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Published: 2004-02-29 03:05:54 +0000 UTC; Views: 193; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 18
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Description Stand Down

"Stand down." He had said to me.
Did my beliefs come with a fee?
Am I not allowed to believe in what I wish,
Or must I follow as another in a colony of fish;
Following each other not fighting for the truth,
Why must I stand down with all the other youth!

Do "teenagers" not have enough intellect to speak,
Too ignorant, too naive, too weak?
No, I ask you to stand down,
To listen to me without a frown
To understand that I may be wise
And that I don't rant on with lies.
So just shut your mouth and listen with your ears,
Maybe then you'll understand my words and forget years.
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Comments: 17

lambini [2004-03-01 21:42:16 +0000 UTC]

i just love the message of this one & i love the lines -

For you shall never make me stand down,
And your face shall be found before mine down in the ground

Very nicely put forward I'd say

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PreciselyRandom In reply to lambini [2004-03-01 22:01:31 +0000 UTC]

Thank yah sweetie!!

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lambini In reply to PreciselyRandom [2004-03-01 23:52:22 +0000 UTC]

no problem

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Alakatarie [2004-02-29 16:24:52 +0000 UTC]

Wonferful and powerful. I could feel the anger pulsing through each word. More power to you for standing up! Great job on this piece.

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PreciselyRandom In reply to Alakatarie [2004-02-29 19:54:49 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Alakatarie In reply to PreciselyRandom [2004-02-29 22:15:28 +0000 UTC]

No prob.

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Oceantwilight [2004-02-29 15:56:37 +0000 UTC]

Kudos I love it very well written I like this part especially: Or must I follow, as another in a colony of fish? It reminds me of a time last year, when my teacher said: We're like a herd of sheep, when one goes off the cliff, the rest follow. Lol I can't remember what he was talking about though

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PreciselyRandom In reply to Oceantwilight [2004-02-29 19:56:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you... what your teacher said is sadly true.

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Oceantwilight In reply to PreciselyRandom [2004-02-29 21:36:18 +0000 UTC]

Lol yes unfortunately. I feel bad for the sheep too...

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TheDreamer009 [2004-02-29 03:38:56 +0000 UTC]

I usally dont fancy rhyming poems to much...but this one I really did like...

"So, just shut your mouth and listen with your ears,
Maybe then you'll understand my words and not my years"

I love those lines...this was a really well done peice..kodos to you Miss

~Silk

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PreciselyRandom In reply to TheDreamer009 [2004-02-29 14:33:27 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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ShuaraRaani [2004-02-29 03:13:09 +0000 UTC]

wonderful and powerful! the message and flow is excellent

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PreciselyRandom In reply to ShuaraRaani [2004-02-29 03:14:15 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!!! And thank you for the fav means a lot to me!

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ShuaraRaani In reply to PreciselyRandom [2004-02-29 03:17:49 +0000 UTC]

your welcome Cat!

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PreciselyRandom In reply to ShuaraRaani [2004-02-29 03:19:28 +0000 UTC]

Luv ya Farah! Off to bed for me... I am so tired I almost fell asleep at the screen! LOL

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ShuaraRaani In reply to PreciselyRandom [2004-02-29 03:20:40 +0000 UTC]

LOL, oh goodness...-pushes you off to bed- night night hun

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PreciselyRandom In reply to ShuaraRaani [2004-02-29 14:33:42 +0000 UTC]

LOL

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