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Neologism
Published: 2010-08-22 06:31:30 +0000 UTC; Views: 5902; Favourites: 116; Downloads: 350
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There is a moment, tired and quiet,that lingers in the inside of a person
drawing symbols on the inner walls
in fingerpaints and blunted charcoal.
People ask for things, in passion
in passing fancy, in desperate need...
people ask, and they ask, and ask
loud and bleating sacrificial lambs.
Why must it be for passing joy, floating
through the air like prancing butterflies
from marigold to globemallow and lilac -
fleeting things no sooner saw then gone
There are symbols I've been reading
symbols that tell a story of things
more than marigolds and nectar -
symbols to connect impossibilities.
It is a quiet jargon of signs, of angles
all very sad and abundantly peaceful
that somehow caused a reckoning
and set me at odds with reality.
It is all so very beautiful, and angry
the way a newborn enters the world
the way some seem to leave it
full of empty and so very meaningful.
Longfellow saw, he called them a bird,
a tide's rise and fall, a simple moment
that reached out quietly from the ages
to lean burdens upon unlikely prophets.
I have to keep looking at them though,
I have to keep staring,
or I cannot breathe.
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Comments: 45
Something new that looks back at Longfellow and the unlikely prophets.
I like it.
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I don't believe I am a poet because the world needs to hear my voice...I am a poet because I hear the worlds voice.
Truer words have never been spoken. Congrats on your DD. Now get back to writing like you do! It's obvious we want more. 
Dae*
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Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered.
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It's beautiful and a meaningful reflection on life.
How sad that people no longer wish to buy volumes of poetry... your work would have been more appreciated in a different time, perhaps.
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I buy volumes of writing still. Known and unknown writers whom I've never read or have read so much I feel as though I know them on a personal level.
Let me tell you, this artist, writer is and always has been a great talent. A friendly, fyi.
But you are right. The time of poetry being more than what it's become is gone and it's up to us, people like this writer, yourself and me + others to re-awaken the desire for the written word. Maybe it's wishful thinking, but I have my children to pass this along to. Hopefully they will keep it alive during their time. And what we do now will provoke them (their generation) to keep it alive.
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Well said!
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That remnds of this.
I hope so too. ^^
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Come now...Even if there is redemption to my work now...I completely SUCKED when I got here. There is probably some of that dribble still lodged in the crevasses of my gallery. It took some very patient and/or very harsh critics to get me to even move to this point. And even after all these years and my 3 BA's...I still think I'm mediocre :-P
I really really really appreciate your faith in me...but it just proves that you have a very beautiful heart that overpowers your discerning eyes :-P
It isn't so much that poetry is dead...I've done enough work editing and spoken to enough editors to know that the amount of submissions alone is enough to deny that. I think the problem lies in the fact that poetry requires FAR FAR more from the reader, and people are simply unable to look past themselves and their present entertainment. If it isn't masturbation, we simply don't feel its worthy of pursuit.
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I don't believe I am a poet because the world needs to hear my voice...I am a poet because I hear the worlds voice.
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This pulled me in with it's beautiful imagery and rhythm....
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you must send this to a competition, publish it, or something to make this great piece of literature known. This is one of the few that are over my head[compounded with the fact that i'm sick]. It pulls a lots of meaning from our culture... and for that it Transcends my idea of Perfect.
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I wouldn't look for much from me in print. I am a mediocre poet at best, and even the best poets are only for graduate courses and passing conversation. The world no longer believes in poetry as a medium, it doesn't have time for it. It is all very sad, perhaps...but such is the way of things, we use what is useful - and what is not, we allow to rot.
I do appreciate your sentiment though, as well as your belief in my work. And I thank you for both, even though I think they might be misplaced.
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Man...if only I had a dollar for every time a woman has said that to me...
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...and come now, you're not old - although you are mighty!
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I will, of course, take it as a compliment...assuming you're not referring to all this neurosis, self-deprecation, and general angst. :-P
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yea... you are right on that poetry is lost as a medium... maybe if people read more of it.
and( at the risk of being cliched) you are talented and humble!
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I'm not a poet, so I can't really leave any critique on this, but this piece had me reading with my mouth open.
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o my gosh.... this is just beautifull! masterfully done Neologism!
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Beautifully written. I was captured from the first line.
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i understand what you mean. i feel that way too. well put.
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This was so hypnotizing - and though the words did not rhyme.. In my head, it still did. xD I don't know how to explain it.. But it has a really good beat to it <3
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I try for that effect. I think you'll find that most of the "masters" can accomplish that without rhyme. So that is a compliment that I will certainly take to heart. Thank you
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i can't believe there aren't more comments for this writing O.o
i love the ending ^^
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The opening two lines are absolutely beautiful<3
This poem is amazing, the lines are so philosophical and calm, as though someone is just sitting back and thinking one evening.<3
Congrats on the DD, you deserve it
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Lovely, and congratulations. ^^
May I make one suggestion?
The second line of the first stanza, maybe y would you consider, ""that lingers inside a person"?
And I hope there are no typos in this message - it's not showing me what I say so I can't tell.
I wish you well, meantime.
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That is a very good suggestion. I often am too wordy.
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Well, by the way a few have reacted, it is after all only a suggestion. And as you explained to one, if you change one line, you might need to change the meter throughout though not necessarily. Anyway, thank you for knowing the suggestion is valid, and thank you for knowing I meant it from one poet to another. As for beyond your skill, there's a style and a voice to each of us who write as part of our lifeline and passion. Sometimes to make a change will alter your poet's "voice", so you go with what speaks to you as well as your readers. After all...
it's still a joy to have met you in this way, and I hope we'll keep in touch. ^.^
(ah, tonight it's letting me see what I'm writing, too!)
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Perhaps we shall :-P Observing some of your work...you definitely need to be on my watch list :-P
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I'm very honored by this, thank you. ^.^
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nothing is in stone...I'd have to make it still fit the beat that I already established, regardless...which is why it's rather wordy to begin with. It is a valid suggestion, but probably beyond my skill.
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Beyond your skill? Tell me you don't actually believe that. 
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I like wordy things. I say keep it
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I love the first stanza... very hypnotic, beautiful.
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