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I think about falling in math class.The boy in front of me is writing diligently, noting each and every word as though he forgot it was all in the textbook. He has dark hair all tangled up in the back like a bramble of thornbushes and his green hoodie looks like it could use a good washing.
The professor is rattling on about asymptotes, about two lines that go on forever, getting closer and closer but never touching. He tells us about the Greek roots of the word; asymptotos, that it means "not falling together," and he scribbles nonsense equations on the board and hopes that we understand them better than he does because tenure is the only reason he's teaching this class.
As much as I hate math, I have to admit there's something beautiful about the concept. Something romantic and longing, something I can relate to in a sea of cold precision and dispassionate numbers.
I think about falling in math class. I think about fractals and their intricate patterns, turning equations into art. The way the numbers fall in on themselves in an infinite recursion and coil into tiny self-similar spirals that spawn their own iteration over and over and over again.
The girl next to me looks bored, head resting heavily on hand, occasionally snapping her gum and flipping long blonde hair with an obnoxious sigh as though the look on her face weren't enough evidence of her complete disinterest. I'm writing numbers and doodling curves on blank graph paper; the curves become a heart.
I'm falling behind in math class. I'm running in spirals that corkscrew around the y-axis of a z-plane full of random integers and imaginary numbers, where eight is indifferent from infinity. There's a ratio, a correlation, some unknown relationship between myself and these digits that keeps calling me back to that which I don't understand. That finds unspeakable beauty in mysteries. Mathematics is my asymptote.
I'm failing math class, but it's never been a more elegant fall.
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Comments: 90
Solarune In reply to ??? [2011-04-06 16:30:25 +0000 UTC]
Haha. Well you sound like one to me!
You're very welcome.
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beautyinreview [2011-03-24 01:13:59 +0000 UTC]
This is really lovely! I enjoy the way you take a math concept and make it romantic. The length is just fine...you convey quite a lot in the short space. The only thing that I'm not sold on is that random mention of the bored girl with the blond hair. It is a bit jarring and doesn't seem to serve any purpose to the piece, and distracts from the other concepts.
I have to agree with :devNot-aGreat-Artist: - my favorite part is the fifth paragraph too.
A really great snapshot. Well done.
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SilverInkblot In reply to beautyinreview [2011-03-24 01:46:38 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much
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angelStained In reply to ??? [2011-03-21 11:37:34 +0000 UTC]
This is rather genius! C: Yes, everything makes sense and the terminology adds to the piece, slowing down the reader and thus allowing more space to think. I think its length is perfect- although that might be only because I can barely hit a thousand myself
You've tempted me to view your profile.
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SilverInkblot In reply to angelStained [2011-03-21 16:55:46 +0000 UTC]
Thank you I have trouble with length myself >.<
Thanks for the fave
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Loza-Muse In reply to ??? [2011-03-21 10:14:50 +0000 UTC]
this is really good and that hard for me to say coz maths drives me insane even when i try my hardest it so annoying but sometimes i get caught up in it...
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Brimana In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 20:26:23 +0000 UTC]
I really liked this. I'm a math student (AP Calculus, blech haha) and a writer, too, and even though I mostly understand math you captured its complexity so well in this that it made me feel like I didn't understand it, if that makes sense. Also, like a lot of people above me have said, you really made math sound beautiful and elegant, which is something I've never really considered before. I love the last two paragraphs, and the line 'Mathematics is my asymptote' is pretty much pure genius.
The length is perfect. You've said everything you needed to say, there's no need to write a novel to get your point across if you can do it in a few hundred words. I think shorter, more powerful pieces are sometimes better than long drawn out ones.
Great job on this!
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SilverInkblot In reply to Brimana [2011-03-20 01:21:07 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for an insightful comment
I love finding math in written pieces. It seems like Math and English should be at war or something to me I like seeing them combined every now and then. It was a real challenge for me, but I'm happy it's been so well received
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djibouti4 In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 00:56:13 +0000 UTC]
This was devastatingly beautiful. I loved every line!
It made perfect sense to me, and I thought the terminology was necessary in building up the metaphor. As I loved it so much, I could have kept reading forever. But I guess this is an appropriate length, and I definitely thought it ended on a fairly clean note. Please be incredibly pleased with yourself, this is the best work of literature I have read on dA this year.
