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THE hidden name behind this faceThe memories that time cannot erase.
Things no one wants to know,
Are things I whisper, quiet and low.
THINGS that may not seem much-
A gentle hand, her soothing touch.
Mistakes and choices that they made,
The red inside this burning rage.
I'LL wonder when I lay at night,
Who'll be there to hold me tight?
My heart longs to rise, to grow
To seek the answers I'll never know.
NEVER is what I hear at your name.
A hush, a whisper- Oh, quiet pain
You surround me all day long,
You are the music, but he is the song.
TELL me no secret and tell me no lie-
Don't say you love me, for I cannot reply.
My heart is tucked in a bottle away
It screams the words that I'll never say.
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Comments: 38
Ginger-Cat-16 [2012-06-24 19:23:19 +0000 UTC]
Wow. Just, Wow. I like it very much. Your writing just is sooo, emotional...
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LassieBob In reply to Ginger-Cat-16 [2012-06-30 23:36:02 +0000 UTC]
Thank you. I try to put as much emotion into my work as possible
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LassieBob In reply to Isoya-star [2012-06-12 15:17:35 +0000 UTC]
Thank you =]
I like to think the emotion behind it is what makes it so easy to connect to.
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Isoya-star In reply to LassieBob [2012-06-12 15:19:19 +0000 UTC]
I have to agree with you there. i am sure many people could relate to the emotion you emphasised in your piece. It really is a wounderful piece of literature!
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Darketh90 [2012-05-02 03:16:39 +0000 UTC]
Some things are best written around midnight lol
Very nice ^^ love your style andhow you worded the lines! And that was certainly a clever way to put the theme in xD lol
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LassieBob In reply to Darketh90 [2012-05-02 03:18:09 +0000 UTC]
Midnight definitely seems to be a good time for writers.
And thank you This is one of my favorite poems, and I loved the theme.
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SimpleData [2012-04-17 20:55:51 +0000 UTC]
The entire thing is very clever. I especially like the line "Never is what I hear at your name."
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LassieBob In reply to SimpleData [2012-04-17 21:07:03 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for taking the time to appreciate it. That's what makes it worth the time to me
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SimpleData In reply to LassieBob [2012-04-17 21:34:23 +0000 UTC]
Well with something this amazing, you have to take the time to stop and appriciate it^^
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Jchamilton12 [2012-04-13 02:57:16 +0000 UTC]
Very good. It shall describe others more than they could themselves. Me included
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LassieBob In reply to Jchamilton12 [2012-04-13 02:59:19 +0000 UTC]
Words are only there to express ourselves, and my goal was to not only express myself, but others. =]
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Jchamilton12 In reply to LassieBob [2012-04-13 03:03:32 +0000 UTC]
Yes quite. That is a point of writing. many reasons follow...
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crazi-4-muffinz [2012-04-13 02:25:23 +0000 UTC]
This is really beautiful & sad..It feels like there's a lot of longing in the words.
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LassieBob In reply to crazi-4-muffinz [2012-04-13 02:29:58 +0000 UTC]
There is quite a bit of longing, to be honest. I poured my heart out in this piece... I'm glad you liked it =]
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mysteredelanuit [2012-04-04 15:28:02 +0000 UTC]
There is a sadly beautiful sense of longing in these words. Very well done.
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Zachary1991 [2012-04-04 15:02:47 +0000 UTC]
Wow......I'm amazed and entranced to say the least.....
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Zachary1991 In reply to LassieBob [2012-04-04 15:05:28 +0000 UTC]
You have fullfilled your goal.
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LassieBob In reply to SomeonesBella [2012-03-30 18:31:19 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad you find it worth reading =]
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LassieBob In reply to Pagan-Moon-Dreamer [2012-03-29 15:42:01 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad you enjoyed it =]
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