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Published: 2017-07-27 18:10:00 +0000 UTC; Views: 131277; Favourites: 315; Downloads: 225
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Love a good critique on this. I suck at writing, and composition, so I would love some constructive criticism.Related content
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Plot twist: spidey keeps this form cause Norman makes her feel like a real woman π
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This is my first critique so i'll try my best
First off Spiderman looks really good. the second panels POV is just a little off his shoulder/elbow seems angled funny compared to his lower arm. but other then that i have nothing but good things to say.
I like the lack of background it shows he's in his head vice in the real world. The coloring is also really good overall the shading it matches really well with what you would see in a comic with the various high lights and shadows. I wouldn't be surprised to see the 3rd panel coming straight from a marvel comic. the color being "jus off" also adds to this is in his head. I like that there somewhat muted.
The pace is on point I get enough information on the page that I don't feel cheated but the last panel keeps me wanting more so I read the next page. I'm looking forward to see what happens
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Thanks! I really appreciate this! I am trying desperatly to get better, but sometimes I cant see my own mistakes.Β
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Amazing work!Β I'm glad that you areΒ continuing this project.
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It reminds me of the ultimate costume but the coming mind battle reminds me of Superior Spider-man (that's good)
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Oh dang! I should re read that issue! Get some good art ideas!
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It's issue 9 where the first battle for Peter's brain happens
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I want to work with you on something so badly! Your comics are awesome!
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What did you have in mind?
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No clue my man. I would love to help you out with writing one of your comics or shorts!
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The art is near-perfect; it looks like something right out of an actual Spider-Man comic book. The only thing I would change is using a more vibrant red for his costume.
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The composition is great, POV in panel 2 was a nice touch.
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