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Published: 2008-03-28 05:44:27 +0000 UTC; Views: 108; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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and if I was a monstermy mouth stretched open
and pins through my cheeks
choking on bread crusts
choking and coughing on the basement floor
pull the wires through and shut my mount
and if I was a monster
I'd hiss through anemic lips
gnash my broken teeth and raise a wail
why would you -?
hit me with the bat
you don't want blood on your hands
not that I could bleed
you just won't touch me anymore
why won't you -?
and the wires and the ropes
the shackles cut but I'm too weak
too weak to stand
too weak to bleed
and the dry crumbs make me choke
I wish I had some water
but the only moisture is your piss
does it get you off?
why -?
kick me
you aren't bare foot
why don't you -?
why won't you step on me anymore?
is my pain not enough anymore?
TOUCH ME!
I want your hand
your skin as you hit me
your heel as you crush me into the dirt
crush me...
crush
me
Comments: 3
I like it! I like the intimate details that suggest pain and the odd joy the narrator seems to get out of it. One thing I'm curious about is the lack of capitals and stuff.
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hmm, lack of capitals and punctuation...
In general? Laziness.
In this specific case? I'd say it suggests a submissive/insignificant position in the relationship. perhaps some sub/Dom type stuff?
I don't really know, it's not my personal cup of tea, it's just something I got a vision for and wrote down.
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Ahh, that does work in a D/s sort of situation, except I's wouldn't be capitilized either in that case, and any part of talking about the dominant person would be capitalized, i.e. 'You's'.
Either way I like it! Was just curious.
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