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Published: 2004-01-16 12:14:55 +0000 UTC; Views: 118; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 23
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Description Under blue sky,
Birds flying,
Clouds racing,
Wind blowing,
Tearing,
Pulling,
Pushing,
Howling,
Rain falling,
Splattering.

I sat unmoving
As the worlds moved on.

On iron core burning
Turning,
Grating,
Shaking.
On great plates of Earth
Sliding,
Sinking,
Heating,
Quivering.
On wet soil with insect and worms,
Tunneling,
Crawling,
Hiding,
Mating.
On grass growing,
Dying,
Flowering,
Seeding.

I sat unmoving
As the worlds moved on.

Seasons changing,
Planets rotating,
Revolving,
Stars burning,
Dying,
Exploding.
Galaxies spinning,
Travelling,
Colliding.
Space Expanding,
Contracting,
Bending.
Black holes forming,
Convulsing,
Devouring,
Suckling.
Entropy increasing,
Order diminishing.
Lives vanishing,
Appearing,
Creating.
Time passing,
Slowing,
Standing.

I sat unmoving
As the worlds moved on.

I would stay,
Forever unchanging,
Observer eternal.

But alas!

This is but an abstract flaw,
In my
logical
construct
of
mind.

My lines are have not been said in full,
Worlds demand my participation,
Action,
Words,
Warning,
Wisdom,

While I sat unmoving
As the worlds moved on.
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Comments: 6

the-seal [2004-04-20 08:26:30 +0000 UTC]

I feel this:

While I sat unmoving
As the worlds moved on.

I think we all feel this from time to time - Idling in life's fast lane...

I love the structure, very untraditional and very impacting

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whywhy [2004-03-24 11:50:08 +0000 UTC]

looks good steve... great descriptions... gives me the image of a time lapse shot of hte stars from the north pole... the stars revolving around one that remains 'stationary'.

good stuff!

whywhy.

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AlwaysTheFlawedOne [2004-01-28 07:03:29 +0000 UTC]

This is quite good. But in your author comments you put "tell me if it pisses you off" Why would it piss someone off? Did I miss something?

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freespace In reply to AlwaysTheFlawedOne [2004-01-30 06:01:02 +0000 UTC]

Ah, thats because I did something to the formatting, that didn't show up on DA.

It may have been annoying to read for some.

Thankyou for your comment

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MNP [2004-01-16 20:26:19 +0000 UTC]

very good, i bet you spent ages comeing up with all the fill words

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freespace In reply to MNP [2004-01-17 07:59:57 +0000 UTC]

It sorta rolled out, but it did take a while to replace often used words

Thanks for the comment mnp

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