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Published: 2010-09-01 18:51:59 +0000 UTC; Views: 1900; Favourites: 30; Downloads: 4
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Clawing at an unwanted reflection of an image misconstrued,Feeling every compound of my existence disintegrating through my fingers.
Again, and again.. A piece of my life deteriorating,
Tainted, poisoned with every acquaintance..
Provoking penetration of my internal demise.
Memoirs forever etched in my flesh,
Like residue from a life I struggle to comprehend as my own.
Every touch; a burn that refrains from healing;
Debris of vermin that tarnished my being,
And altered my reality.
Fortuitously,
Like a wave of divine light on a dim bed of clouds,
Came one who restored my emotions anew;
Cleansing me, driving my scalded heart to remission,
And encapsulating my soul.
My mind now saturated with an aura of irrationality,
My heart set ablaze; the fire barricading every emotion but this.
It cannot be an infatuation, such desires associate not with foolishness!
These desires are too immense, and venture further then the notion of delirium.
No callous hands can emanate this from me now.
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thank you ^_^
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I'm sure many broken souls can relate. I read it twice, and love how you use line breaks. Poetry does not just mean chopped up sentences. For some reason, I think the exclamation point at the end was unnecessary. It's powerful enough on its own. Love the word choice and metaphors. Great job.
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thank u so much for taking the time to read, and u know, i had that same feeling and have had that said to me before as well in regards to the exclamation point, and i honestly thought i had taken it away haha my bad, but again thank u
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My vote is held down as usual and my absence deserves to be unforgiven. Love your work dear
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thank you very much, it means a lot
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you're truly welcome ^_^
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I love the words, some of them just feel so gorgeous in the mouth. It perhaps could have used a little more imagery early on, I felt like there was no particular picture in my head until the 3rd stanza at which point it really came together for me.
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thanks for that! means a lot. and maybe in my next one i will try to keep that in mind
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thanks very much
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It's rare to find someone with such good word choice on dA. Your imagery is beautiful as is your use of figurative language. Fantastic work.
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thanks for ur comment, it was a huge compliment and meant a lot to me
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Haha you're quite welcome. ^^ Keep up the great work!
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Gorgeous
the word selection is great and gives the piece a great impact. It was a joy to read.
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thank u very much, im glad u enjoyed reading it
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