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WoodenbulletsBreak — traped with no where to go
Published: 2004-08-16 21:46:29 +0000 UTC; Views: 158; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 1
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Tears littered the ground again and againComes the day when I’ll be gone my only friend
If I died before I woke
You would understand those words I spoke
The saints have left me and said goodbye
The fear of dying leaves me thinking
If I jumped right now would I wake up blinking
Wondering if life would be the same
Or are we still stuck in this sick game
But then again if we aren’t
I guess I’ll play the parinoid part
I can’t help the thoughts that run through my head
I wish I could just hit rewind instead
This machine of hate drills farther and farther
I guess I am just a little off centered
Irrationality clouts their minds
But I know what’s best
The end of myself will correct all mistakes
You don’t know it now but all is soon to become clear
Your all better off left in the dark that I know
I’m tired of playing this fictional show
It’s wearing me down
The end is coming just you wait
I hope you understand this simple message
It’s just a dream of fantastical proportions
Or a memory all the same
Of past days already gone
A time of someones thoughts and wishes
Written in a book that’s a secert to all that are close
For a monster I’ve become alone and lost
Fighting inner demons
But I know the battles already been lost
But I’m still standing
I haven’t broken
Slowly cracking around the edges
As time passes all feelings go numb
As I drift away
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Comments: 11
This is a really amazing piece. It's a lot more polished then some of your previous works too. It's just an amazing expression of emotions. Although it's free verse it has a nice flow to it and the content is very relatable... unfortunately.
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ya I started using spell check but I don't really like how poetry is supposed to be formed I just like writing what comes to mind but thanks for the fav
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I respect those who can write well in a restricted form of poetry but I find that the most heartfelt poetry is free verse. And yeah, this is free verse but it does have a rhythym and rhyme of its own that makes it good to read. A lot of people can write about a subject but it's the presentation that sets it apart... 
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well thanks for commenting on my work i hope you enjoy it all
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i agree fully with hallie, you are who you are and you are amazing... you have a humor about you that just lights up a day or sets me to laughing when i may not be in the greatest of moods. you are pretty too, not many men can say that hon... i loved the poem and you too, remember that always, you are loved by many... tata...
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i fucking hate it when people use "gay" as an adjective, konnar...
anyways, this poem gave me goosebumps, paul. it gave me goosebumps because of the way it was written, it's beautiful in its own dark way. another reason it gave me goosebumps, though, is because it depresses me. i've tried to bring you up from thinking that way, but, obviously, nothing's working.
paul boy, the parties would not be complete without you. tonight at the fair wouldnt' have been nearly as much fun without you. that was the most enjoyable time i've ever had on the ring of fire just becuase you kept yelling "OH SWEET FUCKING JEEZEZ!" then screaming your head off. you had me laughing 'til the tears were streaming down my face. then on the ferris wheel, i kind of expected it to be a romantic time for me and erik, but you made it a fun, laughing time by screaming "ERIK!" every time you saw him. I loved it. my face still hurts from smiling so much. i know you say you have to sense of self or individuality, but you have more than you think. no one can be a poser and be as fucking funny as you are. i'm envious of how hilarious and what a riot you are. i wish i could show you just how wonderful you are, or have a recording of how many times i've said "dear god i love that kid" in reference to you. you're very much loved, and if you died, you'd be greatly missed...i love you, paul.
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ya sorry about the whole ferris wheel thing and I will try to stop the whole me dying thing from happening
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why are you sorry about the ferris wheel thing? it was so fucking funny! i thoroughly enjoyed it, paul. and i'm glad that you're seeing to it that that whole dying thing isn't gonna happen any time soon. i'm kind of fond of ya.
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damn
that is really ....
damn man you know i m always here for you i love you man (hederosexually)
this is soo amazing i cant wow i cant even make a gay joke about it
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oh, paul... that thoroughly depressed me even more than i was before i read it... feel less "drifty", man..
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