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Published: 2008-09-16 02:34:34 +0000 UTC; Views: 525; Favourites: 7; Downloads: 5
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Description shorten my life, you've shortened your hair and mayhaps, mayhaps the thread of mortality hung somewhere in that middle line between your golden locks and my soul.

I thought, you thought, well, I thought you might've said hello. You might've thought, well, you might've thought I said hello, it was goodbye for the last time, I thought you might've said hello it was goodbye.

and there's something in a snowflake that makes us think, it's not so hard to dissappear in the sun. Just melt away like layers of snow and snow down to a nail file.

Hey Oh.

these prison locks are ridiculously easy, for something so hard to break. You don't know pain till you're down on the floor clutching your heart and soul together as your mind goes bat crazy with your head, reeling, melting, breaking down to cherry powder. Til you're down on the bathroom floor screaming whispers of "Eloi, Eloi, Lama Sabbachtni".

and you don't die.

It's so unfair, you think you've lost it all and then they take your mind. You think they've taken everything and then they take your body. You think they'll take everything and then they leave you just your heart in a doll's frail body and the soul of a skewered harlequin, misplaced button eyes, cross-stitched immobile joints.

and I thought you would've said hello. It was goodbye.

Hey Oh.

Look, I'll give you a cheese omelet and you'd dig it if you weren't lactose intolerant. These forks are made to tear us up and eat our hearts and break our bones down to snowflakes. What's a nail file?

Well we were splinters together on someone's skin, well I'll tell you what that means in another life when we're both old dogs on his porch.

but Hey Oh.

I've forgotten, you don't know what pain really is til they've taken away your words, nouns, verbs, adjectives and all til all you are is not even nonentity. Isn't that what they call nirvana these days?

Anyways, we've got to get out of here.

but hey oh.

you're already gone.
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Comments: 33

onexwomanxarmy [2008-10-11 04:57:16 +0000 UTC]

This piece really got to me. Kinda made me shudder. Amazing work, I'm glad I stumbled upon your gallery .

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y0urstalker In reply to onexwomanxarmy [2008-10-11 15:32:29 +0000 UTC]

mayhaps.

I sort of fluctuate.

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onexwomanxarmy In reply to y0urstalker [2008-10-11 15:51:59 +0000 UTC]

Hah, don't be so modest! Your work is very good.

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ColonelFitz [2008-09-25 03:08:03 +0000 UTC]

Haha. Writing an essay is...boring. I wrote one in class today, though, we had to...the prompt are always insanely stupid...
This is an interesting idea. I like the way it narrows down. The images you invoke are a little disjointed, which I think really adds to the feeling of desperation in the piece. This would make an interesting song...

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livingcomforteagle [2008-09-19 21:00:45 +0000 UTC]

oh dear lord, this was kind of fantastic.

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y0urstalker In reply to livingcomforteagle [2008-09-19 22:03:13 +0000 UTC]

haha, but just kind of I think.

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livingcomforteagle In reply to y0urstalker [2008-09-20 13:43:31 +0000 UTC]

LIES



i have got to stop putting "kind of" in my sentences >>; it throws off what i want to say.

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y0urstalker In reply to livingcomforteagle [2008-09-20 16:54:32 +0000 UTC]

same with my username but I wouldn't change it for the world. Okay, maybe for the world or a good deal of money... okay maybe there are a lot of things I would sell my username for but you get the idea.

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livingcomforteagle In reply to y0urstalker [2008-09-22 21:19:11 +0000 UTC]

I WILL GIVE YOU THE WORLD FOR YOUR USERNAME

Y/N


CHOOSE RIGHT NOW OR THE OFFER DIES

COME ON LET'S DO THIS

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y0urstalker In reply to livingcomforteagle [2008-09-23 00:44:20 +0000 UTC]

I've grown rather fond of this username and I can't do much with the whole world. after all,
no one wants everything they want, not really.

So goodbye world, for now, I think I'll smell you later.

