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mokmok07 — Over The Fantasy -Demo- PG 2
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Published: 2006-12-23 18:53:41 +0000 UTC; Views: 952; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 18
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Finally finished PG2, in this page effect is more than drawing =_=, it also use a lot of screen tone for the overall feeling ^_^. As usual if you found some grammer mistake in my manga plz correct me or inform me ^_^ TQLink To:-
Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 1
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Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 2
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Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 3
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Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 4
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Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 5
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Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 6
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Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 7
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Over The Fantasy-Demo- PG 8
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hmm...it should be join instead of joint. but like the 1st page, it's good.
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I really like the pages so far. As for the grammer, ~SinfulShinrai already pointed out what I was going to say...^_^
Fantastic art!
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I did...It's great so far...^_^ There will be more pages? I'm getting hooked on the story.
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Yes there more 2 or 3 pages, don't worry i'll finish it soon ^_^
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Noticed some grammatical error. ^.^;
Probably should be "Hey there! I think you forgot (instead of forget) to finish our group assignment!! Do you want to fail together (or maybe even, "do you want us both to fail?")
Then "Can you join me? I don't want to be alone here... Please?"
And finally, "When I (capitalized) heard the way he talked to me, I knew it was "today" again."
Hope that helped. ^__^;
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Thank you sinful-chan ^_^ plz dun laugh that my grammer is noob, your realy help me a lot Thk again "chu"
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Oh, no problem. ^.^ I'm only glad to help. <3
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If got grammer mistake on next next pg plz help me ya, "chu" ^3^
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Eek, I noticed, you put some of my comments in there. XDD Sorry, I should have been more clear.
First panel:
Take out the "instead of forget" part.
Last panel: Get rid of the "capitalized" part.
So it'd be:
"Hey there! I think you forgot to finish our group assignment!! Do you want us both to fail?"
and
"When I heard the way he talked to me, I knew it was "today" again."
Sorry for being so confusing. ^.^;;
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Yeah actually i think it was weird words, but for respect i put it in. Sorry it too ^_^
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