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jmstew39 — Puritans on Nature
Published: 2005-10-17 19:21:43 +0000 UTC; Views: 198; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 30
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Just keep in close and do not strayThese woods, my child, are most unkind
For once you’re lost it’s here you’ll stay.
Of course not child! Hear what I say:
These trees are by the devil signed!
Just keep in close and do not stray.
It’s growing dark. To God I pray
That we shall soon some shelter find;
For once you’re lost it’s here you’ll stay.
No child we’ll have to wait till day
For once just quiet be, and mind:
Just keep in close and do not stray.
The trees, give life? They’d rather slay!
Praise God or else your soul they’ll bind,
For once you’re lost it’s here you’ll stay.
I swear I’d give my soul away,
To make this evil to us blind.
Just keep in close and do not stray,
For once you’re lost it’s here you’ll stay.
Comments: 3
I rather like this one.
This poem alone makes me glad I visited your gallery. I found one of your poems, and frankly wasn't all that impressed, but there was obvious thought behind it, and I was interested enough to visit your gallery. All in all, I'm not sure what I think about it. I think you think a bit too much in your poetry and it can be hard to follow
That is, though, something most modern poetry lacks, and it's nice to see some change and not just more poems spewing "Oh no! My life is so horrible! My rich parents are making me pay for half the gas for my Porche! Oh angst!"
This poem, though, I really like. It's awesome. Keep up the good work.
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I do try to keep some sort of moral or ethical value in all of my poems. The one that I think you're referring to really is quite poor. It's remniscent of the free verse I used to write in jr. high. I agree that this one is kind of hard to follow, though.I think it's because you can't tell what the child is saying, and can only guess by what the adult's responses were. This was to an extent the desired effect but an alternate structure could easily have been used.
Thankyou for visiting my gallery and sharing your opinions, though. I still haven'y loaded all of my poems on this site yet but I have a few more you might like.
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