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TrelDaWolf — Rueben - Circus Darkrai application

Published: 2013-04-19 14:43:53 +0000 UTC; Views: 7154; Favourites: 108; Downloads: 27
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Description 2ndEdit: I got in! If you want to rp just send me a note! Reuben would be very happy to chat ;3


Edit: I lengthened and changed up his past and personality! Hope you like~ /edit


Ahh he is finally done <3 I hope you like him

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Name: Reuben Kaltori
(Reuben is pronounced ROO-ben)

Age: Appears 20, is actually 72

Gender: Male

Pokémon: Glaceon

Nature: Adamant

Characteristic: Mischievous

Ability: Snow Cloak

Job: Knife thrower
“Knife throwing is an art, sport, combat skill, or variously an entertainment technique, involving an artist skilled in the art of throwing knives, the weapons thrown, and a target.” -courtesy of wikipedia

Faction: Etoile

History
That city was a poor…disgusting place. Full of depressed people who lead wretched lives- only to tread all over those who were even less fortunate than themselves. The poverty throughout the city was widespread, and the few who had money stayed well away from the slums and backstreets. This, is the world Reuben was born into. The youngest child of three, his family were not the poorest, but by no means financially sufficient and were hungry a lot of the time. His father was the only evolved member of the otherwise entirely Eevee household, and thus he worked at the Smelting Factory in the furnaces. Reuben’s mother wasn’t a very…careful mother. And let her children mostly do as they please. She and her daughters spent their days scavenging for things to sell as well as wear and eat. Reuben’s mother encouraged all her children to steal if it meant their stomachs wouldn’t hurt at night. With the tutorage of his avid elder sisters, Reuben became an excellent pick-pocket.
The family continued on like this for a while. Now and then young Reuben would catch glimpses of those with money- their colourful, clean clothes and flawless faces with shining eyes. To him they were beautiful. Wealth was beautiful.

Completely oblivious to what a ‘circus’ was, 13 year old Reuben was drawn to a haunting tune. It lead him through many side streets, through crowds and even a graveyard- searching for the source of the melody.
Reuben searched…until he came upon a well-dressed man. Tall, handsome, with ghostly white hair and a large top hat that took pride of place on the man’s head. In his hands was a small music box, which he was cranking slowly.
The small Eevee took a deep breath. Perhaps this was his chance… this man looked rich- if he could pinch something of worth, perhaps his sisters won’t have to take to the streets. Trembling and red faced, the boy crept up behind the strange gentleman.
Before Reuben could even reach out a trembling paw to touch the man’s pockets, he turned. The sudden movement startled Reuben and he fell back into the dirt of the graveyard.
“…” Eerily blue eyes bore into green for the longest time before he muttered the first words.
“You seem down on your luck, boy…”

Eyes full of fear, Reuben peered up at him. The wealthy man went on to tell him about magic, fantasy, a circus. A place where everyone’s dreams could come true and where no one could be sad nor hungry, for there were always sweets and stories to be shared.
Reuben felt his heart break, he knew he could never afford to visit such a wonderful place…

“Tell me… what is it you want most in the world? Perhaps…I will grant you a wish.”

Young Reuben was just a child. The tall man’s eyes gleamed with falsity but he couldn’t see it. All the innocent saw was a chance at the life he never had.

“I want…I w-want to be wealthy….I want my family to have lots of money…”

A grin slowly spread across the lips of ‘circus’ man.

“It is done..”

Reuben lay on the ground as he was offered a hand. The Eevee hesitated, before taking a hold of the man’s hand.

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And so, suddenly, his family came into riches beyond their wildest dreams. His father quit his job and his sisters and mother stopped their foraging.
For a short time, the family were over joyed. Each of them evolved, they ate three course meals together, bought fancy clothes with gold embroidery, but never once did they think of giving any of their money to those who still lived and died in the backstreets every day.
It did not take long until the money got to them all. His sisters grew vain, his father spent his life drinking and being drunk, and his mother found other means of…’escaping’ the current world.


A month of being wealthy, and Reuben heard that strange tune calling to him again. No sooner had he found and joined the strange man and his music box atop a roof, does he see that in the town square his family are in chains.
The now Glaceon Reuben moves to jump off and run to his family- but the man holds him back with a steely glare.
“Sit and watch what you brought upon your family…”
Unable to move or protest, the boy whimpers as his family are publicly executed one by one. Reuben screams questions at the man. Why is this happening? Why won’t the man tell him why his parents and sisters are being executed? What did he do to deserve this?

“I am Mr. Dark, Reuben Kaltori…you will do well to remember it. Come along child, we have work to do.”

