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Published: 2004-07-29 04:04:22 +0000 UTC; Views: 205; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 30
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This picture actually should be hiding in the scraps section, but let's be honest, how often does anyone ever look in there? So I'm thinking to myself, I want feedback. I know! I make this the "Ink Version" as it were.If you can't tell, I messed up Sakura's face and redid it on the PC using my crappy tablet in PSP, which doesn't take kindly to my tablet, and is not as good as painter in that respect. I don't know if you can see it all that well, but I think it's rather obvious....
You should have seen her face before I 'fixed' it though, I mean, woof! Anyway, if I get round to colouring this, I'll try and redo the face, or I may try to repair the damage on paper. I draw better on paper anyway.
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Wow, so many comments. I feel dwarfed by these comments.
Essentially the figures are wrong. The girl in the foreground has the body of a male (thick arms, legs). The girl in the background, Sakura, is out of proportion. So, body type wrong, proportion wrong, but still better than anything I could draw. If you redrew it and coloured it I'm sure it would look great.
*chocolate will be given!*
Off to work, off to work... uh, NOW!
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I agree with the things ered said. Bear in mind that this is really good. My school trained me to look for flaws so I can fix them in my own work, and I'm studying figures. I hope you don't mind. I wouldn't if you hadn't asked.
Something bothers me about the woman on the left's wrists. At first I thoguht they were a bit thick. Well drawn, but thick. Obviously she is very muscular, but there's really not that much muscle there to build. But that may not be it. perhaps, her forearms should be longer? Were you foreshortening them? My hands fall very low on my butt (lower than hers), if I hold my arms like hers. If I raise my hands to that height (hands similar in relation to body) my elbows are somewhat bent, which hers do not appear to be. Second, I think her balance is a bit off-- see the center of her torso versus the center of her feet?
Sakura- The problem with her neck is probably more straightness than it is length (though maybe both). It is too straight. Even women have a visible trapezius. Check out your neck in the mirror, in a similar position. Think about how it meets your shoulders. Her arms bother me. In the left one (on our right), my only problem is that her shoulder/deltoid is tiny considering the lower portion. I think the other arm is not attatching correctly to the body. look only at the forearms- it looks like they're straight-on, when one of her shoulders is twisted considerably away from us. I thi-ink the way to fix this is for that side's elbow to be higher and slightly smaller as it is further away, with both parts of the arm projecting toward us (I assume).
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About Ino, yeah, her arms are supposed to be slightly crooked, which clearly isn't very obvious (now that I actually look at the image) And I can see what you mean about the wrists. I think that they were the first thing I drew - apart from the face so I was a bit too attached to them, I think.
I like the way they're formed even though they are a bit too big. And because I was drawing midway down an A4 sheet of paper I probably just wanted to add in as much detail as possible. I'm quite fond of how I drew Ino's elbows though, for some reason...don't know why. Also, when I scanned the image, the scanner cropped the bottom part of it, so it's not quite so clear as in the picture that Ino isn't actually standing flat-footed, so that could be causing the imbalance.
And as for Sakura, I hear you. She was the last figure that I drew and it was already probably (knowing me) 3 am, so I didn't really care much about it and I didn't put as much effort into it as the Ino figure.
Thanks for your comments, it's nice to get a big long juicy one for a change :woot: and hopefully, I'll keep this in mind next time....either that or start drawing abstract
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I think that would solve the balance. I almost put a disclaimer on the statement about how that is possible if blah blah blah but it got complicated so I cut it. I'm with you. Lately I'm all jealousy over 's watercolors. I think I may feel a little better artistically once the semester starts up again and forces me to do stuff.
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I really like this for the fact that Ino and Sakura's forms have some real weight to them. It's nice to see them rendered in a less stylized manner and more mature. I love the update to Sakura's dress there XD And I could very well see Ino getting a tattoo like that if she persisted with the Sasuke fandom. It's a nice piece.
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Hey thanks...I've tried (miserably) to emmulate other peoples styles before and it never turned out, so I've given up on that and just stuck to my own style. When I get around to fixing up Sakura's face, I might colour it, and oh what a site that shall be (yeah, right).
Thanks for the comment!
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You're very welcome. Best of luck coloring it too! I hope it works out well because it'd look great in color.
I think you have a really nice, solid style to work with here. It reminds me a bit of, if you haven't seen her work, ~Chelsee 's stuff. (I think that's the right username). Anyway, I love it as a change of pace if nothing else!
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Ok, lets comment like we've never before
I am not really familiar with the characters and as you probably know I'm not a native English speaker, so there might be some things that are strange in this. If so, ask me, an I'll be happy to explain what I mean
The girl on the right: I like her face, it's very pretty, and her expression is good. Her neck however seems a bit too long for the face. Her pose is good otherwise, but her legs (especially below the knees) look too short. It looks a bit like you've run out of space for her legs, if you know what I mean. I've been told, that legs should cover approximately half of the body, or so.
The girl on the left: Her hair is beautiful, and again her expression is great ^^. What I don't quite like is that she looks a bit boyish. Her chin seems a bit too strong for a girl, and it makes her look different style from the other girl. Again, her neck seems too long to me, and there is something a bit akward about her pose. Maybe her hands, I don't know.
Umm... I don't know if made any sense, but I did my best ^^
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YAY!!! A REAL COMMENT!!!
In actual fact.....I did run out of page....I always do and I never mean to. Thanks for you comments, your English is excellent!
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