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Speaking of, any interested betas to be found here? 

The nurse looked at him kindly, face twisted in a way that told him she was trying to be kind, long tail dusting the sterile floor.

He hated hospitals. Always had. He hated this place more. It sent a cold tingle down his spine and made something deep inside shout at him to flee.

Some of it was likely why he was here. Who he was here for. She’d taken the shot for him, after all. Might have saved them both doing it. Him from something he could never forgive himself for, and her from death.

Yet it still felt like sacrifice.

“Is she like the others were?” She’d been curled up, terrified and begging him to restrain her when the paramedics took her away. When he’d touched her, she’d flinched like his hand was flame, her little nose set on vibrate and he’d had to convince himself it wasn’t he she was afraid of.

She was afraid of hurting him.

It would be comical in any situation where it was less legitimate.

“Not exactly.” The kangaroo’s ears twitched nervously as she fiddles with the pouch in her nurse’s uniform. “But she’s terrified. We should warn you about letting you in, we wouldn't be doing it if you weren’t listed has the priority emergency contact, Officer Wilde. She wouldn't let Elsa Feliday, the ferality expert GED sent over, near her. Poor lioness was pretty torn up about it. We can’t start treatment until we get what’s happening worked out. Whoever started this may have changed the drug.” She winced again. “We may have to pull you out. Rabbits hearts can be a little delicate if frightened enough, and she seems to react worse to predators…”

Well, wasn’t that a good knife to the chest.

‘Are you afraid of me?

Think I’m going to eat you?”

He’d never felt worse for that little stint.

“Officer?”

“Yes. Yes, of course. I understand.” He did, really. It just made him feel horribly cold and lost.

He never wanted anyone to be afraid of him.

The asylum’s chilly walls and bare doors seemed to gloss by, frosted over in his mind despite the Savannah District’s heat. They had moved the ferals before here, and he’d hated hearing the news then, and still did.

“We’re going to look through a one-way window and let you talk to her through a mike first. We’re hoping that won’t trigger it.” The doe’s ears twitched again. He’d learned to read a lot in them since working with Carrots. Worry far too often. “We’re calling in a rabbit expert before trying anything else. She’s so tense it’s likely to strain her heart, which we can’t allow. Working in the savannah, she’s a good deal more delicate that many of the animals we get here.”

Nick nodded tersely as the door was opened. The room beyond the glass was cushioned in friendly white square puffs, clearly built for animals without claws, as it looked soft and almost delicate, rather expensive.

Of course the hero of the city would get the best room they had. That, at least, he could agree with. Still, the foam bubbles also felt frosted over to him. Cold and white and dark and desolate.

Or maybe they just felt that way because of the rabbit cowering in the corner, ears twitching frantically and trembling likes she was freezing, hunched onto all fours.

“Going online now.”

He drew in a deep breath and nodded, and when he spoke it sounded like a prayer. “...Carrots?”


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veiwer23213 [2023-09-20 19:02:00 +0000 UTC]

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to veiwer23213 [2023-11-03 02:26:03 +0000 UTC]

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veiwer23213 In reply to GoldenGriffiness [2023-11-07 02:41:38 +0000 UTC]

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Spino2Earth [2017-10-23 18:18:42 +0000 UTC]

What happened??

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to Spino2Earth [2017-10-23 22:38:33 +0000 UTC]

oh this old thing XD

Yeah Judy got blasted by a new kind of nighthowler dart that causes a regression to base instinct (not just aggression) at to high of a dose so her instinct's are scared of everything, they don't know a cure, and rabbit hearts can actually burst out of terror, so Nick can't even try to approach her without the chance of VERY searious repercussions. (Fatal ones.)

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Spino2Earth In reply to GoldenGriffiness [2017-10-30 21:50:18 +0000 UTC]

Poor Judy. I hope they find a cure

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dinoguts2003 [2017-03-13 03:26:53 +0000 UTC]

This reminds me of the Eclipse aftermath in Berserk.

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to dinoguts2003 [2017-03-14 01:46:27 +0000 UTC]

Afraid I don't know it.

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the-ever-eternal [2016-04-29 20:23:14 +0000 UTC]

so... when can I expect this out, what's it called, and if its already been released where can I find it?

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deathscythe96 [2016-04-10 08:31:47 +0000 UTC]

I just saw zootopia yesterday and must say you did a great job with it im hopping you will make more because this master piece need to be continued

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NightDweller-99 [2016-04-01 02:02:32 +0000 UTC]

I really like this.  I'm a little confused though. 

Does this take place in an AU where they never replaced the poison with a blue berry and Judy got hit instead of Nick, because if it does then wouldn't that mean that Nick isn't yet a cop?  I don't feel like Nick would go through what is probably several months at the academy while knowing that his best friend is in an asylum.

Or...

...has a different incident involving the nighthowler poison taken place and Judy just so happened to get hit?

Anyways this is really good and I definitely want to read the rest when it is finished.  Oh, and the art is really good too. 

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to NightDweller-99 [2016-04-01 03:58:56 +0000 UTC]

It's meant to be mysterious. I'm trying the 'scene from future, then backtrack' style for the first time.

Thankyou!

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NightDweller-99 In reply to GoldenGriffiness [2016-04-01 04:09:28 +0000 UTC]

I see.  Keep it up, this is really interesting so far.