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Growing up in the circus, Reuben quickly turned his childhood hobby of throwing sharp objects into a performance. With unmatched accuracy, he would pitch knives at berries thrown in the air or placed in precarious places- slicing them in half. His grace whilst doing so was impressive, and he used moves like ‘Ice shard’ and ‘Ice wind’ do aid his routine. Reuben was soon able to put on quite a show, and is quite content with the money he makes.
Despite the hatred Reuben has for the man who ‘did this to him’, his respect for Mr.Dark almost outweighs it. He intends to make a deal with the man to escape the circus- but until then, he will sit back, sharpen his blades and try to survive in this hellhole some call a fantasy.

Wish:
Reuben wished for wealth.
The immense amount of money Reuben’s family gained was stolen, and unfortunately they were convicted of grand theft. Being unable to repay what they had spent, the court deemed their deaths appropriate. Reuben believes it was Mr.Dark who ‘saved’ him from being found by the authorities, but actually it was his family who protected him. They furiously denied Reuben’s existence, covering his tracks with lies.
The public, abhorred at the arrogance of the Eevee family, demanded a public execution of them all. Their deaths weren’t necessary for the crimes they ‘committed’, but the authorities didn’t mind putting on a show for the starving public if it meant they wouldn’t revolt for at least one more day.


Personality:
A very immature Glaceon, Reuben loves to joke around and act like a kid. Depressed by his current ‘situation’, he sometimes takes it out on others in the form of teasing and/or pranks. Though a joker, he does have a real talent with his blades and is as accurate as they come.
He was slightly traumatized by watching his family’s executions and thus suffers from post-traumatic stress disorder. He will occasionally relive the event in his mind, and as much as he tries to repress the memory it remains vivid as ever.
If asked about his past, Reuben may draw a blank- asking the person who posed the question the same thing in an attempt to avoid answering.
Reuben is often animated when he talks, waving his hands around to emphasize statements. He can be arrogant, and is occasionally too daring with his routines- leading to a cut here and there. He loves to keep people in suspense, and is only reserved when conversation reaches an unpleasant topic.

Reuben doesn't believe in fate, the possibility of equality or karma- and has a very stubborn mindset. On a positive note, he is a very loyal friend and will stand by you when needed. Daft yet cunning at the same time in different situations, he has a bad habit of contradicting himself.

He hates to show fear, and is very self-conscious. Reuben strives to impress others (though he may deny it), and loves the cheer of an entertained crowd. He doesn't like it when people make assumptions of him, and will go out of his way to prove others wrong. The two main things he fears are heights, and a lot of fire (a small candle won’t bother him).

Having been part of the circus for so long, Reuben doesn't fear Mr.Dark. All he has for the man is respect and hatred. He looks forward to the day that he can escape the circus and regain his ‘soul’, however he is in no hurry to do so.

Likes: Sharp knives, waist coats, sweets, annoying people

Dislikes: Being treated like a child (though he acts like one), being told what to do, sour things, being hungry and raggedy clothing (it reminds him of his youth)

Move set:
Icy wind
Quick Attack
Ice Shard
Protect

Extra notes:
-Reuben is bisexual but leans towards liking men more.
-He has a strange fondness for carnival music and adores the haunting tunes played around the big top, often humming along when he can.
-He will do almost anything to make a friend laugh if they're upset.
- Reuben has many, many knives. Most of which are stored safely with the majority of his belongings, however, he will keep at least 4 on his person at all times.
-Damage his knives, and he'll damage you.
-Though hating Mr. Dark, Reuben seems to hold the man in very high regard.
-His pick-pocketing skills remain from his youth and he will steal the occasional item from other performers.
-On the off chance something goes wrong with his blades, he uses Protect to keep himself and spectators out of harm’s way.




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Art and character (c) *TrelDaWolf 2013
Pokemon (c) Nintendo


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Comments: 86

GlacyFluff [2016-12-18 23:54:51 +0000 UTC]

lol.

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slickcoolbuizle [2016-01-31 01:26:21 +0000 UTC]

nice work   wish I didn't have final fnatay 13 on the brain

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WitheredKey [2015-02-05 22:31:24 +0000 UTC]

Cool.

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HalloweenPanda [2015-01-26 09:17:53 +0000 UTC]

Hallo ^o^

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TrelDaWolf In reply to HalloweenPanda [2015-02-03 11:32:05 +0000 UTC]

hi!

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HalloweenPanda In reply to TrelDaWolf [2015-02-03 18:06:04 +0000 UTC]

I really like your character <3 If you are ever free,or wish to, I hope we can rp one day. .////v///. Only if you want to that is.

