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Description "i    am  the  earth,   
    and  you are the air,
    and   all  the   rest
is really just   bullshit"

                                "i       was      the  sun
                                 and you  were   an  ocean
                                 and   i   crawled,   from
                                 your bed, and i scrawled,
                                 a letter on your eyelids,
                                 until   i lost  my  name,
                                 until   i lost everything.
                                
                                 now then, what do you
                                 think of that?"

"our hearts, our heads, our
brains,  our feet,  our legs,
our hands, they are all
just machines, because
i used   to watch the moon
fall   into   the skyline
under the flickering
streetlamps, lit, lighting
the   asphalt below
where all    the people
waved   and screamed
and    shouted   and
     whispered  condolences
  (i could never spell my own name
not   even   on the first  day
     not even in the last)"

the light,
     streams in
  through the cracks
in your skeleton
and the floorboards
and the   wall
     and   the windows;spiderwebs;remnants of
better things
   and   the numbers
the math; the algebra
      can't explain
  the way  you write your name

on  my eyelids
  in the dark

     in crooked
and angular strokes


                

                                       "you shouldn't do this to yourself,
                                         it's    all  just   temporary
                                         anyway,   and regardless   of
                                       the   depth  of your speech,
                                     you will never be   able  to tell me these things
                                   that you always wanted to
                                        because  you could never spell your own name,
                                           you could never do a thing"

"i'll never be a winner,
i'll always be a sinner.
  but either way,
it's  the same,
   the streetlights will always flicker,
and i will never sleep,
    and i will always miss you,
always always miss you,
      and you will never see me as
   i trip    over   my own speech"

                                            "you're comatose,
                                                and   still you stutter,
                                                  in poetry, in verse, in meter, in rhyme,
                                              and   you fell,
                                           a whisper,
                                                  and   moved backwards because
                                            i    was the earth
                                              and   you were the air
                                        and we were together
                                           and your name was the same
                                          and the streetlights they flicker,
                                        in poetry, in verse, in meter, in rhyme,
                                           a morse code moratorium
                                         (the lights in here are getting darker)
                                    what happened
                                            to those words
                                      because i was  the   earth,
                                  and you were the   air,
                                        and   we were the atmosphere
                                and we floated away
                                        now, then, what do you say to that?"

your  face was in the mirror,
     reflected, reversed
    "I'll never know a thing"
and  in that moment
   that   you saw the sky
    you finally
finally

    awoke.



"sometimes i wish
  that all of the stars in the sky
would disappear for just a moment
   so i could stare
upwards and just
      float  
        away



now then, what do you say to that?"
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Comments: 10

inspiredcreativity [2008-10-18 10:58:54 +0000 UTC]

I really enjoyed this. I especially like everything from "you're comatose" to the end.

It looks like you really thought this out carefully and skillfully. I certainly could never write something so skillfully and deeply.

Time for me to dive deeper into your work...

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c-pi [2008-08-06 13:23:02 +0000 UTC]

For some reason, I prefer this to some others because of the quotation marks.

As if I can attribute what you are saying to the mouths of others that I know.

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jewlogic [2008-08-05 16:56:04 +0000 UTC]

i love the flow.
i love it.

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IsabellaMichel [2008-08-05 05:29:25 +0000 UTC]

I say that it's really nice. I thoroughly enjoyed this piece.
The placement of the stanza's work really well with the flow in the poem.

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Diabolo-Spinner [2008-08-05 00:41:20 +0000 UTC]

I personally think this should be final, its rather beautiful and comes off as clean and finished :]


good to see more writing, I lovez it lots

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spacesuitcatalyst In reply to Diabolo-Spinner [2008-08-09 11:31:57 +0000 UTC]

haha well it iss final

i just meant that, like pretty much everything i write
i plan for it to have a second part, later.

if all goes well.

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Diabolo-Spinner In reply to spacesuitcatalyst [2008-08-09 23:43:08 +0000 UTC]

ohhhhh I see now

then in that case... YAY.

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tetrarchangel [2008-08-04 22:27:02 +0000 UTC]

The only problem is that there's not the words to answer it.

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spacesuitcatalyst In reply to tetrarchangel [2008-08-05 02:21:02 +0000 UTC]

How do you meann?

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tetrarchangel In reply to spacesuitcatalyst [2008-08-05 16:18:08 +0000 UTC]

There's so much sentiment and beauty that to say, 'excellent poem, well done' is abysmally insufficient.
The usual dosage of envy and appreciation, that's all.

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