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Description the sky is feeling down
your lover's legs; it is blue,
gloomy and glum and having
an off day.

listen to me. we, either we
see what we want to
see, or we see what we
do not want to see,
or we see what there
is to see, and we are
going blind in any case,
must be cataracts or glaucoma
or some other such physical
rational disease.

beat

we are lying in bed
together, you and
i, lying in the grassy
fields enchanted by the
sky. i say, look at the
sky, is it not lonely
today, and you laugh -
honey, you reply, the sky
is not alive and can
only be personified regally
and perfectly, as it really
is.
i run a dew-soaked hand
through your dew-soaked hair
and know that you are
wrong because i understand
the sky better than you
can, it is not perfect
and nothing ever is.

and you, you slip your fingers
into my hand, whisper look
what i gave you, i turn around
and see the sun in all its
blazing glory but i feel
it is suffering too and i
ask what is wrong and it
says it is ugly and un
loved and needs to lose
weight because maybe
if it were less fat and round
and imposing maybe
it would be happy

and my hands trembled,
you told me to breathe
- and my hands they
tremble, you tell
me to breathe and i
stutter the sun
has no skeleton if it
starves it will truly fade
away,

and you don't understand,
you know we can't live
without the sun but you can't
see the sun can't live
without itself and i can't
explain

because my eyes are open wide
but they were burned
by the sun

and i can no longer
see.
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Comments: 24

NicoleKeller [2011-12-12 00:17:24 +0000 UTC]

I adore the way your writing makes me think.

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towards-eternity In reply to NicoleKeller [2011-12-30 11:04:33 +0000 UTC]

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little-adder [2011-12-01 19:29:41 +0000 UTC]

I thought I commented on this...? D: I guess I did in my head. buh

Anyway, I love the personification of the sun, it's so interesting and well done. <3

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towards-eternity In reply to little-adder [2011-12-03 08:38:25 +0000 UTC]

thank you. <33 (:
and i'm sorry i've dropped off the face of the earth. i'm drowning in schoolwork, friend problems, lack-of-food-and-sleep, college apps, and just general stress and exhaustion. i'll be back and a proper friend again at some point.

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little-adder In reply to towards-eternity [2011-12-03 17:40:58 +0000 UTC]

No problem~ <3
-pokes you in the tummy- Don't ever think that you aren't a proper friend just because you're out of contact. My best friend and I barely speak more than three times a year, but that doesn't mean we aren't still friends. I understand that real life gets in the way, especially for you, and that doesn't make me love you any less. I will, however, tell you that you need more food and sleep, so don't forsake your well-being for other things. <3

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AlexandraKat [2011-11-23 00:00:41 +0000 UTC]

absolutely amazing

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towards-eternity In reply to AlexandraKat [2011-11-24 20:24:21 +0000 UTC]

thank you!!

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DamagedHomewrecker [2011-11-19 13:26:23 +0000 UTC]

and my hands trembled,
you told me to breathe
- and my hands they
tremble, you tell
me to breathe and i
stutter the sun
has no skeleton if it
starves it will truly fade
away,

that part right there, that stutters inside me. i dont know, i really feel that. its beautiful.

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towards-eternity In reply to DamagedHomewrecker [2011-11-26 20:22:33 +0000 UTC]

thanks a million love <3333

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Emma-Hyde [2011-11-19 08:43:21 +0000 UTC]

don't feel sorry for not getting back to everyone or everything on here. It's a rater beautiful piece in its own way and interesting thought how life is nothing but the only thing that makes good or evil matter is our choices.

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towards-eternity In reply to Emma-Hyde [2011-11-20 08:23:20 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Emma-Hyde In reply to towards-eternity [2011-11-20 08:29:49 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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LostInThought3624 [2011-11-19 07:59:03 +0000 UTC]

This is... *tries and fails to think of words*... just really beautiful.

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towards-eternity In reply to LostInThought3624 [2011-11-20 08:23:32 +0000 UTC]

thank you!!

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GamerDruid [2011-11-19 00:38:35 +0000 UTC]

We are pleased to inform you that your recent submission has been accepted to our gallery. Thank you for sharing this piece with all of us

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Texeo [2011-11-18 06:17:54 +0000 UTC]

i think i understand the emotions behind this. very touching.

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towards-eternity In reply to Texeo [2011-11-18 18:46:54 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Texeo In reply to towards-eternity [2011-11-19 01:24:45 +0000 UTC]

<3

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Pencil-Wolf [2011-11-17 22:00:34 +0000 UTC]

I love the different sort of feel that this has, and as always, how it all wraps up in the end, the little bits that get reconnected to other bits throughout the poem.

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towards-eternity In reply to Pencil-Wolf [2011-11-18 18:47:11 +0000 UTC]

thanks a million!! <33

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Pencil-Wolf In reply to towards-eternity [2011-11-20 22:04:56 +0000 UTC]

Welcome!

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Write4Me [2011-11-17 21:36:29 +0000 UTC]

you might be tired already of my repetitive comments, but i lack the adjectives to describe your work, and i fail to write how it makes me feel so i'll try to describe it in one word: perfect.
i don't know, and i know i'll never understand, where do you get such beautiful thoughts from and such stunning words to put them into paper (in this case, into screen) but i know that i love your writing and i'm sure that i always will.
beautiful work, as usual. <3

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towards-eternity In reply to Write4Me [2011-12-26 11:20:35 +0000 UTC]

i could never get tired of your comments. (= <33
thank you so much, really really really.

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Write4Me In reply to towards-eternity [2011-12-27 02:07:40 +0000 UTC]

i love you, i'll never get tired of commenting on your work <3 haha my pleasure, lovely.

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