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peterdawes — 7. Heaven
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Published: 2008-06-29 20:05:36 +0000 UTC; Views: 764; Favourites: 8; Downloads: 6
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touching the ceilingunable to stretch further
bound to this planet
somewhere, there exists heaven
somewhere just beyond my reach
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quite so.
even with looser forms of haiku and tanka, there are still restrictions upon the amount of syllables used. strange that an open format poet finds comfort in the structure of eastern poetry.
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Aye... quite the rebel you are
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i am, aren't i?
hear me roar.
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I'm just being my typically snarky self, dear. Not attempting to mock your intelligence.
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:3
I was aware of that. I was being sarcastic once again~
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Ah, I've been a bit daft lately. My apologies.
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'Tis okay! Feel better.... or else.
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Thank you very kindly for both this favorite and the other, dear.
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Short but brilliant, totally not what I expected when I saw this in my watch list. Well done once again, Peter.
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Thank you very kindly. . . and my most sincere apologies for the delay in responding to your comment.
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Bah, some people just don't understand this type of poetry. It forces quality. You can sit there and think about exactly what words to squeeze in for hours, days, weeks, months, and when one finally comes to you, its perfect.
Good mix of the physical and emotional. 
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Exactly what I enjoy about it. It is a challenge. I often know what I mean to say but spend a while revising the words to arrange it in just the right manner. This one was faster than usual.
Thank you.
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::sighs::
I do not care about the rhythm either. It is the words that count, and they are compelling.
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Thank you, dear Leonie.
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While you puzzle over syllables, I submerge myself in the emotion. The last line was perfect. Simply perfect.
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I am glad you enjoyed it, Denise. That was the line which caused me the most consternation. 
Thank you for the favorite.
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Thank YOU for the inspiring poem.
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You'd love Sudoku, Peter.
Well written. Nice job, poet!
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Have never played with sudoku. What is it exactly?
Thank you.
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It's a form of what we learned as "magic cubes" -- a mathematical game where the cube is filled with numbers, but must not repeat and must not be within a certain given distance from one another. Very challenging.
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Hmm. . . I should give it a try one of these days.
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I think you'd enjoy it, Peter. It will exercise your left brain a bit.
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Heaven knows I could use a bit of that.
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those things are addictive!!!
but they're so freaking hard! D:
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I know. :angry: They drive me nuts!
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but they're soooooo worth it!
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The endless frustration. The constant struggle. Once again, it emerges within the poetry.
Thank you, my dear.
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Try 5'3" sometime!
Seriously, I can relate to the feeling that God (Or Heaven, as you describe it) is just out of reach, and yet so close.
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Quite a frustrating feeling, isn't it?
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I'd be happy if my prayers at least reached the ceiling!
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^_^ It's gorgeous.
I completely understand you, I think there's just something really satisfying about writing Haiku/tanka because it's such a rigid formula. I always look forward to writing my daily Haiku to the point where I want to write the next one straight away.
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You recently submitted one (had chance to peek and not to comment) of a different regiment. What was that called again?
Thank you, dear.
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It's a Choka, it was really quite fun to do hehe
Anytime.
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that was 5-7-5-7-5-7-7? or am i missing a line or two?
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Remarkable. I'd never seen that before.
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I found an article on Haiku on Wikipedia.. it had a few extra variants at the bottom, one was Choka.
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Very fascinating. I shall have to play a bit with that in the future.
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Thank you, lovely Mithgariel, for the favorite.
How are you, my dear?
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Too damn tired and trying to decide if I'm really mad enough to take part of JulWriMo and if, then what of the dozens of things should I write or maybe take a new one?
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come now. . . you know you want to.
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I know I want to. Well, I did start. With Big City. So wish me luck
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