony..." He inhaled deeply and exhaled lowly, "I am zinking about happinezz and pain, how zomeonez zmile can bring another ponie'z heartbreak..."
"That's poetic," Ender said.
"Vell, zome zay I could be a famouz poet vone day," raising his head again, brushing off his hoof.
"I think they might be right. You almost stole my heart," Ender replied, booping SunBite.
"Uh....Pr-Prinzezz... zat iz rather..."
"Is what?" Ender said booping his nose again.
SunBite began to blush. "You are...touching me..."
"I know. BOOP!" she said, giggling.
The bat pony never had Ender touch him playfully.
"If you don't like it, I'll stop," the baticorn said.
"NO!" he replied rather quickly.
"Well that case..."
She kept booping him. You may think it would get boring, but SunBite and Ender were enjoying it. They even made it a game. Ender would ask a question, and every time SunBite got it wrong, Ender would boop him.
"How many sides does a circle have?" Ender asked.
"None?" SunBite replied.
"Wrong! 2 sides! And outside and an inside!" She booped him.
"Zat vaz a trick queztion!" he protested.
"Not that you minded!" Ender said, "Let's see that's 27 for me and 0 for you!"
"Vell you azk impozzible queztionz..." SunBite said.
"No I don't! Anyway number 28: There are 64 ice cream trucks filled with 100 gallons of x number of flavors. It takes 3 hours to drive from destination A to destination R, but due to traffic it takes twice as long as it took to drop off the penguins from Canterlot. Use the quadratic formula to find the circumference of the Sun!"
"Are you zeriouz!"
"No I'm Ender! And you're wrong! Boop!"
SunBite chuckled. "No, I'm not wrong... I'm ZunBite..." He booped the Princess. She simply smiled and wrapped her wing around the brown bat.
"I guess I deserved that... Alright. 29 to 1."
SunBite began to yawn. It was close to midnight, and even though bat ponies are active at night, he was more diurnal.
"Oh, are you getting tired, my friend?" Ender asked.
"Uh... no juzt... uh..." He couldn't stop himself from yawing again.
"You should be heading home. I bet your brother is worried sick about you."
SunBite's heart ached at hearing this. "I vouldn't zink zo..."
"What makes you say that?"
SunBite smiled at the Princess. "Oh uh...no reazon, I vaz kidding!"
"Very well..." Ender said before booping SunBite once more. "But never forget how much you mean to us... How much you mean to me... Never feel like you are alone."
SunBite smiled slightly. "Zank you... Ender...."
"Would you mind... flying me home before you head off? You don't have to if you are too tired," the Princess offered.
Did he hear that right? "You vant me... to fly you home?"
"If it's no trouble..."
SunBite smiled again. "I vould be honored..."
Meanwhile under a tree not far from the cloud... because someone didn't wish to fly far from their brother.
"My little brother is growing up..." BloodMoon said looking at SunBite and Ender talking.
Twisty smiled at the bat pony. "M-m-maybe this i-is the one?" she asked.
"I hope so, but at the same time, I hope not..." he responded looking down.
"W-why are y-y-you w-worried?" she asked.
He didn't respond to the mare beside him immediately. He looked at her and shook his head. "Never mind what I said. This night was meant for you, Ms. Twisty, not me and my feelings."
BloodMoon rubbed the back of his head after saying that. Twisty rested her head on his shoulder as she began to sleep. While she slept, BlooMoon saw Ender and SunBite fly from the cloud they were on. As they got farther away, he couldn't help but think to himself, "If my brother finds someone...does that mean I won't matter to him anymore? Does that mean I can't protect him? Does that mean... he won't need me?"
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Comments: 41
ElectraDust [2021-05-25 23:02:22 +0000 UTC]
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TylerFreeFlight [2017-12-02 02:50:11 +0000 UTC]
Oh what an awesome scene! First... SunBite is adorable and his feelings really come through in your writing. Second... It's clear that he really loves his brother but is afraid to talk to him about his concerns. This is awesome character building and also great background for him.
The building of Ender's character is great as well. She shows so much concern for him. She is a really great bat-pony-alicorn. It's fun to see her develop.
I love this and am glad I waited to read it. I was waiting until I had a free night so I could really enjoy it. You did not disappoint!! I will read all your story's because they are so well written and rich with emotions and descriptions. It makes it easy to visualize and feel what is being experienced by the characters. Awesome work Endergurl!
Diurnal!!! Really? wow look at you with the fancy words. XD
The end of this scene really hits emotions. I let's the reader know that Blood Moon has the same worries and fears as his brother. If only they could just talk freely with each other about their worries it would make things so much better. As it is now I see you setting them up for some heart breaking misunderstanding that will most likely make things much worse.
