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Published: 2004-10-25 04:01:53 +0000 UTC; Views: 48; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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Description Strangers in moonlight, lovers by morn.
A new fear is broken, a new tear is born.
Fueled by a promise of lover's last kiss;
A kiss that was constant, but now always missed.
Tainted reminders of lovers that tried.
The love that he promised has settled and died.
Unbridled passion that was but a lie.
Beautiful roses just carnations with dye.
Forever damnation inside of his heart,
Forever damnation, no way to depart.
Forever with him, forgotten and lost,
Forever with him to pick up and toss.
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Comments: 12

someday-somehow [2004-11-10 18:18:31 +0000 UTC]

Hmm okay normal Formatting would see your poem readin like such:
"Strangers in moonlight,
lovers by morn.
A new fear is broken,
a new tear is born.
Fueled by a promise of lover's last kiss;
A kiss that was constant,
but now always missed.
Tainted reminders of lovers that tried.
The love that he promised has settled and died.
Unbridled passion that was but a lie.
Beautiful roses just carnations with dye.
Forever damnation inside of his heart,
Forever damnation, no way to depart.
Forever with him, forgotten and lost,
Forever with him to pick up and toss."

or something along those lines.

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pythonkatie In reply to someday-somehow [2004-11-10 18:23:47 +0000 UTC]

oh, there wasn't any meaning behind it, i just copied and pasted off [link] , where it was originally posted, stupid site, i hate that site. thanks for the compliment though, i'm glad that you don't think it sucks

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someday-somehow In reply to pythonkatie [2004-11-10 18:36:01 +0000 UTC]

oh okays then, well hmm i think you should consider changin the formatting then, although it is interesting, it may flow a lot better reformatted the way you actually WANT it to read.

i liked it very muchly indeedly!

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pythonkatie In reply to someday-somehow [2004-11-10 18:37:35 +0000 UTC]

i wasn't even thinking of the format or how it would read, i just wanted the words to be down, but thanks for the advice, i'll do that

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someday-somehow In reply to pythonkatie [2004-11-10 18:48:36 +0000 UTC]

thats quite alright, words are fantastic, all the same hey!!

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pythonkatie In reply to someday-somehow [2004-11-10 20:19:51 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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someday-somehow In reply to pythonkatie [2004-11-10 20:23:19 +0000 UTC]

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someday-somehow [2004-11-10 09:21:57 +0000 UTC]

wow this is an awesome poem but no means does it "suck" well well written, format is interesting, it reads like prose, yet is clearly poetry...was the formatting intentional?? it seems it but i just wanted to know

well done

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pythonkatie In reply to someday-somehow [2004-11-10 18:03:00 +0000 UTC]

i don't mean to sound like an idiot, but formatting intention? not sure what you mean by that, i'm insanely slow today

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someday-somehow In reply to someday-somehow [2004-11-10 09:23:23 +0000 UTC]

woo hoo damn typos! "well well" ???? i have NO idea where that came from

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neonhyena [2004-10-26 15:40:04 +0000 UTC]

Hey, I know this poem. Very tragic and sad Katie, you hit a good mood.

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pythonkatie In reply to neonhyena [2004-10-26 17:46:21 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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