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Published: 2011-09-26 07:51:16 +0000 UTC; Views: 296; Favourites: 8; Downloads: 2
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Description The lake is a mirror for the sun
How vain, staring at it self all day
But natures sins have just begun
And you'll be surprised by their foul play

Fire's a glutton, always craving more
It devours and gorges all in its path
Houses, twigs, and trees; hear it roar
But fire is no match for the sin of wrath

Wrath is earthquakes and tsunamis and storms
It rumbles, kills, destroys, and drowns
It has many consequences and takes many forms
Making puppets of cities and towns

Lava has a greed like no others
Oozing like slime down a hill
Everything in its path it burns and smothers
Taking all, giving it's own law and will

Tornadoes and hurricanes are proud things
Not letting anyone or anything slow them down
They knock down obstacles like they're the kings
Only thing they need is a bejeweled crown

Wind and air are lust
They make the perfect two
Always intertwining like dust
In the air they flew

Clouds are sloths, floating breezily in the sky
Pushed forward only by a kick of wind
On air and drafts, they must rely
Pulled apart and gliding cotton; skinned

The moon is envy, shinning bright
But can't outshine the sun
It's bored, and wary and tired of night
So it peaks behind the clouds for a daytime run

All the wonders that god creates
Contain the sins that he hates
But all of the above are the devils doves
And for each he cares and each he loves
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Comments: 12

Starry-Eyed-Neko [2011-10-26 03:52:01 +0000 UTC]

This makes a lot of sense to me : o
Really lovely poem :3

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paper-doesnt-judge In reply to Starry-Eyed-Neko [2011-10-26 06:50:35 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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Starry-Eyed-Neko In reply to paper-doesnt-judge [2011-10-26 06:59:12 +0000 UTC]

you're very welcome :3

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PirateScivy [2011-09-27 04:46:52 +0000 UTC]

Outstanding!
Very interesting idea, what inspired you to write about this?

I loved each line, the whole thing was beautifully clear, except for this line "Pulled apart and gliding cotton; skinned" What did this line mean? How is the word "skinned" related to the clouds?
A possible replacement line could be "Wandering without will or meaning to the end."

You are very talented, keep up the good work!

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paper-doesnt-judge In reply to PirateScivy [2011-10-08 01:07:24 +0000 UTC]

When the clouds spread apart it looks like they're being skinned as they pull apart and I'm actually not sure how i got the idea lol

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Snack-n-Bowl [2011-09-27 01:46:28 +0000 UTC]

splendid.
Love,
#1 fan

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paper-doesnt-judge In reply to Snack-n-Bowl [2011-10-08 01:06:09 +0000 UTC]

Thanks hun

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TrickandTreatRinLen [2011-09-26 23:31:50 +0000 UTC]

very good, I love it

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paper-doesnt-judge In reply to TrickandTreatRinLen [2011-10-08 01:08:03 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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TrickandTreatRinLen In reply to paper-doesnt-judge [2011-10-08 18:10:59 +0000 UTC]

no problem!

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vanzan3000z [2011-09-26 23:28:18 +0000 UTC]

This is excelent. I absolutely loved it.

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paper-doesnt-judge In reply to vanzan3000z [2011-10-08 01:05:59 +0000 UTC]

Thanks<3

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