I hop I'm wrong. Anyway Awesome writing!
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ElectraDust In reply to Nuclear-Powered [2017-11-23 11:25:16 +0000 UTC]
Aw! I just randomly decided to read the story. And its sweet. I like your writing I will have to read them more often.
I learned something to:
A) I cannot talk like a vampire
B) It must be annoying to write stuff for Twisty Two
Once I reached the end, Part of it reminded me of a story I wrote: The questions that the two stallions thought to themselves. Where in my story it was the same concept with both ponies asking pretty much the same questions.
Im pretty sure you have already read it cause you are that awesome but here it is if you havent: www.deviantart.com/journal/Reg…
You dont have to read it, just me giving it Incase you want to.
Once again, amazing job. Stay awesome!
(But you dont have to stay awesome if you dont want to )
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EnderGurl22 In reply to ElectraDust [2017-12-02 03:17:37 +0000 UTC]
LOL! Thank you so much Electra! This means a lot to me, especially coming from an amazing writer like yourself!
And for the record, it is quite painful to type in Twisty's stutter. XD But I love her and her personality, so I get by it!
And I will for sure take a look at that story! I bet it's just as sweet! :3
Once again, I thank you, and stay awesome as well
(But you are always awesome! )
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ElectraDust In reply to EnderGurl22 [2017-12-02 03:25:56 +0000 UTC]
You’re welcome. XD
Of course I was awesome! I’m Electra Dust! XD
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EnderGurl22 In reply to Nuclear-Powered [2017-11-21 23:29:27 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! That means a lot to me ^w^
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EnderGurl22 In reply to llyly [2017-11-18 18:30:26 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much for checking it out!
It really helps! ^w^
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colt687 In reply to EnderGurl22 [2017-11-18 04:55:28 +0000 UTC]
You're welcome friend ↖(^ω^)↗
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LennyStendhal13 [2017-11-17 22:14:59 +0000 UTC]
OH MY. This is...I can't even...my gosh I don't even know how to structure my answer to say how much I like this one piece! Wait, I'll try and make some kind of "chart", that should make it easier.
So:
-The setting is the night, the most romantic one per excellence, and the love in this piece is EVERYWHERE
-I don't know how you did it, but in this one you made the characters look particularly human. I know that sounds like a countersense as we're talking about ponies, but they do! Ender is so caring and funny. SunBite has the proper reaction for a pony who has always been single like his brother and then suddenly he is just single, and his brother isn't. At the same time, BloodMoon has the same reaction, because it's well known: brothers are deeply connected by their similar souls and common blood.
-"Some say I'll become a poet". You will, dear SunBite, you will: your aptitude toward huma-...pony behavior is the inquiring, amazed and a bit incredulous aptitude that poets have, that leads them to love pony's nature and life in general as a big beautiful mistery (because when we love something or someone it is because we can't fully understand it, and that's just what makes it so beautiful )
-As time passes, I'm loving Gears more and more: I don't know why, but I found really moving his opinion on stars and his desire to reach them
-I love to see how emotions are well balanced: there's nopony being excessively sad and freaking out or crying, just different shades of cuteness and melancholy, very well mixed.
- DA BOOPS *V* No need to say more!
- Several little parts that made me smile: ((("Odd that they must call her a Princess or a Queen. She is technically the Queen, but she calls herself a Princess. Odd? Indeed." / "How about I tell you the time where I saw Golden Rays and Gears bother NiteFall, and dressed him up as a ballerina." (Now, I would love to hear that story! ) / "Are you zeriouz!"-"No I'm Ender! And you're wrong! Boop!" - SunBite chuckled. - "No, I'm not wrong... I'm ZunBite..." He booped the Princess.)))
And so many more things that I can't list because I'd finish tomorrow
I love this Ender, you did a wonderful job writing it! And as always, the artwork is so cute I don't know if SunBite and Ender would be a good couple, I would need to see them together some more time before judging (and I'm pretty sure SunBite's father wouldn't allow them to see each other very often :\), but what I do know is that it warms my heart to see SunBite is receiving some love, he really deserves it
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EnderGurl22 In reply to LennyStendhal13 [2017-11-18 22:01:55 +0000 UTC]
LOL I don't even know where to start responding to this! XD I suppose I shall "borrow" your idea and use your chart XD
Thank you so much! I don't usually put backgrounds in my images, but when I do, it's usually for something important LOL This piece does represent different types of love, as well as other feelings. I tried to even it out as much as possible
I never thought I'd see the day where someone compared my ponies to humans XD I LOVE IT! I try to give my OC's almost human characteristics, and not give them just one solid personality. You know, how Rarity is usually a drama queen and generous (?), or how AppleJack is honest and hardworking, or how Pinkie is always happy and cheerful. Feelings can change, and I want my OC's to experience human feelings. When SunBite sees his brother with a mare, he doesn't just feel lonely, he feels jealous and afraid as well, like how some people usually are. And yes, the bat brothers have somewhat of the same mind. They have been with each other for over 520 years, so they tend to finish each other's
: "Zentenzez?"
