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I did this in FreeHand MX ......I'm really excited about how this picture turned out in pretty much every aspect.....i originally planned for there to be kitteh kat ears on her but it was a distraction from the subject of the picture.Related content
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Ryonyanko [2007-11-14 02:41:22 +0000 UTC]
sorry I sent it too quickly. continuing- her pattern on her outfit would have been a good idea if you were going for a manga or comic book style (the "tones" manga artists use to shade and give effects have this look) but it is hard to see any real definition to her figure. I like the coloring and the hair and such but the lines are a tad too thick and there isn't much shading. This is about everything I can nitpick about. The overall character seems really cute- I like her idea. Right now the problems are - anatomy (like body depth, roundness, and proportions IE size of head to body) the lighting and attention to shading (heck it isn't easy) but seeing as this is your first drawn submission to DA it really is a good start! better than mine i'll say >>
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OddFoxxeP In reply to Ryonyanko [2007-11-14 21:33:02 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much......that was really helpful because I did not even notice the anatomy problems......or any of the other problems......Yes this was exactly what i was hoping for.....
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Ryonyanko In reply to OddFoxxeP [2007-11-14 23:27:49 +0000 UTC]
no problem you can always to to critme or you can even ask me personally (i don't know if alot of members of critme are very active
) and I will do my best. If you want I could go even more in depth in notes or elsewhere for future problems!
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OddFoxxeP In reply to OddFoxxeP [2007-11-14 21:55:21 +0000 UTC]
By light source do you mean where it's coming from and or the lack of definition of the light source?
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Ryonyanko In reply to OddFoxxeP [2007-11-14 23:26:15 +0000 UTC]
Well, I can see a bright spot inbetween her eyes which tells me where the light source is, but the shading on ther person does not define that.... soooo i would say lack of definition. D: i haven't quite got the hang of that out myself either
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Ryonyanko In reply to OddFoxxeP [2007-11-15 00:24:08 +0000 UTC]
:3 no problem, you can always ask me for stuff too
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OddFoxxeP In reply to Ryonyanko [2007-11-14 21:32:55 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much......that was really helpful because I did not even notice the anatomy problems......or any of the other problems......Yes this was exactly what i was hoping for.....
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Ryonyanko [2007-11-14 02:36:22 +0000 UTC]
^^ hello from #critme its really slow over there, so paitents... not many members actually go to the chartroom when they probably should be. Yet, I am always eger to help (if not wanting a help myself too) so I will be more than willing to help you. If you looked in the chatroom most of us are idle and check back so no need for yelling and such. patients is golden. You stated that you wanted this piece to be crit upon in a nit-picky fashion then I will give it my best.
Alright I like the pose and idea. She looks very serene and such. I like the way you outlined her and she almost looks like she is in a photograph. There are a couple of problems however- concerning anatomy (but because this is anime it might boil down to preference and style). The most trouble I am seeing right now is the definition of her face.
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