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SilverInkblot In reply to djibouti4 [2011-03-19 01:04:05 +0000 UTC]
Wow. Thank you for an encouraging comment
I would have liked to keep writing it forever honestly; I would have liked to take the recursion metaphor further for example. But I felt like I was stretching things.
Thanks for the fave
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snurtz In reply to ??? [2011-03-18 21:19:51 +0000 UTC]
You have an amazing hold on the English language. This is so beautiful... thank you for making something that shows how beautiful math can be.
The terminology, I think, is partially what makes this piece so eloquent. You use them with such ease, and if you dumbed it down, it would not be anywhere near as excellent.
I also think the length is perfect. Honestly, I think this piece is perfect. Don't change a thing, okay? ♥
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SilverInkblot In reply to snurtz [2011-03-18 21:52:54 +0000 UTC]
Thank you kindly The terminology didn't come easy: I had to go to Wikipedia for some refreshers
Thanks for the collect
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FadeToPain [2011-03-18 19:44:37 +0000 UTC]
Wow. I love this piece. I think it makes sense, but not so much that it loses its artistic appeal. I really like the comparison between math and love. The last line is great too.
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ragnaice [2011-03-18 19:41:22 +0000 UTC]
ZOMG! I remember this about lines going on forever! Darn, I can't remember what it's called in my language... now that's going to bug me until I go look it up
When I started reading I thought it would be longer, so it felt like it ended rather abruptly but on a second reading I think it doesn't matter, the build-up feels right. It makes sense to me in way I can't explain so I don't know if I'm getting the same sense as you, but some sense. Yes.
I really like how you've combined the 'scientific' and the emotional in this.
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SilverInkblot In reply to ragnaice [2011-03-18 19:45:29 +0000 UTC]
Thank you That's exactly what I was going for
Thanks for the collect!
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GothicSocks [2011-03-18 17:48:04 +0000 UTC]
While reading this, it brought back a floodgate of memories from my math class. By God, I hated math class with every ounce of my being (still do) but you were able to capture the beauty of it. Me and numbers were never friends, but after reading this, I kind of wanted to be friends. Does that make sense? You did a very lovely job and the ending was the cherry on top of the sundae. Amazing job. (:
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SilverInkblot In reply to GothicSocks [2011-03-18 18:00:54 +0000 UTC]
Believe me, math and I are mortal enemies. I've taken College Algebra three times and still haven't passed >.>
I think being told by others who hate math that maybe they hate it a little less is a compliment of the highest order Thank you.
Thank for the fave
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GothicSocks In reply to SilverInkblot [2011-03-18 19:55:43 +0000 UTC]
Oh, God. Algebra made me cry last semester when we did it. I had a huge mental breakdown because of it and it was so bad. Thank God I passed with a 60% average though. I almost screamed to the high heavens. LOL.
You're very very welcome! (:
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Rieal-Dragonsbane [2011-03-18 17:06:35 +0000 UTC]
HELLO. Being both a math student and a writer, I believe I should my opinion on this should be elevated to the highest in importance (No, I don't mean that. But if you want see things like that . . . no one's complaining, hehe)
Even though you said you hate maths, you've portrayed the magic in better than I could have. I really loved that. This piece is beautiful. It made my happy.
It's short, but I don't think it's too short. If it was much longer, I'd afraid you would have been word padding. This seems to the perfect length of this piece.
Loved it!
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SilverInkblot In reply to Rieal-Dragonsbane [2011-03-18 17:26:13 +0000 UTC]
I was hoping the few math students out there would be receptive to this I had to go back through Wikipedia to make sure all my terminology was correct for that reason
I was worried about padding - I thought maybe describing some of the other students would make it feel that way, but I'm glad I kept them.
Thanks for the fave
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DwellingInWonderland In reply to ??? [2011-03-18 14:58:08 +0000 UTC]
wow, this is beautiful and really like the concept. this romantic feeling... like the quote that unfulfulfilled love is the best kind of love since only it lasts forever (if I got that right^^) and it's not too short, not at all.
and to your first question: no, it doesn't. to me, the main message was falling in love with something you don't understand. so maths is quite fitting since it may happen that one doesn't understand everything but that only clarifies the message.
keep going you
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SilverInkblot In reply to DwellingInWonderland [2011-03-18 17:35:40 +0000 UTC]
Thank you I really like the thought of math in romance for some reason. Probably because it seems like the two should be opposites
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DwellingInWonderland In reply to SilverInkblot [2011-03-19 10:15:43 +0000 UTC]
yup, like it's with most sciences: the rational science and the emotioal feeling^^
you're welcome
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WanderingHere In reply to ??? [2011-03-18 14:34:39 +0000 UTC]
it's definitely not too short.
i really like this. the way you write - i can see the elegance in math. (which i've never seen before.) it sounds beautiful.
