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Published: 2009-09-20 18:07:53 +0000 UTC; Views: 2597; Favourites: 88; Downloads: 100
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Description a strange fellow
bestowed his slow strut
upon the side-walk
catercorner from
my car.

(I watched as if
the light
would never
               change.)

one hand-to-
mouth
the other flailed
as if conducting
the wild orchestra
that was his own
wandering
eyes.

he was just-more-
than walking in place
as the sun kicked
pretty silver
from the wet-
prerequisite of
a spit-
shined chin.

(the horns
of those behind me
had begun to
sound.)

this man did not
know the world
that imprisoned me

NO!
      he existed
the way dogs dream;
legs kicking, barking, whining,
merely reacting

here
to occurrences
in another realm

and as cars
flew past
honking,
     middle fingers like
thin-tubby little-
flesh microphones
to amplify the,
Move it asshole!

there was a place
I'd rather be.
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Comments: 41

saucysmom [2014-06-27 22:29:18 +0000 UTC]

well done. luv the mikes!

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TheGalleryOfEve [2014-06-27 02:01:26 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!!

I’m very happy for you!!!

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snowysylva [2014-06-26 22:59:57 +0000 UTC]

I really like this image of a man among everything stopped, yet so animated. Thank you for this sliver of another world. 

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XShatteredxGlassX [2014-06-26 20:05:48 +0000 UTC]

This is awesome. Very simple yet so vibrant. It brought a smile to my face.  

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CrescentNubila [2014-06-26 18:11:58 +0000 UTC]

Very nice.

Congrats on the Daily Deviation!

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SpiralingSpontaneity [2014-06-26 13:26:15 +0000 UTC]

Fantastic work- congratulations on the daily deviation, it was well deserved c:

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ShadowedAcolyte [2010-03-07 09:06:28 +0000 UTC]

This is an excellent piece, very direct and focused, neatly bracketed by the span of a traffic light. Other than the shouted "NO!" which doesn't require the double capitalization (and which is weakened because of its odd look), this is exceptional.

Thanks for sharing.

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oldest-boy In reply to ShadowedAcolyte [2010-03-08 01:49:59 +0000 UTC]

thanks a bundle.

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vgaer [2009-12-13 01:59:39 +0000 UTC]

so i was going to copy and paste my favorite parts but then i was selecting the whole poem. this is amazing. i love your words.

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oldest-boy In reply to vgaer [2010-01-15 03:55:40 +0000 UTC]

thank you kindly.

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YouInventedMe [2009-10-11 03:27:02 +0000 UTC]

this man did not
know the world
that imprisoned me

NO!
he existed
the way dogs dream

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oldest-boy In reply to YouInventedMe [2009-11-08 18:18:00 +0000 UTC]

holla.

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DancingTilDawn [2009-09-27 23:11:00 +0000 UTC]

thanks, that was an awesome poem

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oldest-boy In reply to DancingTilDawn [2009-10-03 17:09:06 +0000 UTC]

nonothankyou.

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pseudometry [2009-09-25 01:28:03 +0000 UTC]

Nicely vivid description; it really evokes the person in the moment, makes the whole thing seem near palpable.

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oldest-boy In reply to pseudometry [2009-10-03 17:09:16 +0000 UTC]

thank you.

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spoems [2009-09-22 00:31:56 +0000 UTC]

well described, brilliant close, and i agree.

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oldest-boy In reply to spoems [2009-09-23 17:30:40 +0000 UTC]

holla!

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bisoubaby [2009-09-21 17:40:46 +0000 UTC]

dog dreams, huh?
oh, the "barking, whining" mind of a poet.

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oldest-boy In reply to bisoubaby [2009-09-21 22:47:44 +0000 UTC]

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nunheh [2009-09-21 14:52:22 +0000 UTC]

the other flailed
as if conducting
the wild orchestra

Hey! I've known that guy! Not much fun to talk to though.

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oldest-boy In reply to nunheh [2009-09-21 22:48:05 +0000 UTC]

haha.

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Volodia9 [2009-09-21 10:00:50 +0000 UTC]

Words I love...

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oldest-boy In reply to Volodia9 [2009-09-21 22:48:33 +0000 UTC]

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Piscesandthediamonds [2009-09-21 07:24:17 +0000 UTC]

i love the way you explain moments. ever-fascinating to me - I really enjoyed and can relate to: this man did not
know the world
that imprisoned me.

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oldest-boy In reply to Piscesandthediamonds [2009-09-21 22:48:50 +0000 UTC]

amen. (thank














you.)

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Garnet-43 [2009-09-20 23:14:58 +0000 UTC]

That world that imprisons us. Locked up tight we are. And don't even know it... until a poem like this comes along.

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oldest-boy In reply to Garnet-43 [2009-09-21 22:50:37 +0000 UTC]

word. <3

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GetYourGrip [2009-09-20 18:15:20 +0000 UTC]

hallelujah, amen, god bless, and good night.

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oldest-boy In reply to GetYourGrip [2009-09-20 18:36:36 +0000 UTC]

holla! lujah!

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GetYourGrip In reply to oldest-boy [2009-09-20 22:07:08 +0000 UTC]

el-oh!-el

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oldest-boy In reply to GetYourGrip [2009-09-21 22:51:28 +0000 UTC]

haha; ellohwell.

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GetYourGrip In reply to oldest-boy [2009-09-21 23:07:12 +0000 UTC]

hah (lol y'all is funny)

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oldest-boy In reply to GetYourGrip [2009-09-23 17:31:30 +0000 UTC]

loller skates.

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GetYourGrip In reply to oldest-boy [2009-09-23 19:57:37 +0000 UTC]

i haven't had a lollipop in months.

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oldest-boy In reply to GetYourGrip [2009-09-24 14:37:25 +0000 UTC]

lolly gaggin'

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GetYourGrip In reply to oldest-boy [2009-09-24 18:41:55 +0000 UTC]

i heard lolita was a twisted, but good, book.

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oldest-boy In reply to GetYourGrip [2009-10-03 17:10:44 +0000 UTC]

fuck man; you won.

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GetYourGrip In reply to oldest-boy [2009-10-03 19:12:27 +0000 UTC]

nahh, how bout lollapalooza?

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oldest-boy In reply to GetYourGrip [2009-11-08 17:56:27 +0000 UTC]

haha

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GetYourGrip In reply to GetYourGrip [2009-09-21 23:08:08 +0000 UTC]

...l'all*

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