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rika-dono In reply to TeruKietsu [2015-04-14 20:44:02 +0000 UTC]

I can't get it like I want it to be so putting it on hiatus for the time being.
Fell like something's wrong but can't pinpoint it yet.

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TeruKietsu In reply to rika-dono [2015-04-15 09:08:03 +0000 UTC]

(not to be intruding but I wright manga stories myself and have made this mistake before) I think your story needs an epic opening to draw the viewers in. like have the scene wear the main cerecter is shot be the first pannel then lett her ecsplain her famili freinds and co-workers aftorwords, maybe include more of the fight scene beetween the mother and the "evil" girl and maybe ad stronger hints to difrent things to ad a sort of comedy.

my personal opinion if you don't agree I have no problem, but if you find this helpfull I at all times am willing to look at peoples stories! ^u^

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rika-dono In reply to TeruKietsu [2015-04-15 15:43:37 +0000 UTC]

nah my main problem is the form of it : manga.
Webtoon form might be better.

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TeruKietsu In reply to rika-dono [2015-04-15 18:29:22 +0000 UTC]

webtoon?

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rika-dono In reply to TeruKietsu [2015-04-15 18:56:37 +0000 UTC]

like here : mangafox.me/manga/tamen_de_gus…

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TeruKietsu In reply to rika-dono [2015-04-16 09:00:05 +0000 UTC]

okay! ^^
one of my fav yuri! cx do you like the series?
well I'm looking forward to when your story continues! 0v0

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rika-dono In reply to TeruKietsu [2015-04-16 16:39:23 +0000 UTC]

I read pretty much everything except thrillers XD

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TeruKietsu In reply to rika-dono [2015-04-16 21:23:22 +0000 UTC]

ok! ^u^
(just big fan of yuri >v> )

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