UndiscoveredMuse [2014-04-22 14:38:45 +0000 UTC]

I like how it sound like an actual entity, like the way you would think of an enchanted tree. your imagery makes it sound like a guardian, with actual warmth and affection as opposed to the reality of what it really is. This actually makes me thing of the time my friend would tell how he would treat the wall in his room. It was exactly like this, so i like how its very relatable. Very well done. Great composition, the message is short but has a lot of volume and leaves room for the imagination.  

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misery-business93 [2014-04-21 18:36:32 +0000 UTC]

I think this is a well though out poem. It's a very interesting way to look at things. The word choice and rhythm work well together. I really like it

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Wicked-Faerie [2014-04-20 21:55:11 +0000 UTC]

The rhyme and the imagery in this poem is amazing. It flows perfectly. I really like this. ^_^ <3 

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AcaciaGreen [2014-04-18 23:31:21 +0000 UTC]

Heh yeah. Good stuff. The way you portray them reminds me of God, even if that isn't what you intended.

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inknalcohol [2014-04-17 20:37:42 +0000 UTC]

You successfully keep your rhythm throughout.  Very well done.  I like how in the first two stanzas the poem uses the walls almost catharticly (yes, I just made that a word) and then in the last, the walls are used as guards.  And moreso, that this could be physical walls, but also metaphorical walls.  Like the ones we build up inside us. 

I like.  Very lovely.

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Sleyf [2014-04-17 18:46:32 +0000 UTC]

I love the idea, and even more so as you portrayed the walls both as comfort but also in some respects as emprisonment with the daylight line, very nice!

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jmelisio [2014-04-17 09:33:55 +0000 UTC]

I like this Nice one

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MrChinn [2014-04-17 05:06:27 +0000 UTC]

wonderful mon cheri!

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cmalik [2014-04-17 04:24:56 +0000 UTC]

I do that too. I love your poem. It is so pretty.

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