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the stars,serving as messengers;
small beacons lit ablaze
from me to you.
far too often
i become lost within the notion
that space is a vacuum
and you and i
are trapped somewhere
within the void surrounding us.
but there is a light
which shines within the
darkness.
there is a hope
in each conspiratorial wink
the celestial sky administers.
calling to mind
that you and i
behold the same heavens
hanging high above us.
that you and i
might live in shadows,
but there is yet a light.
the fickle moon,
which waxes and wanes
as capricious as the tides
it influences,
does not rule the night
we reside within.
instead, i look to the stars,
asking them to shine for you
in their everlasting splendor.
reminding you there is a man
who longs to be
as close as night
to you, my dear.
and reminding me there is a woman
who yet keeps watch
over my soul
somewhere beyond the sights
my eyes behold.
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Comments: 26
purecountry [2008-06-14 02:35:48 +0000 UTC]
I can see from your comments you are seconding guessing like we spoke of. Fear not though this is one of your best. Full of feeling and imagery. These lines, to me, bring forth some strong feelings and the imagery from them is powerful:
reminding you there is a man
who longs to be
as close as night
to you, my dear.
and reminding me there is a woman
who yet keeps watch
over my soul
somewhere beyond the sights
my eyes behold.
Wonderfully written my friend, as usual...
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peterdawes In reply to purecountry [2008-06-15 03:14:48 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, dear Sabrina. One of these days you all will make a believer out of me.
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purecountry In reply to peterdawes [2008-06-16 23:40:31 +0000 UTC]
Always a pleasure..I tend to make a believer out of you , so I'll keep working on it..
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peterdawes In reply to purecountry [2008-06-25 13:14:05 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for your persistence.
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believeeverything [2008-06-14 01:13:13 +0000 UTC]
it was such a beautiful piece that really showed the love that you feel for her, really beautiful
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peterdawes In reply to believeeverything [2008-06-15 03:15:23 +0000 UTC]
I am truly glad the sentiment carries well. Thank you for taking the time to read it.
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orphicfiddler [2008-06-13 19:49:46 +0000 UTC]
It seems everywhere I turn, those that I watch have produced some fantastic piece of sincere love. This is beautiful.
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peterdawes In reply to orphicfiddler [2008-06-15 03:50:49 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very kindly. I am glad it comes across as sincere. It was issued with all sincerity to her.
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denlm [2008-06-13 14:34:10 +0000 UTC]
One line touched me deeply: "a man who longs to be as close as night to you, my dear." I felt your need.
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peterdawes In reply to denlm [2008-06-15 04:00:10 +0000 UTC]
I hope she did as well.
Thank you, Denise.
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peterdawes In reply to kaons [2008-06-13 12:43:50 +0000 UTC]
More than even these words can express.
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peterdawes In reply to YouInventedMe [2008-06-13 13:19:23 +0000 UTC]
quiteso
I've not been through your gallery in some time. My apologies; I must remedy that.
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YouInventedMe In reply to peterdawes [2008-06-13 19:14:38 +0000 UTC]
at your leisure, sir
xo!
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Amriah [2008-06-13 02:29:41 +0000 UTC]
I can see your yearning and love for this person... the light in your words is very clear and stunning as usual. Great entry, can't wait to see more
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peterdawes In reply to LeonieSainteVire [2008-06-13 02:27:48 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, dear Leonie.
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HoldingBackTears [2008-06-13 02:05:55 +0000 UTC]
Beautiful. This is one of my favorites out of you.
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peterdawes In reply to HoldingBackTears [2008-06-13 02:22:04 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, Kelly. I am uncertain of it, but glad you enjoyed just the same.
Thank you for the favorite.
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HoldingBackTears In reply to peterdawes [2008-06-13 21:11:26 +0000 UTC]
The pleasure is all mine.
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DarcKnyt [2008-06-13 01:40:49 +0000 UTC]
A fine entry, Peter. Well spoken, and fantastic visual appeal as well. I saw the light in your words.
Excellence again, my friend. Bravo!
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peterdawes In reply to DarcKnyt [2008-06-13 01:49:42 +0000 UTC]
Quite a compliment from quite the accomplished writer. Thank you, friend.
I do believe I have been remiss, by the way. Word has it you received a daily deviation. Knowing you, it was well deserved. Congratulations.
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