Don't interrupt me.... XD
Very true my friend! We love things that we are very unaware of.
Yup, Gears does want to go to space one day. Maybe even live there up there and search forever. Though it's not likely he'll get as high as the clouds, but hey, even a robot can dream and hold wishes.
Like I mentioned before, I tried to disperse the feelings to make it more human. That's what I always try to do.
BOOP!!!!
I love including certain lines to make people smile. Even in sad or heartbreaking moments, I try to include certain lines that make people smile or remind them that life can be bright even in a dark moment. (And don't worry, I will tell everyone that story! NiteFall ain't going to like it!
: "Don't...."
Uh..... ANYWAY!
I'm glad you liked this piece, I had a lot of fun making it, as well as writing it! And I agree, Count Darkula wouldn' approve of their relationship, let alone friendship. That's why they remain friends for now. But expect to see more of them. They would make a nice pair!
: "Vait! Vait! Vait! Vait! Vait! Vait! VHAT?! Ze... ze Prinzezz and I?"
: "You.... can't be serious? Right?"
I HAZ THE POWER!!
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LennyStendhal13 In reply to EnderGurl22 [2017-11-18 22:45:05 +0000 UTC]
Hahahaha Guys, I'm sorry, but, once it has left the harbour, there's no stopping the cruise ship unless the captain agrees on that
(Plus, it's true! You WOULD make a nice pair! )ù
And I totally agree, I'm pretty sure what makes your OCs so human is that they never experience just ONE single emotion as it often happens in the show, but a mixture of many of them. And every time the mixture is different, either because the "ingredients" change or because the doses change
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EnderGurl22 In reply to LennyStendhal13 [2017-11-18 23:21:57 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, Lenny! That means a lot
I want my OC's to come to life! I also plan to give their parents a bit of history, as well as personality
But thats saved for later
All aboard the S.S. EnderBite! XD
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LennyStendhal13 In reply to EnderGurl22 [2017-11-19 22:45:57 +0000 UTC]
Sounds great, it will be fun to learn more about their genealogy
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AdrianTheBrony In reply to EnderGurl22 [2017-11-17 20:07:38 +0000 UTC]
Am the boop master >X3
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frosty-cupcak3 [2017-11-17 05:25:58 +0000 UTC]
Aww so adorable. Some pony has a crush!!!
Anyways it is amazing as usual, both art and description. Keep up the awesome work.
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EnderGurl22 In reply to frosty-cupcak3 [2017-11-18 04:41:26 +0000 UTC]
SunBite: "I-I don't a cruzh on her! I... It's friendzhip! Ve are juzt friendz! "
Thank you Frosty for all of nice feedback! Sorry about how late this is LOL
But still, thank you nonetheless! I love hearing all of your comments and replies, it makes me so happy to know someone reads all of the efforts I put out in these pictures!
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frosty-cupcak3 In reply to EnderGurl22 [2017-11-18 05:05:32 +0000 UTC]
No problem. I love reading each story for the picture.
Also your efforts do not go unnoticed. You have amazing talents in both writing and art. And most importantly you are a kind, caring friend. So I am always so happy to have the chance to see one of your drawings and stories.
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EnderGurl22 In reply to frosty-cupcak3 [2017-11-18 23:00:57 +0000 UTC]
That means a lot to me... Thank you
You are also talented in being an artist and a writer!
And you are an amazing friend as well!
Thank you again, Frosty
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HarveyPegasus In reply to EnderGurl22 [2017-11-17 06:54:43 +0000 UTC]
*hyperventilating with fangirlingness overload*
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EnderGurl22 In reply to HarveyPegasus [2017-11-18 04:54:28 +0000 UTC]
Hmm....
She needs muffins...or tea....
BRING IN!!! THE SHIPS!!!
full of muffins and tea....
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HarveyPegasus In reply to EnderGurl22 [2017-11-18 06:43:53 +0000 UTC]
celestia bless you...thank you, you beautiful creature XD
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