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Published: 2004-06-21 21:41:46 +0000 UTC; Views: 76; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 10
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i want to hurt youtwist your mind
write my name in your blood
hear your plee
watch you beg for mercy
i can't deny your betrayal
can't disclude your disgust
i feel your malady
i don't want to feel anymore
i hate this apperceiviation
reminds me how i'm not existent
how i'm bloodless, breathless
you just let me manifest, betide
you promised you'd save me
i promised i'd enshrine you in respect
i closed your eyes
i kissed your battered, dead lips
i threw you in my wardrobe
sat back, and let it all sink in
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Comments: 13
i feel your malady
i don't want to feel anymore
I like this line a lot, the whole poem is very powerful. I love it. THe ending is really great too!
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thank you so much!
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Great work, but be sure to watch your word choices. At times, the words seem pompous ("apperceiviation") and detract from the instant understanding as a person reads.
The emotion certainly stirs. Quite an amusing end, as well. Made me smile.
Well-done.
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thank you yet again for the compliment
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oo...i like this..ALOT!!!! 
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i'm glad you like it
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wow. reminds me how much i missed your writing, too. i like this a lot. it has some great images, beautiful words, i like it a whole lot. can't wait to see more from you.
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well thank you!..yay my first comment on my first deviation since i've been back..
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welcome!!
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lol...i can't cry so i won't..
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