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YouInventedMe [2008-09-17 15:12:04 +0000 UTC]

I know it says prose
but this formed and flows
like a poem


good stuff


xo!

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y0urstalker In reply to YouInventedMe [2008-09-19 06:24:07 +0000 UTC]

your whole comment makes up the syllables to a haiku.

I-know-it-says-prose
but-this-formed-and-flows-like-a
poem-good-stuff-x-o!

0.o

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YouInventedMe In reply to y0urstalker [2008-09-19 06:46:42 +0000 UTC]

haha

fantastic observation, my friend



xo!

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Out-Of-Spite [2008-09-16 16:09:01 +0000 UTC]

lol
it's always interesting to seeing what's going to pop out when you're supposed to be writing about other things.

And yours tend to be the most interesting and thought-provoking. I love it

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Eareph [2008-09-16 03:35:58 +0000 UTC]

hmmm... i dont know how to write an essay either so i just put words together like now. this is really crazy and random|i like chickin| but i like it.

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y0urstalker In reply to Eareph [2008-09-16 03:57:35 +0000 UTC]

no, it's just loosely correlated.

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Eareph In reply to y0urstalker [2008-09-16 04:08:13 +0000 UTC]

Right i gotcha. it was good though.

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Mandalore13 [2008-09-16 02:50:22 +0000 UTC]

After Mark? - You should turn this in and see what you get. I'm sure they'd be impressed with it, I sure as hell am.

-Mandalore

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y0urstalker In reply to Mandalore13 [2008-09-16 03:03:23 +0000 UTC]

lastly, it's surrealistic as shit and some schools don't really appreciate that.

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Mandalore13 In reply to y0urstalker [2008-09-16 03:21:49 +0000 UTC]

So? Its your work, and it is beautiful - id turn it in and see what they say.

-Mandalore

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y0urstalker In reply to Mandalore13 [2008-09-16 02:58:03 +0000 UTC]

1.) It's not an essay
2.) it has no argument
3.) Mark is my first writing piece on dA.

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Mandalore13 In reply to y0urstalker [2008-09-16 03:03:06 +0000 UTC]

So what if its not an essay. And it has perfect argument...with yourself?

-Mandalore

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y0urstalker In reply to Mandalore13 [2008-09-16 03:05:38 +0000 UTC]

not really, that isn't an argument so much as a point and the person I'm speaking to isn't me, it's a person who symbolizes many things to me.

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Mandalore13 In reply to y0urstalker [2008-09-16 03:21:08 +0000 UTC]

Is the person real? Or am I imagining it?

-Mandalore

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y0urstalker In reply to Mandalore13 [2008-09-16 03:54:21 +0000 UTC]

it's a real person.

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Mandalore13 In reply to y0urstalker [2008-09-16 04:03:37 +0000 UTC]

May I meet them?

-Mandalore

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y0urstalker In reply to Mandalore13 [2008-09-16 04:11:11 +0000 UTC]

not on dA

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Mandalore13 In reply to y0urstalker [2008-09-16 04:15:28 +0000 UTC]

Can I come there and meet him then?

-Mandalore

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y0urstalker In reply to Mandalore13 [2008-09-16 04:16:53 +0000 UTC]

her, and no. I don't like stalkers. haha.

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Mandalore13 In reply to y0urstalker [2008-09-16 04:42:20 +0000 UTC]

But cant I stalk you?

-Mandalore

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y0urstalker In reply to Mandalore13 [2008-09-16 04:47:46 +0000 UTC]

in some ways, you already do don't you?

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Mandalore13 In reply to y0urstalker [2008-09-16 05:00:26 +0000 UTC]

Is it wrong to be appreciative and to look up to a superior in a chosen field of expressing one's self? Even if the person in said question seems not to accept the thanks and friendship of one's self?

-Mandalore

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y0urstalker In reply to Mandalore13 [2008-09-16 05:04:33 +0000 UTC]

haha, I "stalk" people all the time, I'm not condemning you.

but really, if you're looking for someone like that you should see he's me to you to me.

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