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TrelDaWolf In reply to HalloweenPanda [2015-02-10 14:23:02 +0000 UTC]

Awww I'd love to~ <3
Though I'm not sure I'd be much fun;; I have no idea what's going on in CD at the moment. I haven't been actively participating in it since like... march 2014

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HalloweenPanda In reply to TrelDaWolf [2015-02-10 16:08:40 +0000 UTC]

It's ok. We could just do a simple meetin of our characters no event. But if you don't feel comfortable about it I won't push it. Thank you very much for your time! ^.^

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TrelDaWolf In reply to HalloweenPanda [2015-02-11 02:16:59 +0000 UTC]

Okay sure we could do that ^^ Could you send the starting note please~?

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lopsidelibby [2013-06-13 17:27:40 +0000 UTC]

Y'know, Reuben is starting to become one of the most famous characters in Circus Darkrai. Good for you.

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TrelDaWolf In reply to lopsidelibby [2013-06-14 02:24:06 +0000 UTC]

Wow really? X3 Thank you so much

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Lukurio [2013-06-03 11:13:22 +0000 UTC]

whoaaaah he is soooooo coool!!! seriously this is probably the best glaceon anthro i have ever seen *u* his hair is perfect too!!

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TrelDaWolf In reply to Lukurio [2013-06-06 14:31:08 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much~!

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RaeNoir [2013-05-24 13:55:13 +0000 UTC]

I have to say you're art style is one of my favorite. He is awesome

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TrelDaWolf In reply to RaeNoir [2013-05-24 23:57:34 +0000 UTC]

Oh thank you so much!
That means a lot <33

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RaeNoir In reply to TrelDaWolf [2013-05-25 00:04:50 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome
//le pets adorable eevee

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Shibikii [2013-05-23 06:26:38 +0000 UTC]

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TrelDaWolf In reply to Shibikii [2013-05-23 07:15:07 +0000 UTC]

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Shibikii In reply to TrelDaWolf [2013-05-23 07:27:07 +0000 UTC]

We should totes rp

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TrelDaWolf In reply to Shibikii [2013-05-23 07:54:10 +0000 UTC]

omg yes please rightnow

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Shibikii In reply to TrelDaWolf [2013-05-23 09:50:53 +0000 UTC]

Ohohoho notes then ~?

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TrelDaWolf In reply to Shibikii [2013-05-23 10:21:23 +0000 UTC]

Yep <3

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A-Lasting-Dream [2013-05-22 22:45:32 +0000 UTC]


Very handsome character you have, I love him! So happy to have you in the group! I look forward to seeing more art from you

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TrelDaWolf In reply to A-Lasting-Dream [2013-05-23 04:39:28 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much X3 I'm very happy to be a part of it <3

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A-Lasting-Dream In reply to TrelDaWolf [2013-05-23 12:53:53 +0000 UTC]


You're more than welcome! I'm happy you're here too!

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Shibikii [2013-05-02 07:01:44 +0000 UTC]

Ahhh your character is just so precious~ I love his over-all design, especially his hair <33

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TrelDaWolf In reply to Shibikii [2013-05-02 07:28:13 +0000 UTC]

I was literally just about to comment on your character ;w;
Allen is adorableeeeeeeee //dies of cuteness

Thank you so much <3

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Shibikii In reply to TrelDaWolf [2013-05-02 07:36:34 +0000 UTC]

kjdhfr thank youuu~! <33 I'm glad you like him omg ; v ;

You're very welcome~! ; u ;

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TrelDaWolf In reply to Shibikii [2013-05-02 08:05:31 +0000 UTC]

If we get into We should rp <3<3

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Shibikii In reply to TrelDaWolf [2013-05-02 08:20:21 +0000 UTC]

Oh yes we totally should <33 I look forward to it~

Though I'm a little worried since I recently discovered that, excluding Allen, there are two more Absols applying ;-;

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TrelDaWolf In reply to Shibikii [2013-05-02 08:45:11 +0000 UTC]

I know I was afraid to tell you ;3;
I worry for Reuben too- there are tons of Knife throwers applying

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Shibikii In reply to TrelDaWolf [2013-05-02 09:30:57 +0000 UTC]

I really hope that we both get in~!

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TrelDaWolf In reply to Shibikii [2013-05-02 10:33:59 +0000 UTC]

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ghyn [2013-05-01 03:08:39 +0000 UTC]

Wow, I did not know a glaceon could look that good~

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TrelDaWolf In reply to ghyn [2013-05-02 01:01:14 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! X3

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ghyn In reply to TrelDaWolf [2013-05-02 01:44:34 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome~

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Melodious-X [2013-04-26 06:03:54 +0000 UTC]

He's...he's magnificent oAo

*plays with that hair*

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TrelDaWolf In reply to Melodious-X [2013-04-26 09:32:33 +0000 UTC]

Hehe <3<3
thank you so much~

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castrumfluminis [2013-04-24 20:24:56 +0000 UTC]

can u make me one?

