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intricately-ordinary — Reverse Polarity and a Little Bit of Fate
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Published: 2012-07-19 21:33:02 +0000 UTC; Views: 531; Favourites: 11; Downloads: 3
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He believed in angelsShe believed in lies
she was hummingbird-reminiscent
gifted with flight, she strayed from sight
and her secrets were hidden between her rapid wings
He counted his lucky stars
She cursed barren skies
her laugh resonated, hollow
it echoed off the walls she built
to keep intruders out
He fell for her, hopelessly
He dreamed only to make her smile
she pretended he didn't exist
still, he was drawn to her (like a moth,
to bad ideas)
She told him she was too far lost
(Though she was only in denial)
his eyes glinted, golden
bright enough to melt the frozen rock
she had called her heart
Despite her tries, she loved him, too
She decided to do something new:
she was cynical and jaded
he dreamed to touch the sky
that made them love each other more
despite her fears, she helped him fly
she smiled (for the first time in a while)
maybe, she thought
all those breaks along the way were worth it.
she got her happy ending.
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Comments: 51
Oh, you seem to have found my other cliche love poem! xD
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Hahahaha yeah XD this one is still not too cliche XP
I'm still debating on which One of yours i should suggest for a DD
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Is this another style of poetry. I feel like this one is an open ended thought suspended within your creativity. I can relate to it as well. When an unstoppable force meets an immovable object. There are fireworks here and I can see them quite clearly.
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Thank-you. I've had this weird thing lately where, when I try to write a poem, it comes out in two thoughts. So that was how I chose to keep both in there. I'm happy you could see the fireworks, I don't often write love poems.
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Well I like when you do love isn't a single thought it's several coalescing
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This is really nice. All the words seem very well chosen for it. The way the two line stanzas are so opposite in meaning and in feel works surprisingly well I think. I especially like the bit with the secrets in the hummingbird's wings. Good feel to that. Well done
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Thank you, I'm glad. I tried out something new by alternating stanzas, I'm glad you liked it.
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Aah ok, well this has definitely worked 
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This is a unique work; the idea how you have merged the opposites is impressive and the expressions are beautiful at times. I am a little doubtful of the style equipped and well... it seems sort of haphazard to me (I see the form but I don't see it working) but I guess I try new styles myself.
Th start was a bit confusing but near the end all is slowly explained. Good work
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Ahaha, ironic you say that. It took me about 3 days and 17 drafts to write this, which never happens. I scrapped so much. Every time I wrote it, I began to talk about them meeting, and it turned into something of a mini-epic. So what I tried to do was write my concrete stanzas, then have fun describing the people poetically in between. I'll keep it in mind about the form, but I'm glad I finally got this poem written. Thanks for the advice.
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You are welcome and I see this work is one of your (got a lot of work on it) sort of work
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Aw, this is amazing! The imagery is so strong....awesome work
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DAW I love you!
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I mean to say, I liked it when I skimmed it but I need time to read it properly! and yup that is good
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OHHH I know the feeling, whenever you get time.
and, I guess I didn't make it clear in the description, but the non-italics stanzas are supposed to go together and rhyme... anyways. thanks!
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pfff you are making it sound bad
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OHH I'm sorry I meant it nicely, because I do that too ^-^
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I agree with the person below. You are gifted, and this is amazing. <3
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okay, so, I know I say this a lot now, but I was thinking about you again when writing the phrases in italics.
You're kinda one of my greatest inspirations now xD
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Well, now I'm kinda misty-eyed, and it's your fault.
I just don't even know what to say. You're so incredibly sweet! And definitely one of my biggest inspirations! <33
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Aye, well you have! nUn <3
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AWW thank-you!!
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No problem!~
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thank you, I can't tell you how much that means to me
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lol, why should it mean anything? i'm nobody
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Because we live in a society where are worth is determined by the opinions of our peers
Also, it means a lot to me because I don't think I'm all that good.
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Well society hasn't deemed mine to be all that wonderful (not that I've really let it out there for society to get its filthy mits on) so my worth as a poet or writer in anyway shape or form is negligible at best.
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There are two extremes. Self-deprecating, and utterly narcissistic. For the artist, the second is better- because others will gladly pull them apart for no reason, so I suggest you start throwing yourself parades in your honor. Plus, you are good, so you don't need to say you aren't.
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Nah, I'm... What's the opposite of an attention whore? Reclusive?
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Reclusive can still be self-involved 
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Oh, I'm not saying I'm not a genius, even if I do doubt my prowess as a poet. My mind is my second best feature.
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You're welcome! ^^
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Funny thing is, the vast majority of relationships are akin to this. There's always the ups and the downs, the similarities and, of course, the differences. I especially love how all of this branched just from him wanting to make her smile. Beautiful poem compact into a story
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Thank you, for this and the fav
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I am The Realist, and I approve this poem!
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I would hope so
(haha you noticed I call you friend in the description? 
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Yes I did comrade! Yes I did..
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thanks, that means so much!
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