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SilverInkblot In reply to WanderingHere [2011-03-18 17:42:18 +0000 UTC]
That's the best compliment I could hope to get Thanks!
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Ella-Popescu In reply to ??? [2011-03-18 13:58:47 +0000 UTC]
I*m not a critic, but yes, maybe it too short.But wonderful.
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SilverInkblot In reply to Ella-Popescu [2011-03-18 17:41:48 +0000 UTC]
Thank you Any ideas on how I could lengthen it?
Thanks for the fave
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a-dehn In reply to ??? [2011-03-18 07:16:51 +0000 UTC]
Thanks for using the #ProjectComment Commenting System
As I'm sure you already know, anything and everything I say should be taken lightly. All final opinions are up to you, the writer. I do hope you find something useful in all this. Remember, everything is just my own horrible opinion.
The first thing I want to touch on are your questions.
Does everything make sense? With my substantial lack of mathematical skills, yes, I assume I understood everything correctly. Your diction and terminology was really perfect for this piece. I kinda feel that you really captured the complexity of math well with your word choice, and you did it well. Yes, some metaphors were beyond me, but that definitely didn't hinder my understanding of the message.
Is it too short? I'm very on the fence with this one. One side of me says that you need more details to really push your passion for math, that I wanted more, but another side of me says that the length is perfect. I really don't know what to say for this one.
Now, on to some of the notes I scribbled down. First, your title.
I think it's too much. It absolutely fits with the story in every way, but I just feel it is too much. Having such a complex, difficult title can really push readers away from the get-go. I would suggest simply shortening it to "Asymptotes" to keep a curious interest and not a "what the?", but that's up to you.
I really like your first line and how you bring it back in the end. You really take it full circle which is a good repetition though I question the originality of it. I've seen it quite a lot.
In such a short piece like this, you should watch how many similes you put in and how frequent they are. Too many metaphors/similes can confuse the reader. I think how many you have in now are fine, but I'd think a little bit more on how necessary each metaphor is. Though I really love your use of your "correlation" with math. That was my favorite part of the piece.
You had a couple awkward sentences. They seemed too long, so I think you really could try working them out to make them less windy.
Overall, you had great voice and flow through out the entire piece. I really enjoyed it, and you did a great job. Sorry for the wall of text. I tried shortening it, but I wasn't very successful. I hope I was at least somewhat helpful!
Happy writing!
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SilverInkblot In reply to a-dehn [2011-03-18 17:41:00 +0000 UTC]
I love long comments
I'm glad to know the terminology wasn't too much. I think I was most worried about that.
I think I'll keep the title. I loved it too much not to use it. But I can see how it might drive away potential readers.
The repetition probably isn't an original concept As long as I can use it in an original way I guess
I'll take a look back through my similies/metaphors then
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a-dehn In reply to SilverInkblot [2011-03-18 19:34:02 +0000 UTC]
Glad you think so
Good luck in your writing endeavours and so forth!
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Not-a-Great-Artist In reply to ??? [2011-03-18 05:07:36 +0000 UTC]
No, not the math!
I don't think it's too short. I think it just has the appearance of being short. Curse you, poor dA literature set up!
My favorite part of this was the 5th paragraph, very thoughtful. All in all I think it's great.
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SilverInkblot In reply to Not-a-Great-Artist [2011-03-18 05:30:04 +0000 UTC]
Well, the word count was around 300, and I consider that to be short It's barely a page long in Word.
Thanks for the favorite
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Not-a-Great-Artist In reply to SilverInkblot [2011-03-18 15:36:33 +0000 UTC]
Well if it gets the point across with less words (which it does) I'd say it's not too short.
And you're welcome! Reading that actually made me hate math a little less
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SilverInkblot In reply to Not-a-Great-Artist [2011-03-18 17:20:31 +0000 UTC]
Haha, I still hate math I just happen to find some of the concepts lovely. But that's a compliment of the highest order right there
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