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TrelDaWolf In reply to castrumfluminis [2013-04-25 00:32:13 +0000 UTC]

Make you what?

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castrumfluminis In reply to TrelDaWolf [2013-04-25 00:45:51 +0000 UTC]

circus darkrai. i dont have a tablet, and thats how i do my best art

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TrelDaWolf In reply to castrumfluminis [2013-04-25 00:56:04 +0000 UTC]

I'm sorry, D: all art for apps must be drawn by you alone according to the rules [link]

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castrumfluminis In reply to TrelDaWolf [2013-04-25 01:22:59 +0000 UTC]

oh, ill ask my friend if she can bring over her tablet tomorrow

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castrumfluminis [2013-04-22 19:53:52 +0000 UTC]

so... much... detail... *faints*

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TrelDaWolf In reply to castrumfluminis [2013-04-24 06:47:36 +0000 UTC]

xD

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castrumfluminis In reply to TrelDaWolf [2013-04-24 11:18:17 +0000 UTC]

Reuben gained 20 EXP!

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spiderliing666 [2013-04-22 16:52:41 +0000 UTC]

I really like the way his wish backfires- you this sometimes when people when the lottery and then lose all the money- so I did find this very realistic and I like it. I like his cocky personality, but I would take another pass at him- What does he fear? What does he love? What are his hopes- if any- for the future? Does he fear for his safety ever? Or is he a nihilist?

There are also a number of other knife throwers applying, so just be aware of that.

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TrelDaWolf In reply to spiderliing666 [2013-04-24 06:47:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for your feedback! I have now updated the artist's comments with new information :3
I really love the idea of this group <3 I hope for the best!

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sIurpuff [2013-04-21 22:04:18 +0000 UTC]

I shall critique your application!

Wish/History


You separate the paragraphs a bit choppily, and there are a few grammar mistakes like so:

His father became the laziest drunk of a man
His father became a lazy drunk of a man

You also cut off unexpectedly when you mention his mother; why is that? Ellipses have only three periods in them, there is no need to add another.

I would not recommend putting HTML coding like subscript onto applications such as this; italicizing and or bolding for emphasis can be used for that effect better if you want.

...I don't know what time era takes place during the time of Rueben's wish, but normally stealing that much money would not warrant in a public death sentence. I would look more into that to make sure what you're putting down makes sense; or else it may come off as "over the top drama" to some people.

Hm, that's it? I feel like you left out a few things, there was a lot you could have elaborated on too. I suggest going back and adding more details perhaps to Rueben's childhood, his relationship to his late family, and what was going on with him and his family during their wealth period. Other than that, Rueben's biography looks pretty bare.



Personality

Hm, Rueben seems interesting enough. I wish you would have gone more indepth and fleshed out his character. Be careful when you write a traumatized/depressed/mentally unstable character also. Judging what you have it's moving Rueben to the "cliche" area as it's nothing I haven't seen before. If you're really going to go to that route, research it.

Also the knives bit has nothing to do with his personality, more suited for the "Extra Notes".



*Overall*

The art looks great and clean! Rueben's design looks fantastic, I love old fashioned Victorian-era clothing and you managed to get it spot on.

You managed to add in nice little tibits for Rueben; especially his move set. Did you add in "Ice Shard" as a reference to his job/specialty on purpose? If so then it's a nice touch.

His wish and it's consequences are fair enough.

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Choppy paragraphing; I suggest seperating his "Wish" and his "History.

The sudden mention of his mother is a bit too abrupt; it's her only mention throughout Rueben's bio.

Too little information; not enough detail to support.

His personality is cliche, I recommend adding more to that as well. Try anything like look up lists personality traits or generators to flesh out his character, maybe even put down a list of positive and negative traits for organization. If you want to make a character who is mentally ill then it's best to research it for credibility.



I hope this critique helped you somewhat! Any comments?

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TrelDaWolf In reply to sIurpuff [2013-04-21 23:26:38 +0000 UTC]

Wow! That is definitely the most in depth critique I have ever received, thank you so much!

I was so afraid Reuben's story and personality were edging on being cliche- I will certainly attempt to deepen his background. I didn't want to go down the 'mentally unstable' route but I figured if he watched his family die he should have some lasting damage? I'm not sure- I might do some reaserch on post traumatic stress disorder.
About his mother, the second ellipses was an attempt to leave mystery surrounding her but I agree perhaps I left a little too much unsaid xD

Again, thank you so much for taking the time to go over my app like this, it means a lot!
Would you mind if I asked you to look over it again once I have revised everything?

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