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Published: 2006-04-07 17:39:53 +0000 UTC; Views: 113; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 14
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IntermezzoHeated faces, cheeks flushed by a hungry red
Pretending lips meet eagerly
Exchanging saliva, inhaling smoky breath-
Late night attempt at resuscitation?
Stumbling forward, an intoxicated waltz
Where no one leads, just blindly seeking
A chance of temporary pleasure,
Waking to nothing but a stale remorse.
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Comments: 9
awesome. some power there. succinct. clear despite the blurriness of the subject matter. decisive color and taste and sights of the seediness in it.
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ooh, i like this, it gives me mental pictures of a place i have been far too many times... however, i feel the need to be a grammar nazi again, and point out the mispelling of "saliva", and where you say "an intoxicated walse", i assume you mean waltz? as in the dance? aside from me being a picky bitch, it's great!
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ups! gah no its absoluetly necessary cast a detailed look on my spelling and grammar ..will go and fix things in a sec.
But even better that you like it on the whole ...I think we all have seen places like this
xx
Ella
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hah hah, well English is a second language to you, isn't it? so at least you have an excuse! i know people who have spoken nothing but English their whole lives and still can't spell it!
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ooo i think this is a great job for you geting back into it it shows you still have the skill me like it lots
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