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Kaweempo — Shallow
Published: 2009-01-14 17:20:40 +0000 UTC; Views: 640; Favourites: 24; Downloads: 0
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More in my face than is my tasteI grow so weary I'll surrender
to what they say Let them lead the way
Till' I can no longer remember
my darling dreams Prewritten scenes,
whatever felt my own
So to save face I'll take my place
Where I may safely feel alone
Glad the waters are so shallow
When the river runs so cold
I'm quick to wait, and slow to hate
They call me gracious for my patience
And I feel proud under that shroud
And all the while it's all evasion
Some humor here to fend off fear
And I'm a little more lost, oh dear
So to save face I'll hold my place
So I may safely feel alone
Glad the waters are so shallow
When the river runs so cold
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Comments: 17
Lovely work, it's been featured here in this article Emotions: Laid Bare
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Thank you.. very much appreciated! ^_^
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yea i think i told u about this one it's perfect (Y) it's KAREEM MAGDIE
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Heyy there.. Long time..
Thanks glad it made you wow!
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hmm I pretty much like the concept, but I'm sure with more work, it can look much more realistic in my opinion.
For instance, the tree coming out of the head. When I look at the roots, I can't help but get the feeling that it was literally cut from another picture, and pasted here. So I would say, work more on the roots to make it more believable that it's actually coming out of his head.
And maybe add a little noise to the tree layer so it feels more part of the image, and it all looks homogeneous.
Another thing is the pigeons.. Where do you want them to go? Away from the tree or towards the tree? Cause one of them seems to be going towards the tree, and one is flying away.
So unless this was your intention, I would recommend to have them both flying towards the tree, and also add some noise to that layer.
I'm sorry, I'm a critique addict +_+ lol but your work is so good mashaAllah, and I really want to give you the necessary feedback that I think would make your work even better
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Hey Soraya.. Thanks a lot for the very valuable comment.. I really appreciate it!
I totally agree with you in every single thing you pointed out..
and I will work on it soon inshaAllah!
Thanks once again!
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