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on the groun--d found out, abound
-ing, he sounds,
around,
;and he drowned - in her wedding gown, unwound
on the back of her hand,
a hundered
tiny
pieces
of
broken glass
broke brass,
in her wedding gown,
he drowned,
in sound, down
on the roof of the heady
mouth,
drilling for diamonds
and bills he
can't pay; no food
this week
no bills no bills no bills this week - so weak
(and he killed himself in a little brass town, he drowned;
in sound, around around, her half-tuned well-worn dead wedding
gown, on the corpse of her skeleton)
the taste / of steely cold nothingness
he drowned / in his mirror on the 5th of this down day
no bills; no bills; no bills to pay
just wet floorboards on the 5th of may,
and today - he shot himself in a dead mirror,
and i say, that day was never any nearer
and clear: the sky
a diamond of day
light
lit in small town nervousness
with keys on strings on key
chains chaining him
to his faulty death
.
he woke up in
his paper room,
brown, and clear, this diamond sky;
saphhires in your moonlooped eyes; and near - this never-noon neversaw it coming
and these brown-black-eyes, half truths scorched by whispers,
and beaten brow
-n, you clown: you never saw it coming
boned and broke
bound in leather
He loves him,
he hates me,
brown,
bound,
"I love you,"
spoken with a soft fist,
fishing for bruised
skin in his
deep blue tears
and great white sweat,
"I love you like you tell me to"
bound in this smoke,
this is never getting nearer
aboveground; he spoke
i can't believe you did this
shill screams out of nothing it seems
it was never so easy
crooked face,
and this verse on the 5th of May -
he lost his wife/life on the 5th of today,
drowned in dead whispers and chained; in a way,
lost and delivered he never found why -
this brown-down-dead-dirt wedding gown;
and her
so f t skeleton,
and those
d . r . y . bones
in the closet,
he left them alone.
"and you never looked so beautiful as you do now,
in halflight; it's alright - say something to me, please,
please, say something to me"
2nd in a second, met with a tatooed fist -
leftLove rightHate you never knew which
dead lines and incarnidine dreams,
and clear; the sky;
diamond it seems
so tell me;yell me; bound and broke
another half-whispered-truth / dead and baroque
a sort of force on the skull ; seperates into faultlines
whispers and lulls, another dull landmine,
winding and full, he said "you'll always be mine"
pragmatic and cold,the faultlines in this dead spine ///
nouns, they sound,
cheating themselves in an attempt to say
that this half-salience was never any nearer than the
whispers on your chest;
or that it is now; in the brown eyes of may;
becuase soon i will see your eyes as if they were new,
cut out round,
sounding down, to the ground; in whispers and sounds
he was quietly told by
by his quiet, bold
tremors, his browns,
his blacks,
his blues,
that they blew, better than you
with a quiet smile,
and ruffled hair,
offcenter with sleep,
and dressed in a
wedding gown ground up
in his love, he fell,
and with that one final sound
he had made himself
drown.
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Comments: 6
inspiredcreativity [2008-10-18 12:09:57 +0000 UTC]
This is beautifully written. It speaks a story of tragedy, trying to explain why?
May I ask, how intimate are you with the subject of suicide?
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spacesuitcatalyst In reply to inspiredcreativity [2008-10-18 18:13:59 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, it's actually supposed to be about
spousal abuse.
I've had a family member attempt it.
I never would though yayyy life yayyy.
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inspiredcreativity In reply to spacesuitcatalyst [2008-10-19 03:09:19 +0000 UTC]
After re-reading the poem, I see the spousal abuse theme of the poem. When we read, we do so through the lens of of our life experience. This can sometimes lead us in a direction not intended by the author.
Having a suicide/suicide attempt happen with someone you know and care about is intimate enough.
Suicide itself is more likely to be the inspiration for a poem, than the story of those left behind. The one thing most in common for those left behind, is not understanding "Why?"
A for you, you seem way too full of life to be wanting death, a very good place to be.
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spacesuitcatalyst In reply to spacesuitcatalyst [2008-10-18 18:14:10 +0000 UTC]
attempt suicide that is not spousal abuse oh no.
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tetrarchangel [2008-04-21 15:23:08 +0000 UTC]
There is only one excuse for rhyme and that is genius.
I'm sure you both know how much I admire your unique poetry.
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Dirty-Paint [2008-04-11 03:03:05 +0000 UTC]
swete peom man but my brother could do bettere he's even good at asoccor and sprots and he is the militrary.
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