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lost insidea prison
of my own
design.
(the walls
closing in
on me.)
lost inside
the mental
mazes
of psychological
gymnastics.
(what is id
and ego?)
could not
breathe;
could not
think
past the
crowded expanse
holding me
captive.
(reach,
but never touch.
just a little
closer
to the edge
now.)
could not
reason
past the
cacophony
of madness.
there has
to be a door
around here
somewhere.
there has to
be a way
of escape.
there have to
be answers
to the
questions.
(if there
are no answers
then there are
only closed
doors;
then there is
only insanity.)
trapped inside
a prison
of my own
design.
left upon the
precipice
with no way
to climb
to the top
again.
(perhaps
there is only
madness.
perhaps
there is only
insanity
after all.)
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Comments: 24
PhantomThiefVier [2008-12-03 16:10:21 +0000 UTC]
I've always found that when you can't seem to find the answer for something, it's best to have someone else with a much simpler style of thinking than you to point out the obvious answer or, if that doesn't work, find a more complex mind to dissect the question and reveal the truth.
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Zer0Hawke [2008-07-11 15:51:53 +0000 UTC]
Ah, insanity... it'll catch up with us all one day hehe nice work
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peterdawes In reply to Zer0Hawke [2008-07-13 23:42:48 +0000 UTC]
Quite so. Some of us sooner than others.
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denlm [2008-07-11 12:28:22 +0000 UTC]
Perhaps you let us see too deeply, author. Your pain hurt me in return. Climb, please, my friend. Keep climbing.
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peterdawes In reply to denlm [2008-07-13 23:44:41 +0000 UTC]
So long as there is a ledge left to hang from, I suppose I shall always be climbing.
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denlm In reply to peterdawes [2008-07-13 23:47:52 +0000 UTC]
And there will be many of us behind you pushing you higher.
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peterdawes In reply to denlm [2008-07-16 08:53:35 +0000 UTC]
Apparently, a great deal of support and encouragement. I am humbled.
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PureMind [2008-07-11 05:04:21 +0000 UTC]
I noticed you didn't use your powers of poetic and implicative description and visuals on this one They worked pretty damn well in "To the Center of the City" (which i consider your best piece for some reason). Perhaps some of that stuff used here, in an insane, extreme sense would really develop this piece...
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peterdawes In reply to PureMind [2008-07-11 06:53:56 +0000 UTC]
I went for more of the spastic, quick and dirty approach, but I thank you for the compliment with regard to "To the Centre of the City". Perhaps I might revisit a poem of this vein with more descriptive wording to it.
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MrsDarcKnyt [2008-07-11 03:17:19 +0000 UTC]
*wipes away a tear* This is genius Peter. I fear you have a bug of some kind in my head.
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peterdawes In reply to MrsDarcKnyt [2008-07-11 06:57:28 +0000 UTC]
You are too kind to me, Lady Falcon. See to the bug in your head before it troubles you too much.
Thank you, dear.
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MrsDarcKnyt In reply to peterdawes [2008-07-11 07:40:29 +0000 UTC]
LOL I meant a "bug" as in a listening device. That one felt *ahem* a touch close. But I know you'd never spy on me dearest Peter.
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twilight-apple [2008-07-11 01:49:57 +0000 UTC]
i'm a-thinking you'd know a fair about about being insane, but then so do i.
i think.
but what about the super ego??
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peterdawes In reply to twilight-apple [2008-07-11 06:58:41 +0000 UTC]
I might know a thing or two about it, yes.
The super ego was far too full of itself to participate in this poem.
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HoldingBackTears [2008-07-11 01:46:53 +0000 UTC]
AMAZING! BRILLIANT! GENIUS!
Ah, Peter, I love this so much that I am bouncing in my chair! I feel so immature.
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peterdawes In reply to HoldingBackTears [2008-07-11 06:59:15 +0000 UTC]
Ha ha. . . you made me smile, dear Kelly. Thank you very, very much.
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HoldingBackTears In reply to peterdawes [2008-07-11 15:26:50 +0000 UTC]
You are most welcome.
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LeonieSainteVire [2008-07-11 01:43:03 +0000 UTC]
The dark companion who resides within you...
he is a lover...and your nemesis...::smiles::
J'aime celui-ci beaucoup.
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peterdawes In reply to LeonieSainteVire [2008-07-11 07:03:42 +0000 UTC]
Well stated, dear Leonie. One cannot exist without a dark side and yet one finds themselves constantly at odds with it. I am glad the poetic overflow is, at least, enjoyable.
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