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Published: 2004-11-12 17:00:39 +0000 UTC; Views: 63; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 5
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What can I do to help you?How can I let you be?
You aren’t a perfect person,
but much more so than I can be.
I would hope that you find happiness,
Though I know it won’t be me
I can’t bare to see you suffer,
But you’ll have no help from me.
I want to fucking help you!
So why can you not see,
that , though a poet, I can love you
in ways other then poets do.
I don’t want to fuck you,
nor my ring upon your hand.
I only want to help you,
The only way I can.
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"I want to fucking help you!"
as opposed to virgin help.
the only thing that doesn't fit, and i can't think of any grammar that would make is sound like you want it to.
i know it's supposed to be "S/he won't let me help", but it seems (with the modern grammar of the piece) that this doesn't quite fit in. maybe something like:
"I can't bear to see you suffer,
But you wish no help from me."
it clarifies an otherwise confusing phrase.
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lol. "virgin help"
thanks for the thoughtful comment.
I've been looking at this one lately, 'cause I think it has some potential... and meaning... and stuff. And that line has been bothering me also. I think your idea might well do the trick.
I will prolly want to polish off a few other places on the poem, and add in your sugestion (I like it more and more the more I look at it), and then I will post version 2. or something...
thanks. you're awesome!
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