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peterdawes — 4. Dark
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Published: 2008-06-14 15:12:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 459; Favourites: 11; Downloads: 8
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darkness surrounds menight by chilling night.
one such as i only beholds
shadows and spectres,
the macabre orchestra,
the play of the decadent.
within a schoolyard of humanity
strolling about like a predator
hiding within the depths
waiting for his prey
before he strikes.
bereft of moonlight,
bereft of starlight,
bereft of sun or any other glow.
casting chilling glances
leaving puddles of debauchery
in my wake.
i belong to the shadows
to the night; i am its spectre.
i reside within the darkness
like a demon seeking refuge
from himself.
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Comments: 32
I like how you say "puddles of debauchery" - it makes me think of singular, isolated events that, when looked at together, tell a larger story, just as mud puddles speak of rain. Also how you said "schoolyard of humanity" - as in humans are much like children in many aspects as compared to other creatures. It makes me think of a sort of innocence for them versus the darkness elsewhere.
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The deeper we go, the darker the nigrescence gets. A great piece, I feel a lot of torment in this. Sometimes I wanna escape myself (or my soul wants to escape me maybe) yet no matter what we do we cannot truely hide. We can only endure the pain and wait for the brief rays of light.
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Quite so. Thank you; I am glad you enjoyed the piece and gleaned some introspection from it.
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Ah, the inner workings of a great poetic mind.
Wonderfully written and beautifully collaberated.
I only wish to one day have so much as one tenth of your poetic skill.
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It is quite funny, but I do not yet believe I have much skill. I read so many others whose work make me look like a child with fingerpaint. But thank you, my friend. I appreciate such kind words and the favorite as well.
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I only speak the truth, Peter.
You're welcome. :]
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"the macabre orchestra" - Now that is truly poetic. You have brightened my day with dark words of woe, and I thank you for it.
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And I thank you for reading it.
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Your imagery as lovely and (appropriately) dark as always. I did so enjoy this
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Thank you kindly, Tess.
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Wonderful...there is a macabre beauty about immortality...stark and surreal.
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Yes, quite. It is beautiful in its strangeness and even in its darkness. One of the reasons I could not resist evoking it here.
Thank you, dear vampire pirate queen.
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very nice.
I like the opening of the second stanza.
xo!
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Thank you. 
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And you are assuredly my kind of reader. I do appreciate those of you with an admiration for creepiness.
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^_^ Ah, poetry.. after my final exam, I'm going to try this list, myself.
Wonderful as usual ^_^ The images this brought to my mind were a perfect match for the theme.
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Thank you, my dear.
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You flatterer 
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This seemed especially bitter. There is a hint of the truly sadistic predator isn't there? The mention of a schoolyard, debauchery, play and prey... you are being harder on yourself than normal, and it made me shiver. The mark of truly insightful and powerful poetry.
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There is always a hint of the sadistic predator. He casts a shadow regardless of whose feet inhabit my shoes. And in that shadow he resides, cold and calculating, wondering how to break free of the tethers.
I suppose this bitter soul is being a bit hard on himself. Perhaps due to reviewing these manuscripts for posting. I constantly struggle with the memories of these events.
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I had forgotten about your new stewardship of the manuscripts. That explains a lot.
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Stewardship of the manuscripts and, as though I had need of more responsibility, she placed me in charge of VampireWriters. I agreed only due to the inherent irony of a vampire administrating such a group.
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The ideal choice, IMO. You write, you are a vampire, you have administrative experience -- thanks to Robin -- and there will never be an issue with succession.
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Ha ha. . . Quite so! Yes, little worry about needing to replace me, unless the Order decides to antagonize me a bit.
Robin was amused beyond measure when I told him. He wished he had a writer's aptitude merely so he could join as one of my "underlings".
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Now THAT would be a twist: Robin answering to you. Quick, someone, get a camera.
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Yes, that hasn't happened this side of me wielding an assassin's blade. And even then it was more allowance than servitude. He never allows me to live that down.
Ah, what sweet retribution. I would become a petty tyrant in no time.
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Hmm, I really enjoyed this as usual. Your words always bring a colorful (well, in this case dark) image to my mind.
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Well said, Peter. I've long believed the darkness without brings forth the darkness within as well.
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The yin and the yang, I suppose.
Thank you, friend.
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