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to NightDweller-99 [2016-04-01 16:41:52 +0000 UTC]

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Tyraka628 [2016-03-22 06:22:06 +0000 UTC]

Huh. Who've guessed you'd get into this movie.

I look forward to see the rest of this story.

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to Tyraka628 [2016-03-24 04:50:09 +0000 UTC]

I'm a animal nut. It was pretty inevitable. XD

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Tyraka628 In reply to GoldenGriffiness [2016-03-24 08:27:37 +0000 UTC]

^^

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BluegrassBrooke [2016-03-21 04:18:05 +0000 UTC]

I'd be happy to be an editor for this if you'd like. ^.^ I have lots of writing experience.

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to BluegrassBrooke [2016-03-24 04:50:43 +0000 UTC]

I've already got someone, but if you'd like to as well feel free to note me.

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BluegrassBrooke In reply to GoldenGriffiness [2016-03-24 05:01:32 +0000 UTC]

Awesome. Glad you found someone! I look forward to reading the next part! 

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to BluegrassBrooke [2016-03-28 03:13:56 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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darrenbarren [2016-03-18 23:35:01 +0000 UTC]

I like this I hope there's a part two to this?.

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to darrenbarren [2016-03-24 04:50:56 +0000 UTC]

It's a work in progress

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Foxfan1992 [2016-03-12 03:42:34 +0000 UTC]

Wow, this is incredible writing. I really love how you're able to communicate the atmosphere and the environment in this. One can only feel just as bad for Nick as they do for Judy in this story.

In my case I tend to separate 'flashback' scenes from the rest of the story with a couple of hashtags, but that's just me. Something like this:

"
Well wasn't that a good knife to the chest.
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'Are you afraid of me? Do you think I might go nuts? You think I might go savage? You think I might try to... eat you?!'
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Nick's breathing was shallow as he snapped himself out of that memory. He'd never felt worse for that little stint.
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If you'd like to take a look at my Zootopia fanfic I'd really appreciate it! It's not as good as yours but, still. fav.me/d9ujita

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to Foxfan1992 [2016-03-24 04:52:27 +0000 UTC]

Thankyou!

I don't quite have the time at the moment, sorry. Been busy with convention prep.

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Foxfan1992 In reply to GoldenGriffiness [2016-03-24 04:59:55 +0000 UTC]

It's okay, whenever you find the time.

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YoshiIsBetter [2016-03-11 04:39:53 +0000 UTC]

Man, Judy! What's happened to you?

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to YoshiIsBetter [2016-03-24 04:52:48 +0000 UTC]

Altered Night Howler

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pixelheart18 [2016-03-09 06:39:54 +0000 UTC]

Where is the rest of the story going to be? It's really good so far

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to pixelheart18 [2016-03-24 04:53:30 +0000 UTC]

Probably here, as I can't illustrate it at my usual fanfiction haunts. 

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Evertide [2016-03-09 03:20:08 +0000 UTC]

Oh wow.  Since I saw the movie I wondered what it would be like if one of them was actually drugged, and you got it down pretty good, especially in the sense of what it did to her and to everyone else.  I felt sad reading this, reading how much it hurt Nick.  I would be totally jazzed to read more.

I do have one question.  Unless I'm misunderstanding, at the end of this part, it seems like Nick is still going to see her, and since he can see her at the beginning he's already there:

“We’re going to look through a one-way window and let you talk to her through a mike first. We’re hoping that won’t trigger it.” The doe’s ears twitched again. He’d learned to read a lot in them since working with Carrots. Worry far too often. “We’re calling in a rabbit expert before trying anything else. She’s so tense it’s likely to strain her heart, which we can’t allow. Working in the savannah, she’s a good deal more delicate that many of the animals we get here.”

Nick nodded tersely as the door was opened. The room beyond the glass was cushioned in friendly white square puffs, clearly built for animals without claws, as it looked soft and almost delicate, rather expensive.


One other little thing:
Rabbits hearts can be a little delicate
I believe you meant rabbits' or rabbit (either's fine).

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to Evertide [2016-03-09 04:06:39 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much for such excellent feedback! The people I usually ask to beta fro me aren't available for this one, would you be interested? I can give you a link to the dox. You'll also get to read more

He's going into a room with a one-way window, like to question people in a cop show, but to observe a patient.

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ArtyPaints [2016-03-08 22:23:35 +0000 UTC]

This is deep man. Good job!!

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to ArtyPaints [2016-03-09 01:05:41 +0000 UTC]

Thankyou!

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James-Golding [2016-03-08 22:21:55 +0000 UTC]

Fucking Google translator. Judy got the ball with a night howlers, but she did not become wild, and was afraid Nick?

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DeeNII [2016-03-08 19:01:28 +0000 UTC]

goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood
god god godddd this is awesomeeeeeeeeee

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to DeeNII [2016-03-08 19:03:43 +0000 UTC]

^.^ Thankyou!

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DeeNII In reply to GoldenGriffiness [2016-03-08 19:08:25 +0000 UTC]

you keep going

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GoldenGriffiness In reply to DeeNII [2016-03-08 19:11:11 +0000 UTC]

^.^ I hope to. The plots still in flux, at the moment. I think Bogo just went rogue and is forcing me to do some worldbuilding... 

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DeeNII In reply to GoldenGriffiness [2016-03-08 19:18:53 +0000 UTC]

it dont matter XD i wanna keep reading

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