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She stands alone in a crowded bar, underwear around her knees like a sex crime victim. Her face is vacant and her body is empty, her soul floating above her laughing in disgust at what she has become. Her aura is made up of smoke and desperation and the only words she expresses are the ones printed on her forehead screaming “use me” in bold red letters to match her lipstick. Her hair, once glossy and fruitful in colour has now become limp and dull, it fell over her ghostly pale shoulders that were now almost nothing but bone. Her body looks like a skeleton with the skin stretched over and you’re afraid to touch her in case you accidentally tear her.In her grasp she holds a one-way ticked to nowhere but she can’t find her way to the platform, but as long as she continues to feed off others she knows she’ll be okay. Absorbing their spirit. Anyone will do tonight and everyone here is worth as much as she is – a one-dollar dress and an old motel mattress. How many more times can she screw up? She fails to keep count. Numbers aren’t needed in her world except to pay the price.
She’s been standing here for about an hour now, it doesn’t sound that long but when all you do is count the seconds it becomes an eternity. She wonders, how many more people in here are as derelict as she is? Is there another ruined soul in here to match hers? Wishful thinking gets the best of her and you can never end up with the right person when you’ve such a bad judge of character.
She turns around to the bartender. Fed up, the miscellany of bottles behind him is her last hope. She asks “give me a drink that will make me numb”, without even a glimmer of alarm in his eye, as if he’d been waiting for this request for two years he hands her a small blue bottle marked “wretched” . She searched around the rest of the bottle for any other sort of label with a description as to what was inside. She found nothing. She unscrews the top and peers inside, as if she were expecting to find something other than the murky dark liquid. She stared at the swirling mixture, thinking about what this could do to her. Then she figured, she has nothing to lose, right? So without further thought she pressed the bottle to her lips and let the liquor glide down her throat.
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Comments: 7
lucelombra [2005-06-04 02:28:47 +0000 UTC]
This is kinda strange, it starts off really strong, but I'm kind of confused. Are we supposed to believe that this girl who's so fucked up is a virgin to drinking liquor?
Your descriptions of her are really excellent.
"Her aura is made up of smoke and desperation and the only words she expresses are the ones printed on her forehead screaming “use me” in bold red letters to match her lipstick."
I liked that sentence in particular.
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flutter-of-wings In reply to lucelombra [2005-06-04 10:29:15 +0000 UTC]
It was originally intended to be about a girl who is utterly lost and empty, everybody knows it, and she turns to consuming things - poeple, alcohol, drugs, just to make herself feel something. The bartender is supposed to represent all these people who try to sell you things that are meant to make your life perfect again just because you bought the right soap or whatever, this was meant to be written in a lot more detail but I kind of went off it and didn't return to fixing it up...maybe I'll do that sometime soon. Thanks for the lovely comment
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panda-eyes [2004-12-23 16:39:40 +0000 UTC]
Oooo what happens? What happens? Tell me, tell me!
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flutter-of-wings In reply to panda-eyes [2004-12-23 17:55:54 +0000 UTC]
heehee, patience ciara you'll know soon enough
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moi-dix-mois [2004-12-23 15:10:36 +0000 UTC]
Oh... Now I want to know what happens next!
I like this, rather ambiguous.
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flutter-of-wings In reply to moi-dix-mois [2004-12-23 15:34:25 +0000 UTC]
hehe, thank you very much!
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